A Poetic Pause
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Comment from Lobber
I don't understand why you failed to give artist Eddie Mendoz credit for his artwork entitled The Last Train. Also, why did you crop off the bottom? In the original, the girl appears to have just one leg.
Also, I don't understand how you and some of your reviewers can suggest that the artwork deals optimistically about moving forward in a positive manner. In the piece the train has obviously left the station a long time ago, as evidenced by the massive green overgrowth everywhere, both on the tracks and in the station.
The poor young woman, complete with cat, carries a gas mask and other survival utensils. She is looking forlornly at the )last car( of the )last train( with her )last chance( for hope and survival, now gone.
This one-legged woman hoped to leave the Disaster Zone. The )last train(is stuck between stations, as evidenced by the red light.
For those more optimistic readers who feel the train is )arriving(, note the lights and signage face the driver of the train. The red light and growth on the track, suggest the )last train( has not moved for some time.
Also, note the angled mirror, set for the driver to view the length of the platform and any more passengers. It only shows more greenery beyond the rear of the camera.
- Lobber
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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I don't understand why you failed to give artist Eddie Mendoz credit for his artwork entitled The Last Train. Also, why did you crop off the bottom? In the original, the girl appears to have just one leg.
Also, I don't understand how you and some of your reviewers can suggest that the artwork deals optimistically about moving forward in a positive manner. In the piece the train has obviously left the station a long time ago, as evidenced by the massive green overgrowth everywhere, both on the tracks and in the station.
The poor young woman, complete with cat, carries a gas mask and other survival utensils. She is looking forlornly at the )last car( of the )last train( with her )last chance( for hope and survival, now gone.
This one-legged woman hoped to leave the Disaster Zone. The )last train(is stuck between stations, as evidenced by the red light.
For those more optimistic readers who feel the train is )arriving(, note the lights and signage face the driver of the train. The red light and growth on the track, suggest the )last train( has not moved for some time.
Also, note the angled mirror, set for the driver to view the length of the platform and any more passengers. It only shows more greenery beyond the rear of the camera.
- Lobber
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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I'm sorry you didn't like it. I don't know who this Eddie person is. My friend had this picture on her phone I asked if i could use it and it is used as given. I'm not sure who Eddie mendez is but I'll be happy to take it down and from now on. I shall use my own artwork. I have no intention of offending anyone thank you for your comments have a nice day.
PS. I certainly do have credit for the picture listed in my author's notes cause. I'm not sure how to make it appear at up the top. I am new i've never written stuff in my life except for the last six weeks so if i'm making a mistake it's an honest one.
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glad the perceived fight is over xoxox glad to see the new artwork xoxoxox and the new poem xoxoxox still friends? xoxoxox I hope so! xoxoxox have a tender evening xoxoxo
Lobber
Comment from w.j.debi
So true that just standing there gets us nowhere. Jump on that train and go for it.
This is a beautiful presentation in word and in choice of artwork to complement the verse.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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So true that just standing there gets us nowhere. Jump on that train and go for it.
This is a beautiful presentation in word and in choice of artwork to complement the verse.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so very much I'm so glad you liked. It appreciate you taking the time to read it and off. Your thoughts and comments it's very much welcome here thank you again have a great day!
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Thank you so very much I'm so glad you liked. It appreciate you taking the time to read it and off. Your thoughts and comments it's very much welcome here thank you again have a great day!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry to the 8-word contest. The text is a good size. The message is stated with clarity, and it is easy to understand. The AN also helps with the understanding. Your visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry to the 8-word contest. The text is a good size. The message is stated with clarity, and it is easy to understand. The AN also helps with the understanding. Your visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so very much I'm glad you like it. I hope that you're having a great day and all is well for you. Thank you again for taking the time to read and evaluate your comments are always appreciated have a great day!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eight-word poem, Acceptance, has the proper formatting and allows that our plans will not always roll out as we want, but we must move on anyway. Plan accordingly.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This eight-word poem, Acceptance, has the proper formatting and allows that our plans will not always roll out as we want, but we must move on anyway. Plan accordingly.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate you taking the time to have a look at it and I'll fear comments. Thank you very much I have a great day!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is an interesting entry for the eight words contest. It cannot be understated that life and its twists and turns will happen whether we think we are at the helm or not. As you quite rightly state - ride instead... enjoy it.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is an interesting entry for the eight words contest. It cannot be understated that life and its twists and turns will happen whether we think we are at the helm or not. As you quite rightly state - ride instead... enjoy it.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you I'm glad you like it thanks for taking the time to read it. I really appreciate it. I hope you have a great wonderful day. Thank your input and your comments!
Comment from playinaround
Well I'm embarrassed to say the meaning escapes me. I would love to know. I love the format and presentation and it is artfully written. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Well I'm embarrassed to say the meaning escapes me. I would love to know. I love the format and presentation and it is artfully written. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Your basic keeping's life is what life is going to be. We can drive ourselves crazy fighting against it. Or we can just get on the train and ride with it hopefully that makes sense. Thank you so much for the review and for going through it and offering your comments. It's very important I thank you for have a great day!
Comment from lyenochka
That's a refreshing perspective. Instead of those slogans to "Seize the day" and to fighting against the current, you take a peaceful approach to life, to enjoy the ride. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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That's a refreshing perspective. Instead of those slogans to "Seize the day" and to fighting against the current, you take a peaceful approach to life, to enjoy the ride. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you I really appreciate your review in your comment and the time you put in. I thank you very much I always like what you write to by the way hope you have a great day!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 8 Word Poetry Contest.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good word count.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Excellent entry for the 8 Word Poetry Contest.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good word count.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your fine words and looking at my entry and providing your comments. That's very kind of you appreciate it have a great day!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You have used your 8 words well with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You are right about the train rolling
as a symbol for life.
-We can't stop it, so might as well ride
and see what happens.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You have used your 8 words well with a good topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You are right about the train rolling
as a symbol for life.
-We can't stop it, so might as well ride
and see what happens.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words and for taking the time to do this review. I appreciate everything you said anything you think would be better. I'm happy to hear about that too. I hope you have a great day and thank you again!
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You are very welcome, and I appreciate your reply. I don't think you need to improve anything. It is a very good poem that encourages the reader to think about it. And that is a good thing. You have a great day, too.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The picture is amazing and so appropriate. The text gives valuable advice. The answer to many issues in life is to stop moaning- just get on with it!
More easy to say than to do!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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The picture is amazing and so appropriate. The text gives valuable advice. The answer to many issues in life is to stop moaning- just get on with it!
More easy to say than to do!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Exactly let's get in the solution instead of the b s thank you have a great day! I very much appreciate you taking the time to look at my poem and I'
Off your comments of which i'm very much appreciated thank you again!
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Best wishes!