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Heat Wave

5/7/5 poem

12 total reviews 
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Ah yes sweet memory lane steamy nights and a bundle of love with lots of fun surrounded by happiness.
That's what I get from your gorgeous poem.
I have only one suggestion Maybe turn up the font a little bit on your text so that older people can read it easier I did not it doesn't take. Anything? Away from the beauty of your poem and the expert hand that wrote it which is obviously packed with talent!
I have no issues with your grammar sentence structure word choices all very well done!
I wish you all the best good luck in the contest and I hope you have a great evening!

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much for this well thought review and kind words. Good reviews are so far and few lately on this site. I agree with the font, but every time I try to change it I screw up the whole poem.
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 06-Apr-2023
    Yes it can be a bit of a pain that's true!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 06-Apr-2023
    Yes it can be a bit of a pain that's true!
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 06-Apr-2023
    Yes it can be a bit of a pain that's true!
Comment from kahpot
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One for us Oldies Hey, the ignition may not spark on command anymore, but as your beautiful words describe the emotion is still running, very well written, love this one, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2023

reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much for this great review. I am so glad you
    "get it"
Comment from Douglas Goff
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Nicely done! Great font and coloring. It didn't escape me that you pulled off a Haiku with this. Well played!

Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!!!
D

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
    What a lovely review. Thank you so much for the exceptional - I did fret over that last line quite a it. So glad you noticed! I often think in haiku, LOL. A review worth getting up for. Have a wonderful day.
reply by Douglas Goff on 26-Mar-2023
    You are good at this. It shows in your final product!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
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Emotions ignite 5 syllables
under a hot balmy moon 7 syllables
Two remember when 5 syllables
Perfect 5-7-5 count. I like the 'o' assonance with 'hot' and 'balmy' in the second line. Great suggestion at romance for a romance poem if you wanted a different category, too. Nice post.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
    Thank you so much for this well written review.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
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This is a nicely written 5 7 5 poem. Phot is breathtaking . Your poem has a nice overall presentation. Background and font. Very nicely done. Good luck In The contest.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    Thank you
Comment from Janet Foor
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A lovely 5/7/5 poem Val. You definitely created a "Heat Wave" with your steamy imagery and intimate setting. The artwork of a lovely tropical scene sets the tone.
I enjoyed reading each line.

Hope you have a great weekend Val.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    Love hearing from you, and "steamy" was exactly what I was after. Thank you so much, and so nice to connect. Val
Comment from JT traveller
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I love this. Great title. Fantastic illustration of a balmy tropical island night and stirring, emotive words. So much said and imagined in just three lines. Well done. Jacqueline

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
    Thank you for this lovely review
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Nice image and presentation, Val.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-You set the scene well with "the balmy tropical isle."
-It is a night for lovers and "whispers in the night."
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
    I so thank you, for this well written review. You will always be one my favorite poets and reviewers. As. I age out of Fanstory , I am 75, I will appreciate your honesty and critical eye. Thank you once again.
reply by Pam (respa) on 16-Mar-2023
    You are very welcome and I appreciate your reply. I am approaching 73. You are a very good writer, and hope you continue to be. Have a great day.
Comment from jessizero
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This definitely is "steamy" in more ways than one. I enjoyed reading it. I also loved your rhymes. Thank you so much for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
    "Steamy" was what I was after. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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Sounds like a singles Caribbean cruise! I always appreciate good presentation along with thoughtful words and this three line poem has both.

Nice job, good luck!

Pam

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
    Caribbean cruise was not what I was after, none the less thank you for the review.