Time
Time for a time rant (with a touch of grief)28 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
What are the amazingly written submission absolute perfection? Really. It's just so good I just can't get over it! You speak to my heart and to every other heart out there That was possessing of one. So well executed professionally and personally for you definitely a good combination. How do you critique that I mean other than to say hurrah when an awesome job! You deserve I need this six so here it is! Have yourself a great night!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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What are the amazingly written submission absolute perfection? Really. It's just so good I just can't get over it! You speak to my heart and to every other heart out there That was possessing of one. So well executed professionally and personally for you definitely a good combination. How do you critique that I mean other than to say hurrah when an awesome job! You deserve I need this six so here it is! Have yourself a great night!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Lea, thank you!! I appreciate it so much!!
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Well deserved.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Thank you for sharing such a thoughtful and thought provoking 'rant'.
I understood your words, felt the relapses even as time continues onwards.
Time is many things to many people but always carries memories laced with emotions attached to people and things forever lost.
Congratulations and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thank you for sharing such a thoughtful and thought provoking 'rant'.
I understood your words, felt the relapses even as time continues onwards.
Time is many things to many people but always carries memories laced with emotions attached to people and things forever lost.
Congratulations and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Shirley, thank you so much! It means the world to me that you understood my words so well. <3
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You're welcome.
Comment from Jane Jane King
Very powerful piece. And you are right. The pain from the loss of a loved one never totally goes away. It does lessen over time but never totally goes away, because in a sense, you have lost an irreplaceable part of yourself. I am so sorry about your loss but you will always have loving memories and that you will always have
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Very powerful piece. And you are right. The pain from the loss of a loved one never totally goes away. It does lessen over time but never totally goes away, because in a sense, you have lost an irreplaceable part of yourself. I am so sorry about your loss but you will always have loving memories and that you will always have
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words and feedbacks. Truly appreciate it!!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Jessica, wow that was a mouthful. Glad you feel better, but do you really? (Smile)
I just know that there is something between you and me like a familiar pain
As you also seem to know what it feels like live in excruciating pain, mentally and physically. I am here for you.
I wrote something similar but mine was comical poetry and I use that often to help me to look on the bright side. It was called 'And then I blinked) and I used a phrase in there similar to what you said. I think it was 'Life won't let us rehearse" And then it says, but then I blinked and I soon was the age my parents were when I thought they were extinct. Anyway something like that. I just know there is more of a link between us and that Is why I keep suggesting certain poems because it took me
to get to 50 something before ever telling my father and remaining siblings that I had been molested by my godfather, who threatened my dad's life if I tell anyone. So therefore he had stolen my whole childhood, so I couldn't let him still whatever time I had left. That is why I decided (with a great therapy team) to always try to build up others instead of putting them down and being too to them,
If you ever need to talk, you know how to contact me. great job on your rant honey!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Jessica, wow that was a mouthful. Glad you feel better, but do you really? (Smile)
I just know that there is something between you and me like a familiar pain
As you also seem to know what it feels like live in excruciating pain, mentally and physically. I am here for you.
I wrote something similar but mine was comical poetry and I use that often to help me to look on the bright side. It was called 'And then I blinked) and I used a phrase in there similar to what you said. I think it was 'Life won't let us rehearse" And then it says, but then I blinked and I soon was the age my parents were when I thought they were extinct. Anyway something like that. I just know there is more of a link between us and that Is why I keep suggesting certain poems because it took me
to get to 50 something before ever telling my father and remaining siblings that I had been molested by my godfather, who threatened my dad's life if I tell anyone. So therefore he had stolen my whole childhood, so I couldn't let him still whatever time I had left. That is why I decided (with a great therapy team) to always try to build up others instead of putting them down and being too to them,
If you ever need to talk, you know how to contact me. great job on your rant honey!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Oh, debi <3 I'm sick to know you endured that as a child. I It's incredible, you just become more and more of an inspiration as I learn more about you! I look forward to when we can chat xoxo
Comment from Paul McFarland
That was quite a rant, Jessica. Time is usually our nemesis until we die.
I have a bone to pick with time.
It is an evil thing.
It haunts me when I search for rhyme.
When needed, it takes wing.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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That was quite a rant, Jessica. Time is usually our nemesis until we die.
I have a bone to pick with time.
It is an evil thing.
It haunts me when I search for rhyme.
When needed, it takes wing.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Well done! Thanks so much, Paul!
Comment from John Ciarmello
(Phew) is a great ending, Jessica.
