Weight of the World
Heavy burdens weighing me down.26 total reviews
Comment from Carlos' girl
Just a few corrections to start:
Paragraph 2: should be Folgers. Not folders.
Paragraph 7: should be denomination. Not dominations.
The fact that things rhyme does not necessarily make for a great write. Some of the verses are truly cringeworthy though they do indeed rhyme. Like : you cant swim through adversity when you have no fins. Really? Maybe less is better when the rhymes are ludicrous.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Just a few corrections to start:
Paragraph 2: should be Folgers. Not folders.
Paragraph 7: should be denomination. Not dominations.
The fact that things rhyme does not necessarily make for a great write. Some of the verses are truly cringeworthy though they do indeed rhyme. Like : you cant swim through adversity when you have no fins. Really? Maybe less is better when the rhymes are ludicrous.
Comment Written 23-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thanks for your feedback.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I can relate to your stress and heavy burden. You mentioned TJ Watt, the Defensive Player who was injured several times and the lack of support.
Well done
Gypsy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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I can relate to your stress and heavy burden. You mentioned TJ Watt, the Defensive Player who was injured several times and the lack of support.
Well done
Gypsy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you my friend.
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
Wow! I truly hope you are not actually encountering the weight of the world you describe! What a descriptive, imaginative, well written poem!!! Again, WOW!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Wow! I truly hope you are not actually encountering the weight of the world you describe! What a descriptive, imaginative, well written poem!!! Again, WOW!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thanks for the exceptional review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Depression is becoming the way of the world these days. People not having enough money to pay the bills and feed their children. Some losing their homes and entire families in the earthquakes, and fires. I'm afraid it's going to get worse before it ever gets better, if it ever does. Keep fighting, Charity. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Depression is becoming the way of the world these days. People not having enough money to pay the bills and feed their children. Some losing their homes and entire families in the earthquakes, and fires. I'm afraid it's going to get worse before it ever gets better, if it ever does. Keep fighting, Charity. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Yes indeed. Good to hear from you.
Comment from BermyBye50
Charity,
This is an excellent Free Form Poem. You have a special gift for creating thought-provoking spoken word poetry with powerful messages that universally resonate.
Note: Use the advanced editor link and make the text bigger and change the font. It will improve readability.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Charity,
This is an excellent Free Form Poem. You have a special gift for creating thought-provoking spoken word poetry with powerful messages that universally resonate.
Note: Use the advanced editor link and make the text bigger and change the font. It will improve readability.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Aussie
Yes, I'm in a position to swap. Constant chronic pain from losing my leg. Not being able to walk. Losing my sight. How's that for a swap? You appear to be suffering from depression. "Fear, the only way out is through." Think of someone else that is doing it tougher than you. Focus on getting well by passing your burdens to the Lord. "He ain't heavy, he's my brother." K xx
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Yes, I'm in a position to swap. Constant chronic pain from losing my leg. Not being able to walk. Losing my sight. How's that for a swap? You appear to be suffering from depression. "Fear, the only way out is through." Think of someone else that is doing it tougher than you. Focus on getting well by passing your burdens to the Lord. "He ain't heavy, he's my brother." K xx
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thanks for your review. Good to hear from you. I'm sure you could swap your physical pain with mines. Maybe not emotional.
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When I read your work, my heart fills will love for you. We can't look back and even tho' we are battered and bruised, God said he would never give us more than we could handle. "Let go and let God." He cares so much for you. Love, Kay xx
Comment from Boogienights
Sometimes life can be too much to bear, but always remember that it's still worth the effort to keep going. Everyone has had dark times, but I still believe in the light at the tunnels end. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Sometimes life can be too much to bear, but always remember that it's still worth the effort to keep going. Everyone has had dark times, but I still believe in the light at the tunnels end. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem as always is quite powerful and descriptive enough to understand, written in a laud voice calling for support to make less the burden life places on man. I am glad to know you still have faith in God which will surely relieve the weight. Well done, dear Charity. Thanks for sharing your word. Lol.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Your poem as always is quite powerful and descriptive enough to understand, written in a laud voice calling for support to make less the burden life places on man. I am glad to know you still have faith in God which will surely relieve the weight. Well done, dear Charity. Thanks for sharing your word. Lol.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the amazing review.
Comment from Ulla
To me this poem is a cry for help in a world that is becoming more and more unbelievable. I have a depressing feeling that this will not end in a good way. The world is extremely polarised. Thanks for sharing. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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To me this poem is a cry for help in a world that is becoming more and more unbelievable. I have a depressing feeling that this will not end in a good way. The world is extremely polarised. Thanks for sharing. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much.
Comment from kahpot
What a powerful read, very deep and heartfelt, I was looking for a reprise after "time to change the channel, there are so many people casting stones without the right to do so, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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What a powerful read, very deep and heartfelt, I was looking for a reprise after "time to change the channel, there are so many people casting stones without the right to do so, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 17-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2023
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Thanks 😊
