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He probably thinks this poem is about him10 total reviews
Comment from Alan Tryens
Your poem is very funny. I like the rhyming scheme, it's very creative. I can't relate because there were no computers or web sites back when I was young and my siblings were dating. But my daughter, who's now 52, was in high school she dated a guy for over a year who was a lot like your sister's friend. I rejoiced when they broke up. I really liked the last two lines of your poem.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Your poem is very funny. I like the rhyming scheme, it's very creative. I can't relate because there were no computers or web sites back when I was young and my siblings were dating. But my daughter, who's now 52, was in high school she dated a guy for over a year who was a lot like your sister's friend. I rejoiced when they broke up. I really liked the last two lines of your poem.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Alan! I'm honored you enjoyed it. The clown has since returned to the circus thank goodness!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is well written and the clever rhymes give the words special meaning. I don't like dating apps. They have no value in the world of dating. They seem to go after the losers instead of the winners. I often hear of disastrous dates after someone meets on a dating app. So if I come across this man I will surely shoo him away.
Jesse
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is well written and the clever rhymes give the words special meaning. I don't like dating apps. They have no value in the world of dating. They seem to go after the losers instead of the winners. I often hear of disastrous dates after someone meets on a dating app. So if I come across this man I will surely shoo him away.
Jesse
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thanks Jesse, it seems there are many versions of this man around! Thank you for your review and feedback :)
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I agree. Let's stop the dating app from ruining people's lives!
Comment from Cherish Adams
Rhyme scheme is solid, rhythm is as well. Well chosen words. Imagery is superb. Hopefully your sister will recognize that perfection is a lie sooner rather than later. Well written.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Rhyme scheme is solid, rhythm is as well. Well chosen words. Imagery is superb. Hopefully your sister will recognize that perfection is a lie sooner rather than later. Well written.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much! He has thankfully been kicked to the curb- fingers crossed that's where he stays!
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Good! 🤞
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Oh this is awesome. Not only did you do the monorhyme in every stanza, but you did it in multi-syllable words. Way to go Jess. What a hilarious collection of words to describe this "Bozo!" Not only that, but now you have me singing the song, "You're so Vain." I will get you back for that one! Hehehe! If I were you I would hold onto this and show it to your girls someday on what they cannot bring home for a date. This is a great entry for the rhyming contest, and I love that you do not mince any words. Why beat around the bush when the word you need fits in there so perfectly. Lol... I am sure you will not need it, but good luck in the contest, Sweetie.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Oh this is awesome. Not only did you do the monorhyme in every stanza, but you did it in multi-syllable words. Way to go Jess. What a hilarious collection of words to describe this "Bozo!" Not only that, but now you have me singing the song, "You're so Vain." I will get you back for that one! Hehehe! If I were you I would hold onto this and show it to your girls someday on what they cannot bring home for a date. This is a great entry for the rhyming contest, and I love that you do not mince any words. Why beat around the bush when the word you need fits in there so perfectly. Lol... I am sure you will not need it, but good luck in the contest, Sweetie.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much, my friend! As always, I am honored by your kind words, and how you catch all of my little intentions lol you're the best
Comment from Ricky1024
This contest entry was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Note: I have been involved off and on in a dating world for almost 19 years since the death of my spouse.
And I would call most and almost everyone a louse!.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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This contest entry was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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Note: I have been involved off and on in a dating world for almost 19 years since the death of my spouse.
And I would call most and almost everyone a louse!.
Good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much! For the review and for the stars! And I'm sorry for the loss you endured all these years. I'm sure no amount of time makes it any easier.
Comment from JT traveller
Very funny. Narcissism personified. I wonder why so many women are drawn to men like this?
Well composed poem. Good meter. Your structured rhyme tells a story in a witty manner.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Very funny. Narcissism personified. I wonder why so many women are drawn to men like this?
Well composed poem. Good meter. Your structured rhyme tells a story in a witty manner.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much! Appreciate your review and feedback.
Comment from jessizero
Not from a dating site, but I think I dated that guy! This certainly sounds like my sister's reaction to my last boyfriend. LOL. You did a great job with the description of this narcissist. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Not from a dating site, but I think I dated that guy! This certainly sounds like my sister's reaction to my last boyfriend. LOL. You did a great job with the description of this narcissist. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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lol narcissist to the fullest! He's gone now, thank goodness. She was far too good for him.
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
This guy sounds like a manipulative loser. Your poem certainly captures his less than savory disposition. Hopefully he'll be out of her life very soon. People like that come a dime a dozen. Anyone who meets one should be looking for the guy who's applying the dimes.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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This guy sounds like a manipulative loser. Your poem certainly captures his less than savory disposition. Hopefully he'll be out of her life very soon. People like that come a dime a dozen. Anyone who meets one should be looking for the guy who's applying the dimes.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Here, here! Thank you for your awesome review !
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Ha ha ha that's very good and it speaks to a lot of women who settled for less! Guilty of the same thing no more! Their ass is grass!!
This is really good I really enjoy this piece and I'm sure hope you're sister kicks his a** to the curb!
It is a really great submission how do you is it and wish you the best of luck! I have a great day!!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Ha ha ha that's very good and it speaks to a lot of women who settled for less! Guilty of the same thing no more! Their ass is grass!!
This is really good I really enjoy this piece and I'm sure hope you're sister kicks his a** to the curb!
It is a really great submission how do you is it and wish you the best of luck! I have a great day!!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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thank you Lea!! You're words mean so much to me!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I haven't had much success with dating sites, I have some no hopers who always want something from you and are not satisfied with just meeting and chatting, they all have an agenda, this is a strong and powerful write and might need a warning for the sexual content at the end, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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I haven't had much success with dating sites, I have some no hopers who always want something from you and are not satisfied with just meeting and chatting, they all have an agenda, this is a strong and powerful write and might need a warning for the sexual content at the end, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly! I wasn't sure, I'll do that.
XoJessica
