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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Planning My Own Funeral"Do good and feel good poems
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Comment from strandregs
Yes but did you mix sight and site.
You will be out of sight
But not likely leave that site.
There's not much thunder in six feet under.
I liked your humour.
Good look.
And Belgian Chocolate. :-))Z.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Yes but did you mix sight and site.
You will be out of sight
But not likely leave that site.
There's not much thunder in six feet under.
I liked your humour.
Good look.
And Belgian Chocolate. :-))Z.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Haha! Strandegs, you are pretty funny yourself, Myfriend! Thanks so much!
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please tell me your name after the vote so i can consider with great reverence following you to the ends of the word.
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I will do anything for
Belgian Chocolate!!!
Comment from Frank Malley
"Planning My Own Funeral" is a funny poem that takes the ultimately serious topic of death and interment into a humorous domain. The details within the poem pick at common concerns that people have in considering what will occur when they die. Will they be presented attractively? Will their obits be complimentary? Will the surviving spouse be too quick in replacing a deceased partner? The light, tripping trimeter of this rhyming poem moves its funny ideas and questions along entertainingly. Line ten would be better metrically if it read 'Choose food that made me thrive.' I think stanza eight could easily be improved; I think sometimes the eagerness to present work on FS pushes aside the improvements that could exist as a result of a little revision.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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"Planning My Own Funeral" is a funny poem that takes the ultimately serious topic of death and interment into a humorous domain. The details within the poem pick at common concerns that people have in considering what will occur when they die. Will they be presented attractively? Will their obits be complimentary? Will the surviving spouse be too quick in replacing a deceased partner? The light, tripping trimeter of this rhyming poem moves its funny ideas and questions along entertainingly. Line ten would be better metrically if it read 'Choose food that made me thrive.' I think stanza eight could easily be improved; I think sometimes the eagerness to present work on FS pushes aside the improvements that could exist as a result of a little revision.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2023
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Awe Frank, we are so on the page again. Stanza eight was given to me by a reviewer, and I put it on there to see how it would be received. I just took it off as I wasn't that pleased with it either, or maybe should have thought to change the wording around first. Also, as you requested, I did change the food line and I agree, it does look much better now. So once again, I thank you for your very kind feedback and encouraging comments. And now after writng this, lol, I think I will get cremated. So I thank you once again, my very dear friend.
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I struggle with the idea of cremation. When I recognize the sort of mummification that is most often practiced in our world today, for total costs of 8K to 20K, I am forced to look at the fact that whatever happens after I die, my physical remnants won't play a part in it, except as replenishing, ultimately, the world's supply of organic materials. Hmmm. Not a promising future!
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You are so right. In more ways than one. I worry about my grandchildren. Years ago, interest rates may have been 14% when we got married, but we knew how to do without and put as much towards principal every month as the payment, and literally go without. kids, including my own, have the best of everything, even tho they saw us work our butts off for things. I yearn for those rough good ole days, because we took pride in what we had. Sorry, don't mean to ramble. But I get it.
No, my plans are to get buried, but I still think I might need that night light. LOL
Comment from ESOSTINE
Quite an interesting and humorous piece of poem to read. The musical pace of the work laced in humour made me forgot it was all about funeral. You perfectly achieved the humour it was intended to convey. The 4th verse reminded me that we have all got some secrets that better follow us to the grave than revealed. Hahahaha! Well penned. Warmest regards.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Quite an interesting and humorous piece of poem to read. The musical pace of the work laced in humour made me forgot it was all about funeral. You perfectly achieved the humour it was intended to convey. The 4th verse reminded me that we have all got some secrets that better follow us to the grave than revealed. Hahahaha! Well penned. Warmest regards.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Esostine, I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family what my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
Comment from jenintorre
Well what a very entertaining and unusual tribute. It certainly made me smile. I think this is a very good entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Well what a very entertaining and unusual tribute. It certainly made me smile. I think this is a very good entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Jen,, I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family what my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
A tribute to yourself on your death bed/legs, now that's an unusual slant to this prompt. The text is a great size. The message is funny and cleverly presented. The rhyme scheme works well. The visual fits. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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A tribute to yourself on your death bed/legs, now that's an unusual slant to this prompt. The text is a great size. The message is funny and cleverly presented. The rhyme scheme works well. The visual fits. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Sandra, I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family what my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
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You are welcome. My funeral is paid for in full except for the flowers.
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You my sweet friend are very smart. I have my burial plot and my hubby has his cremation paid for. Yknow, there really is no need to give mortuary?s thousands of dollars.
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I agree. I am being cremated. I have my urn and all selected.
Comment from Janet Foor
Fun and funny tribute to you. I love it. In enjoyed the non serious funeral sentiments with just the right amount of humor, poking fun at you.
Delightful!
Blessings and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Fun and funny tribute to you. I love it. In enjoyed the non serious funeral sentiments with just the right amount of humor, poking fun at you.
Delightful!
Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Janet, I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family what my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
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My husband has filled out a book like that as well. It?s comforting to know those things now rather than try to figure them out at a more stressful time. I did enjoy your poem and plan to see you in the hereafter.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I enjoyed the humor in this poem. Of course, I like the idea of taking the deceased cell phone and texting thank you for coming at the funeral. I love that the cousin might tell all the secrets. Even in the afterlife a secret is a secret. This was very cute and lighthearted. Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed the humor in this poem. Of course, I like the idea of taking the deceased cell phone and texting thank you for coming at the funeral. I love that the cousin might tell all the secrets. Even in the afterlife a secret is a secret. This was very cute and lighthearted. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Grethen, I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family what my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
Comment from Atiri
I love how this is written. There is definitely humor in the situation, however, it is a bit sad. It's like she has no one she can truly trust. Either way, it's excellently written.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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I love how this is written. There is definitely humor in the situation, however, it is a bit sad. It's like she has no one she can truly trust. Either way, it's excellently written.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Atiri, I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family what my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
Comment from damommy
I enjoyed reading about your funeral plans. It's light-hearted and amusing. Especially about your husband finding someone too soon, and your children rolling their eyes.
Gravesight should be grave site, I think.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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I enjoyed reading about your funeral plans. It's light-hearted and amusing. Especially about your husband finding someone too soon, and your children rolling their eyes.
Gravesight should be grave site, I think.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Y?vonne, I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family what my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
Comment from Kaiku
a nightlight to continue your writing and reviewing I`m sure. I´m not sure how far humor will take you in the time of death but it can`t hurt. Funny stuff.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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a nightlight to continue your writing and reviewing I`m sure. I´m not sure how far humor will take you in the time of death but it can`t hurt. Funny stuff.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2023
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Hi Kaiku,I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your awesome review and your lovely comments about my funeral poem. Writing this gave me a little bit of an eerie feeling because it was starting to feel too real. However, I do have a book that I am in the process of filling out, that tells my family wHi Kaiku, my wishes are. Lol, ActuallyI would rather not think about it at all, you know ?
It does help that I am pretty confident where my journey will lead me.
Thanks again, my dear friend!
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