Old Sam
Reminiscing11 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jenni,
You're words in this free verse poem gives such strong images of Sam that you don't need the nice artwork. I like the repetition that gives you the idea of his ruminating on his past while doing his rocking and watching.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congratulations on placing second place.
Joan
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Hi Jenni,
You're words in this free verse poem gives such strong images of Sam that you don't need the nice artwork. I like the repetition that gives you the idea of his ruminating on his past while doing his rocking and watching.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congratulations on placing second place.
Joan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much Joan for the wonderful review and congrats. Jen.
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You are most kindly welcome on both accounts, Jenni.
Joan
Comment from country ranch writer
Ole Samneishes he alsonwas young again he remembers the good ole day. He now just sits and risks and smokes his pipe to pass the time away being a people watcher.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Ole Samneishes he alsonwas young again he remembers the good ole day. He now just sits and risks and smokes his pipe to pass the time away being a people watcher.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the great review and shiny stars. Jen.
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Smiles
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is an excellent entry for the - No rules poem contest. I like how you have painted a scene with Old Sam sitting in his rocking chair - watching the world go by with the aroma of his pipe wafting the air. The repeat of
Rocking, swatting, watching - helps to keep the imagery in place and then prompts the reader to do as - Sam watching, remembering, reminiscing.
A most enjoyable and well written read.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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This is an excellent entry for the - No rules poem contest. I like how you have painted a scene with Old Sam sitting in his rocking chair - watching the world go by with the aroma of his pipe wafting the air. The repeat of
Rocking, swatting, watching - helps to keep the imagery in place and then prompts the reader to do as - Sam watching, remembering, reminiscing.
A most enjoyable and well written read.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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I really appreciate your wonderful review and the super shiny stars. Thank you so much. Jen.
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It was all my pleasure, Jen :-) ~DDxo
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your free verse portrait of Sam. I like how often you use the present active tense of the verb so we see that the actions are continuing. Best wishes in the contest!
Suggest if you meant the flowers:
Jazmine, Oleander, (jasmine, oleander)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Great job with your free verse portrait of Sam. I like how often you use the present active tense of the verb so we see that the actions are continuing. Best wishes in the contest!
Suggest if you meant the flowers:
Jazmine, Oleander, (jasmine, oleander)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for reviewing and spotting the mistake. Much appreciated. Jen.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, the descriptions of everything that is going on around and within Sam are wonderful, the reader is right there with him, remembering those younger days, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Excellent, the descriptions of everything that is going on around and within Sam are wonderful, the reader is right there with him, remembering those younger days, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much. Jen
Comment from Thesis
Your poem portrays an older man who is taking in the occurring scenes around him and allowing his mind to flash back to a time when he was youthful and vibrant. I enjoyed your descriptions of where he was rocking, the temperature, the annoyance of the flies, the smells he was experiencing, etc., but nothing could make him move away as he enjoyed both the past and present.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Your poem portrays an older man who is taking in the occurring scenes around him and allowing his mind to flash back to a time when he was youthful and vibrant. I enjoyed your descriptions of where he was rocking, the temperature, the annoyance of the flies, the smells he was experiencing, etc., but nothing could make him move away as he enjoyed both the past and present.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for the great review. Jen.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Every character, every action, smell, and sight take me back to a place in time I can remember, and I'm doubting there are many who don't take a stroll down memory lane. Now, I just wish I could still connect, without having to reminisce about what once was. Thank you my dear friend for sharing. They don't get any better than this!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Every character, every action, smell, and sight take me back to a place in time I can remember, and I'm doubting there are many who don't take a stroll down memory lane. Now, I just wish I could still connect, without having to reminisce about what once was. Thank you my dear friend for sharing. They don't get any better than this!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Bless you my lovely friend. I love your review. X
Comment from RodG
You have brought back an era in this poem. I love how you first focus on Old Sam rocking, swatting, and watching on the verandah, and then pull back your camera to record WHAT and WHOM he's watching. I truly enjoyed your poem.
Rod
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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You have brought back an era in this poem. I love how you first focus on Old Sam rocking, swatting, and watching on the verandah, and then pull back your camera to record WHAT and WHOM he's watching. I truly enjoyed your poem.
Rod
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Rod for the great review. Jen
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My pleasure.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good no rules contest entry. As we get older, there are different things that we see in life. Many of the things we see the young doing brings back memories of our own youth. I enjoyed this form for that very reason. I will be 85 in June so I know what I'm talking about. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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This is a very good no rules contest entry. As we get older, there are different things that we see in life. Many of the things we see the young doing brings back memories of our own youth. I enjoyed this form for that very reason. I will be 85 in June so I know what I'm talking about. Patricia.
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Thanks a lot Patricia. I am 80 so I also know what I?m talking about. Us oldies have seen and done it all. Take care. Jen.
Comment from JanPerry
Until I saw the "no rules contest" line I thought it was jibberish! However, it's just great instead!
The pipe smells blends with garbage cans? I hope the food is wrapped up! There's an overload of "ing" words. But it lends itself to an action piece so well done.
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Until I saw the "no rules contest" line I thought it was jibberish! However, it's just great instead!
The pipe smells blends with garbage cans? I hope the food is wrapped up! There's an overload of "ing" words. But it lends itself to an action piece so well done.
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. Jen.
