Take Flight
Emerging adulthood is a myth.33 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Nicely down two-line poem about the perils of young adulthood and how it has changed over the years. The birds perhaps have it right - just kick them out the door when they can fly and hunt on their own.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Nicely down two-line poem about the perils of young adulthood and how it has changed over the years. The birds perhaps have it right - just kick them out the door when they can fly and hunt on their own.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thanks for the review. I think the departing young birds are better off in the long run. Ah, well, to each species their own.
Comment from Kaiku
to fend for themselves so to speak? Have to agree with your sentiment. Might it also be wise not to call back their flailing spouses? Just saying. Such is the life of `flailing`
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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to fend for themselves so to speak? Have to agree with your sentiment. Might it also be wise not to call back their flailing spouses? Just saying. Such is the life of `flailing`
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Yes, let's do call back those flailing spouses and get to the source of this phenomenon! Thanks for the review and your insights.
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Comment from Julie Lau
So much meaningful meaning in just 2 lines - and I absolutely love your comment below. Yes, I've seen it all too. I had already read this and thought I had reviewed it - maybe you have 2 reviews from me, lucky you!
All the best,
Julie Lau
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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So much meaningful meaning in just 2 lines - and I absolutely love your comment below. Yes, I've seen it all too. I had already read this and thought I had reviewed it - maybe you have 2 reviews from me, lucky you!
All the best,
Julie Lau
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Thanks.. or thanks again.
Comment from estory
I think it's a great opening two lines of what could be an interesting poem, but I think you have to expand on this theme here. I like the meter, the subdued tone, the rhyme scheme, and you are raising an interesting question about family life in the world today. I wonder if it would be better as a short story, actually. estory
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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I think it's a great opening two lines of what could be an interesting poem, but I think you have to expand on this theme here. I like the meter, the subdued tone, the rhyme scheme, and you are raising an interesting question about family life in the world today. I wonder if it would be better as a short story, actually. estory
Comment Written 15-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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That's the best thing about a 2 line contest. The concept, especially this one, is portable. Emerging adulthood is one of my niches at work, so I have plenty of material. I will take your suggestion seriously, as it never occurred to me to write about it until this 2 liner. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on it.
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a really good two-line poem, Nicki. We should take a lesson from Mother Nature. You don't see too many maladjusted animals running around in the woods.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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This is a really good two-line poem, Nicki. We should take a lesson from Mother Nature. You don't see too many maladjusted animals running around in the woods.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Paul. You're right. They don't seem to need therapy unless humans get involved.
Comment from royowen
The best thing parents could ever do for their children is prepare their offspring for life, and love is an ever loosening grip on their children's lives, but always a safety net for family, beautifully written post, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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The best thing parents could ever do for their children is prepare their offspring for life, and love is an ever loosening grip on their children's lives, but always a safety net for family, beautifully written post, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Roy, thank you so much for your insights and the review
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Most welcome
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's words interesting and thought provoking. I liked the
words above the title which help define the author's poem well. I thought
about how letting go is never easy but must be done! This poem has a
a great message! The artwork is awesome!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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I found the author's words interesting and thought provoking. I liked the
words above the title which help define the author's poem well. I thought
about how letting go is never easy but must be done! This poem has a
a great message! The artwork is awesome!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thanks for the review and your kind words. Letting go - never easy.
Comment from Bill Schott
This two-line poem, Take Flight, has the proper formatting and may be suggesting that we ought to give our kids a push out the door to start their lives.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This two-line poem, Take Flight, has the proper formatting and may be suggesting that we ought to give our kids a push out the door to start their lives.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thanks for the review, Bill. I do think some need a nudge.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written two line poem. Your Photo is lovely and compliments your words so well.nice presentation. Good luck in the contest. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This is a beautifully written two line poem. Your Photo is lovely and compliments your words so well.nice presentation. Good luck in the contest. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thanks for the review and your kind words.
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Your welcome
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a great 2-line poem that should do very well in the contest. Such a profound and accurate contrast you've painted between birds and today's youth. Great words--flailing and frail--to describe them. It wasn't always so.
Wonderful job, and it rhymes too.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This was a great 2-line poem that should do very well in the contest. Such a profound and accurate contrast you've painted between birds and today's youth. Great words--flailing and frail--to describe them. It wasn't always so.
Wonderful job, and it rhymes too.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Jim, for the review. It wasn't always so, and is more so every year. Sigh.
