Tearful Eyes
Fear Holds us back8 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 10 Word Poem writing prompt contest. Good word count and choices. The poem flows nicely.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize. .
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Excellent entry for the 10 Word Poem writing prompt contest. Good word count and choices. The poem flows nicely.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize. .
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Val Crisson
I get this, and feel it's a powerful message. One suggestion, I would put the comma after laugh and delete the comma after rage. Also, if you choose to make the corrections I have suggested "Through " should not be capitalized
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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I get this, and feel it's a powerful message. One suggestion, I would put the comma after laugh and delete the comma after rage. Also, if you choose to make the corrections I have suggested "Through " should not be capitalized
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Those are good suggestions, thank you very much.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the 10 words contest. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. It is a thought-provoking message. It implies some type of abusive interaction. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the 10 words contest. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easy to understand. It is a thought-provoking message. It implies some type of abusive interaction. The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Nicki Nance
You managed to mention fear, rage, and sadness in such a few words. This is a testament of the complexity of emotions. So many exist in our blind spot awaiting an empathetic other to provide some insights.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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You managed to mention fear, rage, and sadness in such a few words. This is a testament of the complexity of emotions. So many exist in our blind spot awaiting an empathetic other to provide some insights.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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We are bottles and bottles of emotion.
Comment from kahpot
Very well said, I will admit in the last line I was hoping for "they expel" I will continue to explore this wonderful and intriguing read, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Very well said, I will admit in the last line I was hoping for "they expel" I will continue to explore this wonderful and intriguing read, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Being in fear of someone else's rage is intimidating and called bullying in my book, your descriptions remind me of some situations I have been in during the past, a fearful post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Being in fear of someone else's rage is intimidating and called bullying in my book, your descriptions remind me of some situations I have been in during the past, a fearful post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That's powerful.... that's a very bold poem. It was also very well done it strikes a cord yes it does. Sounds like someone was betrayed that kind of rage is a tough one. People have said to me if you want to write about what you know and perhaps this is something that you know. If so I hope it dissipates and your tears dry.
You've complied with the contest rules and you've supplied a most excellent poem!
If you don't mind I'd like to suggest one small thing remove the, in your last line don't. Think you need it. Only a suggestion of course when you're promised great as it is good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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That's powerful.... that's a very bold poem. It was also very well done it strikes a cord yes it does. Sounds like someone was betrayed that kind of rage is a tough one. People have said to me if you want to write about what you know and perhaps this is something that you know. If so I hope it dissipates and your tears dry.
You've complied with the contest rules and you've supplied a most excellent poem!
If you don't mind I'd like to suggest one small thing remove the, in your last line don't. Think you need it. Only a suggestion of course when you're promised great as it is good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much. It was something I had to live through, but things are better now.
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Oh good
Comment from JT traveller
Your utilisation of a capital E for eyes draws my attention immediately to the intense and evil stare of the accompanying illustration. A truly compelling ten word poem that suggests so much than that which is written. Great work. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Your utilisation of a capital E for eyes draws my attention immediately to the intense and evil stare of the accompanying illustration. A truly compelling ten word poem that suggests so much than that which is written. Great work. Jacqueline
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much.
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Happy days. Jacqueline 😊
