Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Ooooh, this is a good 5-7-5 Passion contest entry. Enough to get many hot and heavy under the collar. Great picture to add to the sensual nature of this well written piece. Good job and best of luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023

Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

nice done erotically charged haiku senryu like poem about passion and all that it evokes in people. I like the last line the best. well done could be part of a longer poem in my opinion.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Passion writing prompt contest.

I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.

Good syllables count and connection between lines.

Goodluck

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

A romantic poem that brings romance to the surface. I wonder if the lady wore heavenly scent perfume. I really don't know what else to say other than, perhaps its his soulmate in the picture?

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from BermyBye50

Excellent

This is an excellent entry for the 5-7-5 Passion contest. Passionate foreplay alludes from the 1st word of the opening line thru the last word of the 3rd line. The imagery painted with these words is undeniable and perfectly matches the artwork provided. Well done.

All the best in the contest,

Eugene

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you so very much

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a sensual and passionate write with no questions as to what is going on here and your words service to catch one's breath here with anticipation, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

The image pairs well with your words. The woman's scent sparks lust and passion - but not necessarily deep love. One hopes that that is also included! Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your 5/7/5 poem- good picture presentation- flows well- tells of overdue feeling for contact with the opposite sex- let me give you my own impression? Womanly sent- okay in the positive sense- however "drained" to me implying- taken away'. Might imply a negative reaction to her scent? - draining long awaited urges for love's fulfillment- theretofore- how would "sparked' work for you- ? Just an idea - good job - AP

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023

Thank you, I took your advice, I was going for a different outcome, but see what you mean

Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig

Excellent

This is a good entry into the 5-7-5 Passion Contest. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. I feel in the last line you need to make lusts a possessive} lust's fulfillment. It will not change your syllable count.
Your text is balanced well in the poem box. You visual is just okay. The expressions of the persons in your visual are flat. There is no lust depicted in their faces or positioning. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023

Thank you so very much, I have revisited my work

reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 17-Mar-2023

I looked and the visual is for sure better for Spanish dancing is a passionate form of dancing.
You are welcome.
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