The Leprechaun Did It
Falling asleep with a computer key compressed..30 total reviews
Comment from jmdg1954
That's funny. Four pages of "t's".
Hundreds of letters run across my screen.
Each time, I wonder who has caused this mess.
Oh those pesky little leprechauns, once they hold off a key, they won't let go.
Nicely done. John
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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That's funny. Four pages of "t's".
Hundreds of letters run across my screen.
Each time, I wonder who has caused this mess.
Oh those pesky little leprechauns, once they hold off a key, they won't let go.
Nicely done. John
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you, John. I really appreciate the review and comments. I'm glad you found it funny My falling asleep did give an idea for the poem.
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Ideas have to come from somewhere!
Comment from lyenochka
I love the creativity of your poem! And yes, afternoons is a low energy time for most of us. But I love the image of those letters scampering across the screen thanks to that leprechaun! Hope this does well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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I love the creativity of your poem! And yes, afternoons is a low energy time for most of us. But I love the image of those letters scampering across the screen thanks to that leprechaun! Hope this does well in the contest!!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you Helen, I'm glad you like my poem. It wasn't the first time I had to erase several pages of on letter. It was fun to write but when I started I hadn't planned on writing about that at all. I must not mind laughing at the silly thing I do. I can't imagine why this is considered a blind contest. If people don't know who we are they might be a little dense.
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I'm glad you went with it! Loved it! You got my vote!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile with your inventive acrostic depicting your own name and those pesky Leprechauns can cause havoc in our homes and in the street, I loved your humorous words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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You made me smile with your inventive acrostic depicting your own name and those pesky Leprechauns can cause havoc in our homes and in the street, I loved your humorous words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you Dolly. I'm glad it made you smile. I still not sure how this can be a blind contest when it has to be made with our names but I
won't question the wisdom of that. I appareciate the review.
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I thought that, but the world is a little crazy at times, ha ha ha, love Dolly x
Comment from Kaiku
Probably should build some kind of lean-to device that provides a little bit of support for your upper body as you slump forward in your sleepy state. Or, just don`t sit in front of your computer anymore. Stand at a buddy-bar set up and when you can no longer stand, then go to bed. So there.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Probably should build some kind of lean-to device that provides a little bit of support for your upper body as you slump forward in your sleepy state. Or, just don`t sit in front of your computer anymore. Stand at a buddy-bar set up and when you can no longer stand, then go to bed. So there.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank for the review and advice. I seem to be able to sleep without falling over. It must be my elbow on the keep board that keeps the pressure on the key. lol
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That's great! A real fun and also very relevant read, I enjoyed it a lot. A very clever idea and I enjoyed the leprechaun too!
I wondered if you might consider a small change? No insult to your already fabulous poem, just something perhaps may enhance an already great flow to a perfect one.
Perhaps consider, under the E, removing two words "like there" and see how it sounds to you out loud.
As mentioned your poem is already great as is and this only a suggestion for your consideration.
I think it's a great submission and wish you all the best in the contest have a great night!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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That's great! A real fun and also very relevant read, I enjoyed it a lot. A very clever idea and I enjoyed the leprechaun too!
I wondered if you might consider a small change? No insult to your already fabulous poem, just something perhaps may enhance an already great flow to a perfect one.
Perhaps consider, under the E, removing two words "like there" and see how it sounds to you out loud.
As mentioned your poem is already great as is and this only a suggestion for your consideration.
I think it's a great submission and wish you all the best in the contest have a great night!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you Lea. You're right, the line was awkward, but I had to add words to come out with 10 syllables. I changed it to read "Each afternoon my eyes are filled with sand. I appreciate your review, comments and suggestion.
Elizabeth (or Beth as I'm known on this site)
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I am glad I was able to help. I think you've got a really good one here have a great night!!
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, yes, sometimes we do push ourselves too far, falling asleep before our head hits the pillow happens quite often, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Excellent, yes, sometimes we do push ourselves too far, falling asleep before our head hits the pillow happens quite often, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the excellent review and for you comments. This seems to be listed as a blind contest which makes no sense to me when it is about doing an acrostic of our name. LOL
Comment from Douglas Goff
Okay, what a great Acrostic with your name entry. Not to mention you sprinkled in the season nicely for St Patrick's Day.
This really felt like an Irish limerick to me. Nice work!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Okay, what a great Acrostic with your name entry. Not to mention you sprinkled in the season nicely for St Patrick's Day.
This really felt like an Irish limerick to me. Nice work!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you Douglas. I appreciate the review and comments. The Leprechaun got tossed in at the last minute, when I actually fell asleap trying to write an Acrostic and ended up with four pages of the letter "t",
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is amusing. I hadn't seen there was this type of poetry contest. You are fortunate you haven't a really long name. It's all the leprechauns and zombies' faults that you are tired and can't sleep well.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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This is amusing. I hadn't seen there was this type of poetry contest. You are fortunate you haven't a really long name. It's all the leprechauns and zombies' faults that you are tired and can't sleep well.
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the review and comment. I really did fall asleep trying to write the acrostic and ended up with four pages of the letter "t". I don't how this can be a blind contest when it calls for our name to be the poem.
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I thought the idea of a blind contest of a poem using your name was quite amusing.
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
Very very talented love of the picture love the words everything flowed together perfectly done. Thank you wish you will keep up the good work and have a blessed day.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Very very talented love of the picture love the words everything flowed together perfectly done. Thank you wish you will keep up the good work and have a blessed day.
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Thank you Eric, I appreciate the review and comments. I'm so glad you liked my poem. I've not see your name before. I so glad you stopped by. I hope to see you again.
Comment from Jim Wile
Great job with this acrostic poem, Elizabeth. It's hard to tell it's an acrostic because it flows so naturally and doesn't seem at all contrived to fit the format. The idea of the leprechaun being responsible for your typing woes was clever. Maybe he's the one who inserted the extra "of letters" in the H line.
Beautiful rhyming and meter too.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Great job with this acrostic poem, Elizabeth. It's hard to tell it's an acrostic because it flows so naturally and doesn't seem at all contrived to fit the format. The idea of the leprechaun being responsible for your typing woes was clever. Maybe he's the one who inserted the extra "of letters" in the H line.
Beautiful rhyming and meter too.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thank you Jim, I love the clever way you went about letting me know I'd made and error. lol I'm glad you liked my poem and I 'm thrilled with the six stars.
Elizabeth (Beth)
