A Native American Heroine
Nancy Ward, a peace maker between the Cherokee and the U.S..24 total reviews
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
If I had a six-star, you would receive it.
Very nicely written and informative and well researched.
Nancy Ward, what an incredible woman. Our nation is full of wonderful people with stories that should be told like this one.
Thank you so much for the great read.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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If I had a six-star, you would receive it.
Very nicely written and informative and well researched.
Nancy Ward, what an incredible woman. Our nation is full of wonderful people with stories that should be told like this one.
Thank you so much for the great read.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Rebecca. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I appreciate you saying you would give it a six if you had one.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry was well thought out and presented,
Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. The woman you chose
wasn't in any textbook I know of. I learned so much about
Nancy Ward. Your story progressed at a great ace with great
information on her life and accomplishments.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Your contest entry was well thought out and presented,
Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. The woman you chose
wasn't in any textbook I know of. I learned so much about
Nancy Ward. Your story progressed at a great ace with great
information on her life and accomplishments.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you Jan, There is quite a bit about her on google. I had not heard of her before until I the sign about her monument and museum.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a detailed and comprehensive account of a brave woman who is not known by many. You included all the major accomplishment in her life, showing how remarkable she was. She should surely be celebrated. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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This is a detailed and comprehensive account of a brave woman who is not known by many. You included all the major accomplishment in her life, showing how remarkable she was. She should surely be celebrated. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you for a excellent review and comments. I appreciate you reviewing it.
Comment from Faith Williams
Thank you so much for sharing the incredible life of Native American Cherokee, Nancy Ward. I had never heard of her before. What a truly amazing woman! I especially liked the part when she was surprised at the lack of white women with the authority to speak on their behalf.
A few suggestions to consider:
'... and she became a political leader of her people and was the only woman to have a vote (on) their council (meeting.)' The last part of this sentence is a little awkward. You might consider adding 'on' and deleting 'meeting.' Or add 'at' and make 'meeting' plural.
'In the late 1758's, Nanyehi married an Irish trader, Bryant Ward.' Maybe 'In late 1758... '
'There is (a) monument and museum there to honor her memory.' Maybe add an 'a' so the sentence flows better.
Thank you again. I appreciate you sharing with us about a wonderful woman. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for sharing the incredible life of Native American Cherokee, Nancy Ward. I had never heard of her before. What a truly amazing woman! I especially liked the part when she was surprised at the lack of white women with the authority to speak on their behalf.
A few suggestions to consider:
'... and she became a political leader of her people and was the only woman to have a vote (on) their council (meeting.)' The last part of this sentence is a little awkward. You might consider adding 'on' and deleting 'meeting.' Or add 'at' and make 'meeting' plural.
'In the late 1758's, Nanyehi married an Irish trader, Bryant Ward.' Maybe 'In late 1758... '
'There is (a) monument and museum there to honor her memory.' Maybe add an 'a' so the sentence flows better.
Thank you again. I appreciate you sharing with us about a wonderful woman. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Faith. I really appreciate the great review and thank you also for taking the time to point the things that needed some work. I'm always happy when reviewer are willing to do that for me.
Comment from royowen
Well you certainly explained the Nancy Ward name. Being a full blood Cherokee Indian and an ambassador for her people doubtless she wielded a great deal of influence and quite obviously survived very well indeed, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : Nenuaki picked (up) his rifle. 2: Speeches at meeting(s)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Well you certainly explained the Nancy Ward name. Being a full blood Cherokee Indian and an ambassador for her people doubtless she wielded a great deal of influence and quite obviously survived very well indeed, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Typo : Nenuaki picked (up) his rifle. 2: Speeches at meeting(s)
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and for picking up on the spags so I could correct them.
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Well done
Comment from WalkerMan
Thank you for posting this biography of Nancy Ward, of whom I knew nothing before I read it. Her story certainly was different from those of other leaders in those days. This is well written, but the sixth star is for enlightening me about people who are numerous where I live, including a friend living next door. :)) -- Mike
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you for posting this biography of Nancy Ward, of whom I knew nothing before I read it. Her story certainly was different from those of other leaders in those days. This is well written, but the sixth star is for enlightening me about people who are numerous where I live, including a friend living next door. :)) -- Mike
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you for a great review. There are quite a few Native American's near me as well. It seems almost everyone has a bit of their DNA mixed with their European blood. I sincerely appreciate the six stars.
