Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Elixir of Life"Musing of an old man
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely triolet poem, JLR telling of the coming of spring by these 'ornate blooms.' I can't think of the name of these blooms, but instantly my mother-in-law's garden came to mind. She grew these by the score and knew the names of each variety. A lovely read, a lovely memory it brought up.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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This is a lovely triolet poem, JLR telling of the coming of spring by these 'ornate blooms.' I can't think of the name of these blooms, but instantly my mother-in-law's garden came to mind. She grew these by the score and knew the names of each variety. A lovely read, a lovely memory it brought up.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Valda,your shared memory makes me smile, thank you.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
An intricate and demanding short form which presents quite a challenge.
The effect is to suggest the cyclical nature of the seasons and plants. The illustration certainly supports this theme!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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An intricate and demanding short form which presents quite a challenge.
The effect is to suggest the cyclical nature of the seasons and plants. The illustration certainly supports this theme!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Sarah, great insight, thanks for reading my short poem.
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Best wishes!
Comment from Aussie
I guess you will be glad to see the wet elixir take a hike?
Spring is on it's way. Melting snow feeding growing bulbs beneath the saturated ground. Excellent. K xx
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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I guess you will be glad to see the wet elixir take a hike?
Spring is on it's way. Melting snow feeding growing bulbs beneath the saturated ground. Excellent. K xx
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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K yes we are so excited!the next nine out even months I just live a richer more active life.
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I think we all feel better for Spring. I know I will feel better for losing summer this week!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
you nailed the form my friend. You make it look easy. I like the image you chose - nicely complements the poetric verse. I like the last few lines the best.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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you nailed the form my friend. You make it look easy. I like the image you chose - nicely complements the poetric verse. I like the last few lines the best.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Hi Jake, as always, I thank you.
Comment from Nicki Nance
You chose an excellent subject for this repeating poem. The images and you create an invitation to spring. The photo you paired this with is perfect.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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You chose an excellent subject for this repeating poem. The images and you create an invitation to spring. The photo you paired this with is perfect.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Nicki, thank you for your thoughtful comments.
Comment from Sally Law
Beautifully written and illustrated piece in the triolet form, dear Jay. I don't recognize the flower, yet so vibrant in a tropical, passionate red.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge.
Sally :)) xo
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Beautifully written and illustrated piece in the triolet form, dear Jay. I don't recognize the flower, yet so vibrant in a tropical, passionate red.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge.
Sally :)) xo
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Smiles of appreciation!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your triolet was in great form, JLOR. I enjoyed reading it.
I liked the theme. You expressed it well in your descriptive
word choices. I could see everything as I read. Your repeating
lines were well written and fit in perfectly to carry the meaning--
not just as repeated lines. The art choice was a good one, too.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Your triolet was in great form, JLOR. I enjoyed reading it.
I liked the theme. You expressed it well in your descriptive
word choices. I could see everything as I read. Your repeating
lines were well written and fit in perfectly to carry the meaning--
not just as repeated lines. The art choice was a good one, too.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Jan, as always, thank you for all that you bring this group site.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Nice poem and an enjoyable read. I loved the photo. It wet nicely with your poem. I lay the repetition of ornate blooms above receding snow. To me your poem makes me think of spring soon to come . Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Nice poem and an enjoyable read. I loved the photo. It wet nicely with your poem. I lay the repetition of ornate blooms above receding snow. To me your poem makes me think of spring soon to come . Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Jacquelyn, thank you.
Comment from Raul1
This is a different kind of poetry I haven't read before. It's impressive and awesome. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like your poem. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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This is a different kind of poetry I haven't read before. It's impressive and awesome. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. I like your poem. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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Thanks Raul
Comment from lyenochka
I like your celebration of spring with this triolet about the "ornate blooms bursting forth." The bleeding hearts here don't bloom until months after the last snow but I like the idea of the colorful blooms appearing just after the snows recede and the "wet elixir" of the spring rains.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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I like your celebration of spring with this triolet about the "ornate blooms bursting forth." The bleeding hearts here don't bloom until months after the last snow but I like the idea of the colorful blooms appearing just after the snows recede and the "wet elixir" of the spring rains.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2023
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lyenochka, thanks for your comments.
