Haiku (in black uniform)
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
Silent armies soldiers on...marching ants in line is a wonderful way to set the trap for the surprise conclusion and sartori for this haiku. I did not see the end coming as you expertly held back on a picture so it was a complete surprise!
Jesse
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Silent armies soldiers on...marching ants in line is a wonderful way to set the trap for the surprise conclusion and sartori for this haiku. I did not see the end coming as you expertly held back on a picture so it was a complete surprise!
Jesse
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Jesse. I really appreciate the very encouraging review. I knew if I put a picture to this haiku it would all be too obvious :-)
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And you were right, my friend!
