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Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "The Betrayed "First Poems
17 total reviews
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a sad one. I'm very sorry about this situation. I hope it's not your life story. If it is, please be positive. Just move on and forget about the past that bothers you. I find going out side everyday to have fresh air is very useful. It will cheer you up. I have been doing that since I was 16.
Well done and take care.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This is a sad one. I'm very sorry about this situation. I hope it's not your life story. If it is, please be positive. Just move on and forget about the past that bothers you. I find going out side everyday to have fresh air is very useful. It will cheer you up. I have been doing that since I was 16.
Well done and take care.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your insight. Much of what I write is about my life unfortunately. My family has done fhis. No I have no family so I write instead. It helps peel the onion and takes some of the power away. Yes walking is good. I have two football dogs...pomeranian...lol. they like being out. Thank you again. Have an awesome day!
Comment from shelley kaye
deep and thought-provoking with few words but much meaning
one suggestion, if i may, maybe try a blue background with a green font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley ð?¦?
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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deep and thought-provoking with few words but much meaning
one suggestion, if i may, maybe try a blue background with a green font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley ð?¦?
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you Shelly so much for interior review and your suggestions always. Welcome with me and for this time and for the awesome comments. I'm also appreciative I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Spitfire
Those lies do create a deep hole that is hard to climb out from. I bet this happens a lot in high school. Those who are jealous or green with envy can start rumors to destroy a rival's reputation. This works well as a poem with the near rhyming of hold and mold, black and cast. Your words are well chosen. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Those lies do create a deep hole that is hard to climb out from. I bet this happens a lot in high school. Those who are jealous or green with envy can start rumors to destroy a rival's reputation. This works well as a poem with the near rhyming of hold and mold, black and cast. Your words are well chosen. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. I really appreciate it. I'm also happy and touched of your kind words and for your time. I am grateful hope you have a great night!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Indeed, the pain and the scars that remain after betrayal are hard to forget, especially when the rift was caused by innuendo and lies. How to move on, except to trust that new friendships will be sincere and steadfast. You did a great job with expressing this in your poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Indeed, the pain and the scars that remain after betrayal are hard to forget, especially when the rift was caused by innuendo and lies. How to move on, except to trust that new friendships will be sincere and steadfast. You did a great job with expressing this in your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you for your fine comments and for your review. I appreciate your time and your insight. It is difficult to get passed betrayal but we try. Thank you again! Have a great day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
An impressive and striking image and imagery of betrayal, this conveys so palpably and succinctly the agony attached to loss of trust and communication. Well done and good luck in the contest, Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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An impressive and striking image and imagery of betrayal, this conveys so palpably and succinctly the agony attached to loss of trust and communication. Well done and good luck in the contest, Debbie
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you Debbie I'm really glad you liked it appreciate your time and your kind of comments too anything you wish to offer. I'm happy to receive!
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Thank you Debbie I'm really glad you liked it appreciate your time and your kind of comments too anything you wish to offer. I'm happy to receive!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is an intriguing short poem. It says so much in a few words. It reminds me of a time when a small newspaper published all kinds of falsehoods about a family business, way back in the early 1980s. Interesting use of 'mold' as if it is like something cast in inflexible metal that can't be bent or discarded.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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This is an intriguing short poem. It says so much in a few words. It reminds me of a time when a small newspaper published all kinds of falsehoods about a family business, way back in the early 1980s. Interesting use of 'mold' as if it is like something cast in inflexible metal that can't be bent or discarded.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your review, for your kind comments and your interesting insight. That is the trait of a poet though. Is it not? Thank you also for your time and for your review which is gratefully appreciated by me thank you again!
Comment from royowen
Yes, betrayal happened to me once, and it was the most painful occurrences in my life, and it too a long time to overcome the painfulness of that experience, beautifully written Lea, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Yes, betrayal happened to me once, and it was the most painful occurrences in my life, and it too a long time to overcome the painfulness of that experience, beautifully written Lea, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I'm sorry that happened to you Roy. It is so very painful true. I thank you for your insight and your kind review! Enjoy your day!
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Well done
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The dramatic picture is very arresting! It is true that once a person is type cast, it is often almost impossible to shake off the image, however false and distressing it my be!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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The dramatic picture is very arresting! It is true that once a person is type cast, it is often almost impossible to shake off the image, however false and distressing it my be!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you yes and you are also right? Thanks for taking the time to go over my phone and offer your review. I very much appreciate I hope you're having a good evening!
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All best wishes!
Comment from karenina
I see you've found your way around "Advanced Editor"--isn't it awesome to select a font, size, bold, italics, etc??? This so totally works, in every way, Lea. 5-7-5 is spot on.
INNUENDO...it's the worst, isn't it?
I'm so glad I chose to spend this afternoon reading each of your posts!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I see you've found your way around "Advanced Editor"--isn't it awesome to select a font, size, bold, italics, etc??? This so totally works, in every way, Lea. 5-7-5 is spot on.
INNUENDO...it's the worst, isn't it?
I'm so glad I chose to spend this afternoon reading each of your posts!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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The glad I'm on the bill I didn't think I could write a word. Imagine that I feel gifts came my way out in my hospital. Stay thank you very much again!!
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God leads us where he needs us. (Something my dad used to day)--
I was meant to find your work today, and it's been a wonderful journey!
Comment from Mark D. R.
Lea,
You included a dramatic image with your short contest poem. Interesting word selection throughout gives added meaning to your author note.
Mark
P.S. IMHO increasing your font size and bolding text may increase your presentation value to other FanStorian reviewers. Not a fan of initial caps or punctuation except when it reads as a sentence or a singular image.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Lea,
You included a dramatic image with your short contest poem. Interesting word selection throughout gives added meaning to your author note.
Mark
P.S. IMHO increasing your font size and bolding text may increase your presentation value to other FanStorian reviewers. Not a fan of initial caps or punctuation except when it reads as a sentence or a singular image.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Hi mark thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to do so valuable! At the risk of sounding like a complete bonehead I've been trying to find a little icon for font and size I have been unable to Do anything other than change his color if you know how I would appreciate your advice thanks and have a great day!
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Lea,
When composing your text lines, there is a link at the bottom left ?use advanced edit?. Then you can adjust your size, the text attribute, color, alignment, etc. Use the omega sign in the above window to insert special characters.
Good luck in changing your text.
Mark
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I was in that area yesterday in the advanced settings. I'm going to try again this thing just wants to be a bugger l o l
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Lea,
I only compose in the advanced edit mode. Just highlight what you want to do with your text and then select the multiple choices in the menu above the text box.
And don?t forget to SAVE your changes before exiting the edit mode (-;
Mark
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Appreciating it I hope you have a wonderful day!!
