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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a gorgeous version of a poem. The words are so captivating. It is so tasteful to think that love does thirst in times of need.
I know that you are not speaking about God in this poem, you are speaking about an admirer. But we will only taste of God's goodness when we really thirst for him, too. We will not think much of God if we aren't thirsty for him.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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What a gorgeous version of a poem. The words are so captivating. It is so tasteful to think that love does thirst in times of need.
I know that you are not speaking about God in this poem, you are speaking about an admirer. But we will only taste of God's goodness when we really thirst for him, too. We will not think much of God if we aren't thirsty for him.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Rosemary, I'm happy it brought you thoughts of god...the ultimate love.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from royowen
You really don't waste words, aand you know how to use their economy to impart a great original meaning. People should learn from, when they write a haiku, it's still basically a 5/7/5, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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You really don't waste words, aand you know how to use their economy to impart a great original meaning. People should learn from, when they write a haiku, it's still basically a 5/7/5, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Roy,
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a lovely evening.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I wait for a drop of love
to quench my thirst ( surely hope it's not a long wait. LOL)
Thank you for sharing this tanka with us. I enjoyed reading. You have given us a vivid image. Perfect package again.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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I wait for a drop of love
to quench my thirst ( surely hope it's not a long wait. LOL)
Thank you for sharing this tanka with us. I enjoyed reading. You have given us a vivid image. Perfect package again.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Barbara
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Have a lovely evening.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Hi, Gypsy,
This is a very nice poem full of passion: the photo compliments your words very well. I would like to dance like this one time to feel free.
Excellent Tanka, Gypsy.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Hi, Gypsy,
This is a very nice poem full of passion: the photo compliments your words very well. I would like to dance like this one time to feel free.
Excellent Tanka, Gypsy.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Me too :) I love to dance.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
Quenching one's thirst on a dusty deserted road-what a wonderful image, great alliteration in your second line, beautifully written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Quenching one's thirst on a dusty deserted road-what a wonderful image, great alliteration in your second line, beautifully written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
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Comment from Marienkiefer
This is really lovely, Gypsy.
-Working so well in your poem is the movement you get and the dry parched feeling that brings home the feeling of desertedness.
-The change in the wind is a lovely transitional, pivot line, bringing readers to that wait or moment of expectation and exhilaration, only a love can quench.
-Very nice -d- alliteration, and metaphor for a love that sustains.
Loved it. Loved it.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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This is really lovely, Gypsy.
-Working so well in your poem is the movement you get and the dry parched feeling that brings home the feeling of desertedness.
-The change in the wind is a lovely transitional, pivot line, bringing readers to that wait or moment of expectation and exhilaration, only a love can quench.
-Very nice -d- alliteration, and metaphor for a love that sustains.
Loved it. Loved it.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Marien, I can tell you are familiar with the tanka form. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
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Comment from lancellot
This is very nice. As wind tousles our hair. Or do you prefer the focus to be on one person.
I really like the dryness of the desert thirsting for a drop of water, changed to the longing of a person, for a drop or sign of love.
We've all been there.
Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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This is very nice. As wind tousles our hair. Or do you prefer the focus to be on one person.
I really like the dryness of the desert thirsting for a drop of water, changed to the longing of a person, for a drop or sign of love.
We've all been there.
Well done.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpful feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Tanka poem- nicely done- good picture presentation- tying desert road together with quenching your thirst- nice -dancing on a dirt road- spontaneous- I can see myself doing that! Lol pretty unpredictable sort my whole life- touches the fantasy in others more conservative- good job AP
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I like your Tanka poem- nicely done- good picture presentation- tying desert road together with quenching your thirst- nice -dancing on a dirt road- spontaneous- I can see myself doing that! Lol pretty unpredictable sort my whole life- touches the fantasy in others more conservative- good job AP
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpful feedback.
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Comment from lyenochka
I really liked the "drop of love to quench my thirst." The thirst is for love and the narrator is admiring the loved one and the dance is probably increasing the thirst for love.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I really liked the "drop of love to quench my thirst." The thirst is for love and the narrator is admiring the loved one and the dance is probably increasing the thirst for love.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister, I appreciate your time and review. 😀
Love,
Marival ❤️
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What a magical photograph thar inspired you to write this passionate and romantic poem and I enjoyed the contrast between the desert and the drop of love to quench the thirst here, very clever, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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What a magical photograph thar inspired you to write this passionate and romantic poem and I enjoyed the contrast between the desert and the drop of love to quench the thirst here, very clever, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpful feedback.
Gypsy hugs