Death
What happens after ....12 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Is there life after death? Everyone ask that. It seems the narrator is at peace.
the story grabbed my interest. The dialogue and characters development is good.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Good entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Is there life after death? Everyone ask that. It seems the narrator is at peace.
the story grabbed my interest. The dialogue and characters development is good.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Oh my; It's time to die. I thank you for your review. Gotta go. God be with you and hopefully me. See/
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Oh my; It's time to die. I thank you for your review. Gotta go. God be with you and hopefully me. See/
Comment from royowen
Yes, faith is the substance of things hoped for, the evidence of things not seen. If one could see what's in store, there'd be no use for faith, you're absolutely correct, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Yes, faith is the substance of things hoped for, the evidence of things not seen. If one could see what's in store, there'd be no use for faith, you're absolutely correct, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Amen
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
There's a beacon of light which has a true meaning. A beacon of light is a source of hope, encouragement, or inspiration, especially in the face of adversity. Are there fathers who are beacon of light in the community, always going out of their way to help those around them? Was your father a beacon of light? Like your story.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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There's a beacon of light which has a true meaning. A beacon of light is a source of hope, encouragement, or inspiration, especially in the face of adversity. Are there fathers who are beacon of light in the community, always going out of their way to help those around them? Was your father a beacon of light? Like your story.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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My dad? No
Me? Unlikely
My wife? Absolutely
Comment from Mia Twysted
A story filled with interesting and unanswerable questions. What does happen to us? We will never know until the time comes and then we are gone and don't come back to tell.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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A story filled with interesting and unanswerable questions. What does happen to us? We will never know until the time comes and then we are gone and don't come back to tell.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Yes, I can see your hypothesis as true but if those who pass could come back, and I feel my bf dog did after dying last year would defeat the purpose of faith
Comment from Wendy G
Exactly. If you are wrong you have lost nothing. If you are right you gain everything. Best wishes for your thoughtful writing in the contest voting.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Exactly. If you are wrong you have lost nothing. If you are right you gain everything. Best wishes for your thoughtful writing in the contest voting.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Amen
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 80-word flash contest. The text is a great size. The story is well-told and, the plot doesn't seem rushed. A short story about an age-old question~what happens after death. Once again, no clear answer. The visual fits okay. A photo of a casket or graveyard would be better. Your visual could be for anything but death. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the 80-word flash contest. The text is a great size. The story is well-told and, the plot doesn't seem rushed. A short story about an age-old question~what happens after death. Once again, no clear answer. The visual fits okay. A photo of a casket or graveyard would be better. Your visual could be for anything but death. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Did you read the authors note as to why I selected that picture?
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No, I did not. However, I have now so I understand your perspective.
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Thank you, again.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eighty-word flash fiction story, Death, has the proper word count and essentially seems to say that if all that was promised is true or not, death will come and we will know.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This eighty-word flash fiction story, Death, has the proper word count and essentially seems to say that if all that was promised is true or not, death will come and we will know.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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I will not argue that point, my friend. Thanks for commenting.
Comment from JT traveller
An extremely thought provoking read. I particularly appreciate your concluding question. It made me question my own level of faith. What do I have to lose if I choose faith?
A great entry for the competition.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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An extremely thought provoking read. I particularly appreciate your concluding question. It made me question my own level of faith. What do I have to lose if I choose faith?
A great entry for the competition.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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and the answer would be no more or less than what you have now.
Thanks for the read and time spent.
Comment from LisaMay
Your piece is very thought-provoking. Your opening question is something we will never know the answer to and leaves us with the quandary of another unanswerable question.
Faith does provide a true fact: "faith is not a perfect knowledge but includes a hope for things not seen."
A comment on "before I close my eye this last time". Why just one eye? Should it be "before I close my eyes this last time"?
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Your piece is very thought-provoking. Your opening question is something we will never know the answer to and leaves us with the quandary of another unanswerable question.
Faith does provide a true fact: "faith is not a perfect knowledge but includes a hope for things not seen."
A comment on "before I close my eye this last time". Why just one eye? Should it be "before I close my eyes this last time"?
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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I will be forever thankful not being a cyclops! I will make the edit immediately, and many thanks.
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Maybe you were sleeping with one eye open.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
You are absolutely right - we all have nothing to lose by believing in a better place after death. It sure makes for comfort of mind instead of a stressful unknowing. I enjoyed this well written reflective and conversational read.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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You are absolutely right - we all have nothing to lose by believing in a better place after death. It sure makes for comfort of mind instead of a stressful unknowing. I enjoyed this well written reflective and conversational read.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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and I appreciate your time and reading of the piece. It's a challenge to meet the requirements and a goal in eighty words, but "yo, Adrian, I did it!," I think.