My son and I have often disgusted this subject in depth. A subject you have written so brilliantly about in your piece.
You have added to our observations and conclusions about how importantly insignificant time is and how it is only factored in against the pain of loss and the process of grief in our lives.
It is a scary thought that time is not infinite and that this sustaining resource will eventually take us from the only realm we've ever known.
A brilliant and intellectual reveal of the unwinding of time. I loved it! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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(Phew) is a great ending, Jessica.
My son and I have often disgusted this subject in depth. A subject you have written so brilliantly about in your piece.
You have added to our observations and conclusions about how importantly insignificant time is and how it is only factored in against the pain of loss and the process of grief in our lives.
It is a scary thought that time is not infinite and that this sustaining resource will eventually take us from the only realm we've ever known.
A brilliant and intellectual reveal of the unwinding of time. I loved it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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John, thank you so much for your awesome review!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
There's nothing really wrong with the writing here, except that it is a bit over-written. It also jumps about quite a bit. You can tell you're a poet. This doesn't come off so much as a rant but more of a meditation on the subject.
There's a whole train of thought that believes time isn't linear anyway and that all things which happened, are happening and will happen are in fact all doing so at the same time. They all exist together in one space.
The aspect of perception is an interesting one as we all don't actually live in the same time frame anyway. Everyone processes information at a different or varying rate. - by the time we process an image or sound, the moment has already past meaning that we only ever experience the past and never the present. Because we process at different rates two people in the same room process at different speeds, meaning that essentially they are different time phases... lol
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Hi there,
There's nothing really wrong with the writing here, except that it is a bit over-written. It also jumps about quite a bit. You can tell you're a poet. This doesn't come off so much as a rant but more of a meditation on the subject.
There's a whole train of thought that believes time isn't linear anyway and that all things which happened, are happening and will happen are in fact all doing so at the same time. They all exist together in one space.
The aspect of perception is an interesting one as we all don't actually live in the same time frame anyway. Everyone processes information at a different or varying rate. - by the time we process an image or sound, the moment has already past meaning that we only ever experience the past and never the present. Because we process at different rates two people in the same room process at different speeds, meaning that essentially they are different time phases... lol
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you for your feedback, I appreciate it. I acknowledge and value your criticism regarding the flow and "overwriting". I am aware of my own tendencies and you're spot on there. lol Typically, I would have "tidied up" or revised a piece, more thoroughly before releasing it. However, in this case, my frantic writing is precisely what led me to consider it a rant. Nonetheless, I respect your differing perspective. Thank you for taking the time to read, also for your insightful commentary on the topic.
Comment from Wendy G
The most difficult thing to accept is that time is beyond our control. We can not make it go faster or slower, or stand still, or reverse, although these are sometimes our perceptions. Best wishes for your heartfelt and meaningful rant, in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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The most difficult thing to accept is that time is beyond our control. We can not make it go faster or slower, or stand still, or reverse, although these are sometimes our perceptions. Best wishes for your heartfelt and meaningful rant, in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Wendy! That truly means a lot to me. :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your rant was well thought out and written, Jessica.
I enjoyed reading it. You expressed your thoughts
and feelings about time well. You gave readers much
to think about. All in all, time is a man-made thing. We
measure our life by it. Grief however is a personal experience
that outweighs time in my opinion. It will always be with
those who are left no matter what time has to do with it.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Your rant was well thought out and written, Jessica.
I enjoyed reading it. You expressed your thoughts
and feelings about time well. You gave readers much
to think about. All in all, time is a man-made thing. We
measure our life by it. Grief however is a personal experience
that outweighs time in my opinion. It will always be with
those who are left no matter what time has to do with it.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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I wholeheartedly agree, Jan. Time is not worth having without love. And if no love, no grief! Thank you.
Jessica
Comment from papa55mike
I recently wrote a poem saying that we are time enfolded in this body. It's amazing how time slows when grief is present; days seem to drag on to infinity, and the nights seem endless. What a wonderfully written piece.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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I recently wrote a poem saying that we are time enfolded in this body. It's amazing how time slows when grief is present; days seem to drag on to infinity, and the nights seem endless. What a wonderfully written piece.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 10-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023
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I just have to say.. I peaked at your portfolio after reading your lovely review, so I could read this poem. I joined this sight about a month ago, and it's been a trip. So many brilliant writers, with profound pieces to display. Your poem, from the bottom of my heart, is the best I've read. It brought me to literal tears! I'll save the rest of my rave for my review.. I just had to say thank you !
