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Comment from MissMerri
Such vivid, dramatic writing. The scenes are painted so clearly. It is very much like watching a movie of this young teenager and the emotions are also so real. I feel the anguish and the pain as well as his desire to create a better life for himself. I commend you for your openness and for the clear and moving writing. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Such vivid, dramatic writing. The scenes are painted so clearly. It is very much like watching a movie of this young teenager and the emotions are also so real. I feel the anguish and the pain as well as his desire to create a better life for himself. I commend you for your openness and for the clear and moving writing. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2023
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Thanks again Miss Merri
Comment from royowen
Thanks for sharing your journey Stan, it's fascinating to read people's testimonies, all uniquely different, tailored to every last detail, for everyone. Mine was similar, except God burst on the scene, not telling me who IT was, with a taste of Heaven, (it was what we all search for) but then my journey was out of my control. It sounds similar for you. "If you search for me me with all your heart, you will surely find me" Jeremiah 29:13. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thanks for sharing your journey Stan, it's fascinating to read people's testimonies, all uniquely different, tailored to every last detail, for everyone. Mine was similar, except God burst on the scene, not telling me who IT was, with a taste of Heaven, (it was what we all search for) but then my journey was out of my control. It sounds similar for you. "If you search for me me with all your heart, you will surely find me" Jeremiah 29:13. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : two parent(')s
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Thanks so much Roy. You helped me get through the highs and lows of a remarkable story because of what God's son has done.
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Well done
Comment from Ben Colder
Great testimony and God said, "Let there be light!" I think for most of us who have stumbled in the darkness were glad when the light came into our lives. Yes, Billy reached thousands in those days, so glad the Holy Spirit gave you the taste of knowing God. My blessings to you, Bro.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Great testimony and God said, "Let there be light!" I think for most of us who have stumbled in the darkness were glad when the light came into our lives. Yes, Billy reached thousands in those days, so glad the Holy Spirit gave you the taste of knowing God. My blessings to you, Bro.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thanks big Ben stay healthy and wise.
Comment from lancellot
A very interesting look back on your younger years. It's good. I think there may be a few things to look at, that may make the reading better.
notes:
My father just had that wrinkled grin and look in his eye that nature {will} take care of itself.
-would (because this is the past)
It {was the beginning} of my love for words and fueled a fire inside me to write.
-began (uses less words)
Unlike my brother, I didn't mind cleaning the {house, doing dishes.}
-Unlike my brother, I didn't mind cleaning the house, and dishes.
I recall watching Rick's {parent's} get playful with each other.
-parents
I was fascinated to see two {parent's} demonstrating real wholesome love {with} each other,
-. I was fascinated to see two parents demonstrating real wholesome love for each other,
There were times when adults would make comments like, "You're friends not playing with a full deck."
-Sometimes adults would make comments like, "Your friend's not playing with a full deck."
I recalled one night at my friend's house when we were playing tag in his house, I had one of my first flashbacks.
-I recalled one night at my friend's house when we were playing tag. I had one of my first flashbacks.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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A very interesting look back on your younger years. It's good. I think there may be a few things to look at, that may make the reading better.
notes:
My father just had that wrinkled grin and look in his eye that nature {will} take care of itself.
-would (because this is the past)
It {was the beginning} of my love for words and fueled a fire inside me to write.
-began (uses less words)
Unlike my brother, I didn't mind cleaning the {house, doing dishes.}
-Unlike my brother, I didn't mind cleaning the house, and dishes.
I recall watching Rick's {parent's} get playful with each other.
-parents
I was fascinated to see two {parent's} demonstrating real wholesome love {with} each other,
-. I was fascinated to see two parents demonstrating real wholesome love for each other,
There were times when adults would make comments like, "You're friends not playing with a full deck."
-Sometimes adults would make comments like, "Your friend's not playing with a full deck."
I recalled one night at my friend's house when we were playing tag in his house, I had one of my first flashbacks.
-I recalled one night at my friend's house when we were playing tag. I had one of my first flashbacks.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thanks! Making notes and changes.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow very nice compelling and intriguing read.
Very well written I must say descriptive and leaving no doubt as to the point of this Work. It's insightful and it is compassionate as it talks about this struggle within each one of us Is there God or isn't there?
