Ode To My Iphone
In celebration of my cell phone.50 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
A lot of truth in this. Cell phones do seem essential to someone's life or work. Let's face it. It's handy to be able to carry a phone with you wherever you go.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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A lot of truth in this. Cell phones do seem essential to someone's life or work. Let's face it. It's handy to be able to carry a phone with you wherever you go.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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This is absolutely true. Thank you for your review comments.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Well done, God's faithful son, this is one son of a gun masterpiece.
Never being satisfied tough I would have ended it a tidbit differently, like instead of "They say a man should cling to his wife,
My cell phone's essential to my life."
Mine would have been:
"but she's not as essential to my life ...
as is my phone."
haven't heard from you for a while. Hope all is well.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Well done, God's faithful son, this is one son of a gun masterpiece.
Never being satisfied tough I would have ended it a tidbit differently, like instead of "They say a man should cling to his wife,
My cell phone's essential to my life."
Mine would have been:
"but she's not as essential to my life ...
as is my phone."
haven't heard from you for a while. Hope all is well.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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All is fine. One thing I have become convinced of. A poem is never finished, there will always be alternatives. Always be, I should have said this or I should have said that. It never ends. It is a wonder anything ever gets completed. Thank you for your great comments.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
Your words are So true. People would totally be lost without cellphones. Your poem has a great flow and rhyme. Very well put together. Photo compliments your words.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Your words are So true. People would totally be lost without cellphones. Your poem has a great flow and rhyme. Very well put together. Photo compliments your words.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you, so glad you liked it.
Comment from Jim Wile
I'm with you; they're necessary, but I'm not lost without one as many people seem to be, who've become so dependent for their amusement aspects. I loved the metaphor of the phone serving as the protagonist's wife.
The poem rhymes well, but the meter, which is mostly iambic tetrameter, could be a little more consistent to improve the cadence.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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I'm with you; they're necessary, but I'm not lost without one as many people seem to be, who've become so dependent for their amusement aspects. I loved the metaphor of the phone serving as the protagonist's wife.
The poem rhymes well, but the meter, which is mostly iambic tetrameter, could be a little more consistent to improve the cadence.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your review comments.
Comment from Nicki Nance
Nothing like a poem that all of us can relate to. Your graphic choice of a close up suggested your close relationship. The rhymes are clever. The meaning is a reality check. Best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Nothing like a poem that all of us can relate to. Your graphic choice of a close up suggested your close relationship. The rhymes are clever. The meaning is a reality check. Best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your generous and supportive comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
This Ode to My iPhone shows the readers the aspect of living connected that is both positive and negative. It would be silly to live in a cave while civilization races on, but it isn't necessary to know everything, everywhere, all at once.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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This Ode to My iPhone shows the readers the aspect of living connected that is both positive and negative. It would be silly to live in a cave while civilization races on, but it isn't necessary to know everything, everywhere, all at once.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Or is it? Hmmm. Thanks Bill, I appreciate your fun comments.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good ode to your Iphone. You used very good descriptive words and words that seem like so many would be using if they had written this. Thanks for sharing. blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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This is a very good ode to your Iphone. You used very good descriptive words and words that seem like so many would be using if they had written this. Thanks for sharing. blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you Teri. I appreciate your comments as well as you telling me your name, not everyone includes their name.
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
Well done, I thought this was was light, clever and entertaining! That last line made me laugh. Cell phones have definitely changed humans' ability to connect with one another face-to-face, which is why I thought your poem was a witty play on that!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Well done, I thought this was was light, clever and entertaining! That last line made me laugh. Cell phones have definitely changed humans' ability to connect with one another face-to-face, which is why I thought your poem was a witty play on that!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your kind and supportive comments.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm releaved that your notes say you don't necessarily feel this attached to you cell phone. I think they have become why to essential to too many people. I know people who sit in the same room and text someone six feet away rather than talk. It is a neat poem though and it is the way a lot of people feel about this gadget. I mainly use mine when for emergencies and for convenience of getting in touch with someone fast.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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I'm releaved that your notes say you don't necessarily feel this attached to you cell phone. I think they have become why to essential to too many people. I know people who sit in the same room and text someone six feet away rather than talk. It is a neat poem though and it is the way a lot of people feel about this gadget. I mainly use mine when for emergencies and for convenience of getting in touch with someone fast.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Yes they can be a handy nuisance. Good at times, a real pain at other times.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and nice presentation, nomi.
-Your notes are appreciated. Cell phones are needed,
but we still use our landline as the primary phone.
-You wrote a very good poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-The last two verses are my favorite.
-The people who walk around with ear buds,
and can't even hear you, or you think they're
talking to you are annoying!
-I like the humor in the last verse.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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-Good artwork and nice presentation, nomi.
-Your notes are appreciated. Cell phones are needed,
but we still use our landline as the primary phone.
-You wrote a very good poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-The last two verses are my favorite.
-The people who walk around with ear buds,
and can't even hear you, or you think they're
talking to you are annoying!
-I like the humor in the last verse.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you. I tried to get my message across with the use of smile inducing words and images.
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You are welcome, and I think you did a good job.