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You are most welcome. I try to hold at least one Sixer in case I find a post worthy of it late in the week, and yours qualified. I read all posts by you and others I follow, but have time only to use my week's Sixes (and sometimes not even all of them). Your post ought to do well in its contest. :)) -- Mike
Comment from Wendy G
A fascinating story, and a well-written one. She certainly had power and influence and made a significant difference for her people. It's a pity that her vision became reality and led to the Trail of Tears. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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A fascinating story, and a well-written one. She certainly had power and influence and made a significant difference for her people. It's a pity that her vision became reality and led to the Trail of Tears. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thank you Wendy. I apprecitate you reviewing my story. Yes, she was an amazing woman and it is no wonder her people loved her and promoted her to such a high honor.
Comment from jmdg1954
Thank you for an interesting submission into this contest for Women's History Month. I have not read one I didn't like!
Interesting how a women came to have significant power within an Indian culture. I was never aware of that.
Thank you for entering and sharing.
John
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Thank you for an interesting submission into this contest for Women's History Month. I have not read one I didn't like!
Interesting how a women came to have significant power within an Indian culture. I was never aware of that.
Thank you for entering and sharing.
John
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Thank you, John. I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
The content on this piece merits six stars. I thought it was extremely educational. I liked hearing about Nancy or Nanyehi Ward. What a striking painting you found of her as well. I only found the tiniest of fixes to make in the text:
My original interest in this lady came about when a friend and I drove by a highway sign pointing the way toward a memorial for Nancy Ward.
I would put a comma after the word 'sign' just to break up the length of this sentence, since it is a modifying phrase.
Since this is blind entry, I'll leave that story for another time.
Insert the article 'a' in front of blind entry.
Nancy Ward was a Native America Cherokee
Change to Native American Cherokee
Her original Cherokee name was Nanyehi meaning "one who goes about."
Add a comma after Nanyehi
When she was a young teenager, she married Tsu-la or "Kingfisher," who the member of the Deer Clan.
Add 'was a' and take out 'the' in front of member of the Deer Clan.
I was surprised to learn the Indian were fighting with riffles.
I am pretty sure you mean rifles. Riffles is an entirely different word, meaning to look through a book quickly or else the rough parts of a river. It shows up again later on when you say Nancy took her husband's rifle.
Nancy made many impressive speeches at meeting between the US Army leaders and the Cherokee always trying to negotiate peace.
I would insert a comma after Cherokee to break up that long sentence, just to show that is a modifying phrase.
when so many of the Cherokee would be forced from their homes and were marched on a westward migration under President Andrew Jackson
This is a change to make the verb tenses match. I would change 'were marched' to just 'marched' as there is the antecedent verb 'would' there showing it as a future tense.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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The content on this piece merits six stars. I thought it was extremely educational. I liked hearing about Nancy or Nanyehi Ward. What a striking painting you found of her as well. I only found the tiniest of fixes to make in the text:
My original interest in this lady came about when a friend and I drove by a highway sign pointing the way toward a memorial for Nancy Ward.
I would put a comma after the word 'sign' just to break up the length of this sentence, since it is a modifying phrase.
Since this is blind entry, I'll leave that story for another time.
Insert the article 'a' in front of blind entry.
Nancy Ward was a Native America Cherokee
Change to Native American Cherokee
Her original Cherokee name was Nanyehi meaning "one who goes about."
Add a comma after Nanyehi
When she was a young teenager, she married Tsu-la or "Kingfisher," who the member of the Deer Clan.
Add 'was a' and take out 'the' in front of member of the Deer Clan.
I was surprised to learn the Indian were fighting with riffles.
I am pretty sure you mean rifles. Riffles is an entirely different word, meaning to look through a book quickly or else the rough parts of a river. It shows up again later on when you say Nancy took her husband's rifle.
Nancy made many impressive speeches at meeting between the US Army leaders and the Cherokee always trying to negotiate peace.
I would insert a comma after Cherokee to break up that long sentence, just to show that is a modifying phrase.
when so many of the Cherokee would be forced from their homes and were marched on a westward migration under President Andrew Jackson
This is a change to make the verb tenses match. I would change 'were marched' to just 'marched' as there is the antecedent verb 'would' there showing it as a future tense.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Crystal. You spent a lot of time pointing out things I will and I truely appreciate it. You are an excellent reviewed.
I pleased you liked my story.
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Sure thing! I probably have a tendency to spend more time on Native American history since we used to own over 20,000 acres, some of which was traversed by Shoshone Indians in Wyoming hundreds of years ago.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Dang it, I don't have six left. If I did, I would give a five for the writing about this interesting woman, and the six-star would go to you for digging out this nugget of history and bringing it alive for your readers. Outstanding job. Terry.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Dang it, I don't have six left. If I did, I would give a five for the writing about this interesting woman, and the six-star would go to you for digging out this nugget of history and bringing it alive for your readers. Outstanding job. Terry.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
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Thank you,Terry. I will take the virtual six and say I appreciate it. I enjoyed reading your comments.