It is easy to blame an outside influence that you cannot see without daily problems. We were given our lot designing to learn different things And so we go through them. I appreciate your writing style and the fact that you took me along with you for this writing journey very good read thank you and good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Wow very nice compelling and intriguing read.
Very well written I must say descriptive and leaving no doubt as to the point of this Work. It's insightful and it is compassionate as it talks about this struggle within each one of us Is there God or isn't there?
It is easy to blame an outside influence that you cannot see without daily problems. We were given our lot designing to learn different things And so we go through them. I appreciate your writing style and the fact that you took me along with you for this writing journey very good read thank you and good luck!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thanks for the in-depth feedback. Appreciate it.
Comment from lyenochka
I really appreciate your sharing these pivotal moments in your spiritual journey. It is in our teen years that those spiritual questions becomes so important as we wonder about the questions of our existence. I like that you didn't just respond to Billy Graham's invitation like the thousands who did during those revival meetings. You questioned God and you sought Him out with all your heart and went to the " cathedral of trees." It sounds like God answered your questions.
Grammar comments:
I recall watching Rick's parent's get playful (parents)
two parent's demonstrating real (parents)
"You're friends not playing (Your friend's) where friend's=friend is
"You can know for sure your going to heaven. (you're)
but the fear, the hunger, the hole in my heart leaked. (leaked? Did the fear and hunger drain out of the hole? Not sure I understood this metaphor.)
pick him up at a friends house. (friend's)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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I really appreciate your sharing these pivotal moments in your spiritual journey. It is in our teen years that those spiritual questions becomes so important as we wonder about the questions of our existence. I like that you didn't just respond to Billy Graham's invitation like the thousands who did during those revival meetings. You questioned God and you sought Him out with all your heart and went to the " cathedral of trees." It sounds like God answered your questions.
Grammar comments:
I recall watching Rick's parent's get playful (parents)
two parent's demonstrating real (parents)
"You're friends not playing (Your friend's) where friend's=friend is
"You can know for sure your going to heaven. (you're)
but the fear, the hunger, the hole in my heart leaked. (leaked? Did the fear and hunger drain out of the hole? Not sure I understood this metaphor.)
pick him up at a friends house. (friend's)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Appreciate it. Made notes to make changes. Blessings ahead.
Comment from Shirley McLain
So you were on your way to meet God. It's a shame we can't see what we should at the time. I was one of those who would call on God when I got into trouble. It took awhile for me to get things together. I guess that's part of really growing up. You did a great job, and I'm always ready for more. Shirley
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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So you were on your way to meet God. It's a shame we can't see what we should at the time. I was one of those who would call on God when I got into trouble. It took awhile for me to get things together. I guess that's part of really growing up. You did a great job, and I'm always ready for more. Shirley
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thanks Shirley!
Comment from Alaskastory
"A Wilderness Journey" is a story that can stand all by its self. It is filled so completely with descriptions of characters. All feelings are shown by each character and full reasons expressed. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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"A Wilderness Journey" is a story that can stand all by its self. It is filled so completely with descriptions of characters. All feelings are shown by each character and full reasons expressed. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thanks Marie!
Comment from BethShelby
This was an intense and moving struggle to find God. As a teenage girl my confusion wasn't so different from yours. My mother taught me about spiritual things, but as far changes to adulthood, I learned most of that from friends. I did have my own struggle with God begging to feel his presence and I did feel peace. I too fell in love with books and wasn't fond of math.
You're father was a good friend to you and I'm sure he appreciated the person you were becoming. He was likely worried about your brother.
God had to working on your heart by allowing you to have to struggle in your determination to find him. Your struggle reminds me of the night Jacob wrestled with God determined to have his blessing. I can't wait to learn more about your conversion.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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This was an intense and moving struggle to find God. As a teenage girl my confusion wasn't so different from yours. My mother taught me about spiritual things, but as far changes to adulthood, I learned most of that from friends. I did have my own struggle with God begging to feel his presence and I did feel peace. I too fell in love with books and wasn't fond of math.
You're father was a good friend to you and I'm sure he appreciated the person you were becoming. He was likely worried about your brother.
God had to working on your heart by allowing you to have to struggle in your determination to find him. Your struggle reminds me of the night Jacob wrestled with God determined to have his blessing. I can't wait to learn more about your conversion.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2023
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Thanks again Beth!
