haiku (upon water's edge)
A Site Contest Entry13 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your picture plus words paired perfectly, Kahpot.
I enjoyed reading your haiku. I liked the ebb and flow
descriptive word usage. I have mixed feelings about
the last line as it really, in my opinion, isn't something
that can be seen in nature. I know haiku may have
people included. In all of my comments, please remember
I'm not the CEC. As a suggestion or file 13, I would make
the third line more about something related to the sea, or
about how the ebb and flow is dependent of the cycle of
the moon.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Your picture plus words paired perfectly, Kahpot.
I enjoyed reading your haiku. I liked the ebb and flow
descriptive word usage. I have mixed feelings about
the last line as it really, in my opinion, isn't something
that can be seen in nature. I know haiku may have
people included. In all of my comments, please remember
I'm not the CEC. As a suggestion or file 13, I would make
the third line more about something related to the sea, or
about how the ebb and flow is dependent of the cycle of
the moon.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Thank you so very much, I did think along the lines of
"nature's tidal course" but was unsure if this related, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Haiku contest. I love the image of the tide ebb and flow.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Excellent entry for the Haiku contest. I love the image of the tide ebb and flow.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Goodluck
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, kahpot.
-A well written haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-I like the second line with ocean's replay.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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-Nice image and presentation, kahpot.
-A well written haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-I like the second line with ocean's replay.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
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You are very welcome.
Comment from mermaids
I like the image in your words of the ocean symbolizing life with the ebb and flow of the tide. The ocean does reflect life's natural course like you state in your poem. Excellent haiku form and use of words.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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I like the image in your words of the ocean symbolizing life with the ebb and flow of the tide. The ocean does reflect life's natural course like you state in your poem. Excellent haiku form and use of words.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Kahpot,
Your photo and words go nicely together to paint a nice picture of the ocean.
I miss the ocean, but your poem brought back pleasant memories
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Kahpot,
Your photo and words go nicely together to paint a nice picture of the ocean.
I miss the ocean, but your poem brought back pleasant memories
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Kahpot, your poem is filled with good imagery as well as observation of nature. Of special note:
oceans replay ebb and flow ~
(I like the word usage of "replay.")
Well-chosen photo. Beautiful presentation. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Hi Kahpot, your poem is filled with good imagery as well as observation of nature. Of special note:
oceans replay ebb and flow ~
(I like the word usage of "replay.")
Well-chosen photo. Beautiful presentation. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
The ebb and flow of life does follow a pattern and this is natural and comforting. And it inspires me to learn to just go with the flow. Not easy for an old timer - but we need to just relax and enjoy the moment.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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The ebb and flow of life does follow a pattern and this is natural and comforting. And it inspires me to learn to just go with the flow. Not easy for an old timer - but we need to just relax and enjoy the moment.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from patcelaw
This is an excellent haiku for the haiku contest. You have presented it well and it reads well. I just asked if you have a good day and always keep your light shining through your pen. Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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This is an excellent haiku for the haiku contest. You have presented it well and it reads well. I just asked if you have a good day and always keep your light shining through your pen. Patricia
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Marienkiefer
Nice movement and feel to this haiku. The natural course of things, the flow and resistance or tensions that are part of life.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Nice movement and feel to this haiku. The natural course of things, the flow and resistance or tensions that are part of life.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Wendy G
What a stunning photo! And an excellent Haiku. I really like the use of "replay" as the ebb and flow is replayed through the years (and even the centuries). Your Haiku has captured that timeless quality. best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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What a stunning photo! And an excellent Haiku. I really like the use of "replay" as the ebb and flow is replayed through the years (and even the centuries). Your Haiku has captured that timeless quality. best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you Wendy, with all the encouragement I am getting I think I am improving, as always very much appreciated****kahpot