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Or... my rant

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Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi Wayne,
This is a righteous rant. I feel you did a good job getting your point across. I agree that getting corrected with grammar and typos is helpful.
I am not one that is very good with sentence structure myself, so I can't correct anything but the obvious. Thanks for defining misplaced modifiers. Maybe that sentence should have been In 1969 Neil Armstrong made history by being the first man to step on the moon's surface.
Some errors, that I think were purposeful) are 1. knot should be not.
2. No comma is needed after necessary, and three tpyos should be typos.
I also think that if you have nothing good to say about a story or poem you should not review it.
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
    Thank you for your great review.
    And yes, those little seeds were intentional.
reply by dragonpoet on 14-Mar-2023
    Hi Wayne,
    You're very welcome. Just to see if the readers were paying attention to your rant.
    Joan
Comment from patricia dillon
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You are refreshingly specific about what you expect and want from a review. I know that I, for one, am guilty of overlooking some of the issues you raise.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
    Thank you for your very nice review.
reply by patricia dillon on 14-Mar-2023
    You're welcome
Comment from LJbutterfly
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Congratulations Wayne, for placing in the Rant contest. Some of my most enjoyable reading comes from reading pieces selected as winners by the contest committee.

The most important message I gleaned from your rant is that reviews should focus on craftsmanship rather than content. Your craftsmanship allows your content to resonate with my experiences.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
    Yes. That's how I feel.
    But... after writing this, I found that I can't help but comment. Ain't I the hypocrite! (smiley face here)
    But seriously, I think it's fine to agree with the writer, adding your own stories, or offering minor improvements to the content. I guess where I draw the line is when someone wants to debate your position. Is that fair?
Comment from Annmuma
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Congrats on your third place win in the rant contest. I share your frustration --as I know every writer must. I especially identify with the paragraph on judging content over craftsmanship! Excellent work -- both content and craftsmanship! ann

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
    Hah! (smiley face here)
    Thank you!
Comment from BethShelby
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Congratulation on your second place win which you are sharing with me. I surprised I didn't see this before. It is very good. You've read quite a bit of my writing and I thought I had you on my fan list but apparently not. I will change that.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
    Thank you.
    Yes, I enjoy your style.
    And congratulations yourself!
Comment from Susan Newell
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Wayne,

Your rant is well composed, nicely formatted, and has the right tone and texture for a message that deserves to be heeded. As you know. I try to help in the manner(s) you reference. Time may limit my ability to be as thorough as I'd like to be. (I've had to take some time off from FS and am just popping in to do a little catching up. But I hope to be back on a regular basis soon.)

I particularly liked the MLK quote analogy. I think you and I have treated each other in that manner, though we have some differing perspectives. Notes follow.

Sue


but knot be what I intended. -- love this intentional error/pun

but the heads up would help. -- heads-up

I could write "the big brute", or "the gargantuan behemoth", "scared", or "terrified", "walked quietly", or "tip-toed". -- Periods and commas ALWAYS go inside the quotation marks, or so the grammar sites say.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
    Thank you.
    As I'm sure you know... There are ALWAYS exceptions (smiley face here) to rules. In this instance, I was using quotes (inappropriately) to merely highlight the words and phrases. They were not speech. Of course, in speech quotes ALWAYS go outside the "punctuation".
    I'm glad you are back. You are one of the better reviewers when it comes to helping writers. I miss Gary MaClean terribly.
    Would you believe that just about as soon as I posted this piece, I came onto a half dozen posts that virtually DEMANDED I comment on the content????? (Some positively) Mostly, I refrained from debate, but it was hard! (smiley face here)
    Best wishes.
reply by Susan Newell on 12-Mar-2023
    I have been away myself. Is Gary still not well. When I left on my own "vacation," I think he was in the hospital.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
    He tried to come back. He was obviously not there yet. Then nothing since.
Comment from lyenochka
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I completely agree with your reasons for reviewing and rating. I have had one writer tell me NOT to point out spags (spelling, punctuation, and grammar) errors because his editor would take care of that. But I do appreciate the help and I agree that emotions and opinions about the topic matter shouldn't affect the rating. As this is a writing-focused rant, I think it should do well in the contest!

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    Thank you.
    Since writing that, I have found it necessary to relate to the content of postings, despite my rant to the contrary. ("I would have done the same thing." "I hope your dog bites him next time." stuff like that) So I guess it's about impossible not to engage in the subject sometimes.
reply by lyenochka on 09-Mar-2023
    I have seen some bad ratings just because the reviewer hated the picture. 😊
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2023
    shakin' my head here
Comment from Wendy G
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Good! I have thought exactly this for a LONG time. Especially true that people mark one up or down because of sentimental reasons. It does not help one to be a better writer. In voting, I try to vote for the best writing, and if there are still spelling or grammar errors by the time the vote comes around, I will not vote for them. Good writers need to be good. Speaking of which, I am assuming that that extra comma was intentional, to make your point about commas? And that "typos" is spelt incorrectly on purpose? Twice? Also "knot"? To see who would pick up on it? Well, you may prefer not to "correct" these ... lol.
Good rant. Very valid points. I also wish reviewers would write in clear and accurate sentences. Some obviously do not read what they wrote, judging by the number of spelling and grammatical errors. Sometimes the reviews simply do not make much sense. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
    (smilye, face here) LOL
    Thank you for your very nice and fun review.
    Sometimes you just have to say it - rant.
    The first thing I do after posting is get into edit mode, hoping that no one opened it to read before I could double check for obvious error. Still, though, some silly thig will get by, somethig I've overlooked a dozen times.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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I am giving you a six star for this rant, because it is very well written and covers many of the points I thought we were to cover. My low scores always are for content, not for writing errors.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
    Thank you for your very nice review.
    Thank you for the mention of six stars!
    I will sometimes comment on content if I think I can be uplifting.
    Generally, if I oppose what is said, I'll pass on reviewing.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Spelling, punctuation and sentence structure.
Second line change the word "knot" to "not".
And no, you are not wrong to want to have your work critiqued in all the ways you mentioned. Subject matter should be mentioned when it has provided an impact to your writing like this one. I believe many who do reviews provide what your asking.
Having said all that I find your rant to be concise, precise and to the point. There is no doubt as to the message you are conveying therefore indicative of good writing.
I also noticed the odd "plant" within your writing in order to see if we are in fact looking and reading like the one above...Clever.
The picture you attached is all the cute of a young child who's unhappy but we don't have it perhaps does not have the same impact as. Your message maybe consider a switch in picture?
I perhaps I'll find the same conciseless in that as well. Good luck was and I hope you're having a great day!

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2023


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
    odd plant - 'knot'
    The picture is of one of my grandsons. I thought his attitude was reflective of the spirit of the work.
    Thank you for your very nice review. And yes, it is a beautiful day here in the Arkansas Ozarks.
reply by Lea Tonin1 on 05-Mar-2023
    Oh wow it's gorgeous there!