Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

Well done; you build the story with strong images, details, and suspense.
A cat in the shadows was preparing to hunt down a mouse.
Brilliant and well-written.
Best regards,
Mary

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thanks, Mary

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Yes, sir, you've certainly given us a glimpse into the night that reoccurs with a rampant regularity. Hunter and prey, one chasing, the other speeding away if it can. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023

Thanks, Ric

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Exceptional

Bill, your story is compact and says so much. You have a great command of the English language, as you paint a great picture of the feline in your story.
Good luck with your book. Blessings. Cindy

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

Thank you, Cindy, for the great review. Bill

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is a very nice story told in the language of poetry. Your words create scene that would make anyone stop and take notice. I usually skip poems that aren't promoted, but I love the way you've worded this one.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

Thank you, Beth

Comment from Julcia

Excellent

A good short, short story written with the finesse of a well-seasoned pen. This story ends with a feral feline with an appetite preparing to
pounce on a mouse meal. A
creative read.

Julcia

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

Thank you, Julcia

reply by Julcia on 08-Mar-2023

Bill, You are most welcome. Julcia

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

I realize that God had a purpose for creating mice and rats, but I swear the only use I can see for them is providing a food source for cats and owls. I can say that I truly hate them.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

What about Mickey, Mighty, and Jerry?

reply by nomi338 on 08-Mar-2023

As cartoons is the only place I am okay with them. The ones running around in my home chewing up things and spreading disease is a no no.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A slow moving silent chaotic ghostly scene in the pink mist here and you conjured up quite a picture with your eerie magical words Bill, a storm in the tea leaves, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

Thank you, Dolly

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow! This should have been in the prose contest. You take a simple scene like a cat chasing a mouse on a playground and give it a surreal feeling with your use of metaphor and alliteration.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

Thank you, Helen. Contests are usually more demoralizing than anything else. If one pops up that aligns with what I'm about to do I might enter. Otherwise, people have packs of five that support them on voting, it seems.

reply by lyenochka on 08-Mar-2023

Hmm. Is that called a "Super Pack" ?

reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023

There may not be such a group, but I find it odd sometimes when someone enters a contest at the last minute and gets eight votes at the same time. Check their site, and the work has received only two reviews.