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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Forgotten Glory"A Collection Of Mini Stories
19 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, this didn't show up in my inbox and it being so late in the week I almost didn't see it at all. But I'm glad to see you back and hope the world is treating you well! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Well, this didn't show up in my inbox and it being so late in the week I almost didn't see it at all. But I'm glad to see you back and hope the world is treating you well! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Certainly appreciate your review. Believe, at least for now, have done all that can be done to resolve the issue I stepped away from FanStory for. Now, perhaps back to some regular postings again.
Comment from JT traveller
I can relate to your prose. When an idea comes to mind I have to write it down immediately, from there is grows. I find the words never have the same intent if lost forever and have to be re written.
A great story with a surprise ending. Perfect.
A thoroughly enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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I can relate to your prose. When an idea comes to mind I have to write it down immediately, from there is grows. I find the words never have the same intent if lost forever and have to be re written.
A great story with a surprise ending. Perfect.
A thoroughly enjoyable read.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thanks. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Wouldn't that be a trying situation though? You write a story for a contest and then end up leaving it on the bus. I think she should have gotten back on the bus and fetched her story.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Wouldn't that be a trying situation though? You write a story for a contest and then end up leaving it on the bus. I think she should have gotten back on the bus and fetched her story.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from jessizero
I liked your short short story. It did indeed have a surprise at the end! I wasn't expecting that at all. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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I liked your short short story. It did indeed have a surprise at the end! I wasn't expecting that at all. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from w.j.debi
This sounds like something I would do and made me smile as I related to it.
Your writing flows smoothly. Great job with the background and then giving us the surprise at the end.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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This sounds like something I would do and made me smile as I related to it.
Your writing flows smoothly. Great job with the background and then giving us the surprise at the end.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. That would be a nightmare for most writers. Instead of a computer hard drive crash and losing the words to some recoverable or irrecoverable digital space, someone else could publish her work! Best wishes in the cotnest!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Lol. That would be a nightmare for most writers. Instead of a computer hard drive crash and losing the words to some recoverable or irrecoverable digital space, someone else could publish her work! Best wishes in the cotnest!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful poem entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt contest. Oh, no.... that's awful, poor Mary. :(
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Wonderful poem entry for the Surprise! 80 Words or Less writing prompt contest. Oh, no.... that's awful, poor Mary. :(
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Much appreciate the review.
Comment from jmdg1954
You may have a contest winner right here with this post.
Well done in only eighty words. You told a complete story with a surprise twist at the end,
Wonder if someone picked up that bestseller claimed it for them?
Nicely done.
John
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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You may have a contest winner right here with this post.
Well done in only eighty words. You told a complete story with a surprise twist at the end,
Wonder if someone picked up that bestseller claimed it for them?
Nicely done.
John
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I get what you're going for here and that there's a limited word count but this doesn't really add up. The whole novel is on scrap paper for a start and she's carrying it around like it and sets it on a bus seat. If it wasn't bound, given it's scrap paper, it would have been all over the bus when it stopped suddenly.
There's a lot of improbability attached to this piece in order for it to work and it just feels off.
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Hi there,
I get what you're going for here and that there's a limited word count but this doesn't really add up. The whole novel is on scrap paper for a start and she's carrying it around like it and sets it on a bus seat. If it wasn't bound, given it's scrap paper, it would have been all over the bus when it stopped suddenly.
There's a lot of improbability attached to this piece in order for it to work and it just feels off.
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Glad you thought this was good.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a very creative, but painful story. Many writers can relate to having a fabulous story that is lost for one reason or another. I often write on scrap paper and can relate to how it would feel if I left my winning story on a bus. Great job with this. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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This is a very creative, but painful story. Many writers can relate to having a fabulous story that is lost for one reason or another. I often write on scrap paper and can relate to how it would feel if I left my winning story on a bus. Great job with this. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2023
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Appreciate the review.