Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I could easily see what the child's protection agency would think of that!! LOL. In some cases it would be better for the child to fly from the nest before they are harmed. I do agree that so much is going on in the world, that it's safer to stay at home, and with prices going up all the time, it's impossible to afford to rent, let alone buy their own home. This might only have two lines, but it's a great talking point. Well done and good luck. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thank you for reviewing it. I would not want to be a young person trying to gt a start right now any more than I would want to be a parent supporting a couch potato. Lots of stories on that spectrum!

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

We are the generation of open door policy. I'm guilty of that. Three in their twenties still live at home. Most times it doesn't bother me. Then I think about how my mother would have reactedto me coming back. I assure you, she would not mince words. I liked your poem about the birds and the comparison to humans. Gretchen

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

We have had a couple of boomerangers in their 30s, but none that lingered. So many families are in this tough situation. Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Thesis

Excellent

You express this wonderfully. Using parent birds as an analogy to human offspring, was a great way to make the comparison of how parenting is difficult, no matter what species is compared. Over time, humand protection of their offspring has shielded them from being able to take flight from the home. You said a lot in few words.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thanks for the review and your all too true analysis of how this has an impact.

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello, Mystery Writer,
A somber but realistic rhyming couplet.
I smiled when I read your first line about birds not calling back their young ones when they leave the nest. Actually, many do, but the little ones just take flight and the poor parents are left squawking in our woodland yard trying to corral them in the direction they want them to go! Nature reflecting Life...
A perceptive offering.
Thank you for sharing and Best Wishes!
diane

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thanks for the review and your perspective from your woodland yard. It sounds lovely.

reply by Mrs. KT on 13-Mar-2023

You are welcome!
We always have robins, sparrows, cardinals, or finches nesting in wreaths I create for our front and side doors.
What a commotion in the spring, but I wouldn't have it any other way!
And so much fun to observe! :)

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

Here is the thing I like about this two-line poetry contest entry. You got two lines. You chose to write something thought-provoking, and you did. I never had kids, but you focus on a real issue for lots of folks. Well done. Terry.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Terry, thank you for your kind words and review. I never had kids either, but I see that more and more fail to launch.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

This is a beautifully written piece of poetry dear anonymous! I love the bird angle because it reflects our own.
Very well presented and nicely done!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings with hugs and kisses,
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thank you, Rebekka. I appreciate your review and comments.

reply by rjuselius on 13-Mar-2023

My pleasure entirely dear friend <3

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi,
This rhyming couplet reminds us that we need to give our children freedom to let them grow into the people they are to become. It is hard to see make mistakes and get hurt. But, this is part of growing up.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thank you, Joan, for the review and your kind words.

reply by dragonpoet on 13-Mar-2023

You?re welcome on both accounts.
Joan

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

This is a good piece of advice for those who are letting their children go but sometimes the parents won't let their children go even when they want to fly the coop. I might suggest writing don't call back instead of birds not call back. It just sounds better and has a better flow to it. This says wonders about the problem of children leaving home and coming back with children of their own.
Jesse

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thank you, Jesse, for the review and your kind words. You are so right about the parents hanging on. Sad for the young adults who don't get to experience a sense of mastery.

reply by Jesse James Doty on 13-Mar-2023

Yes, the problem goes both ways. Both parents and young adults need to let go and move forward!

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Yes, you are right, and you said it well. We could learn so much from nature if we were willing. The main role of parenting is to teach independence and reponsibilty to one's off-spring. Your notes sound realistic, and sad. True to life for many. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thank you, Wendy, for the review and your validating comments.

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Humankind could do a much better job of preparing both their young and the world for the future, a wonderful message in so few words, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023

Thanks for the review and your thoughtful comments.