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28 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Love this. From the image selected to the "innocent" green background, to the "small" font (as in her broken spirit)--to crisp and precise word choices that cut as sharp as a whip, you've managed to compose a six-star worthy poem!
I'm often down to my last six by Wednesday! Happy to leave these here with you!
(Note---"gaslighting" is one word > in author's notes)
I work with battered women.
This one took my breath away.
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Love this. From the image selected to the "innocent" green background, to the "small" font (as in her broken spirit)--to crisp and precise word choices that cut as sharp as a whip, you've managed to compose a six-star worthy poem!
I'm often down to my last six by Wednesday! Happy to leave these here with you!
(Note---"gaslighting" is one word > in author's notes)
I work with battered women.
This one took my breath away.
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I'm really happy you liked this one and it's so good that you work with so much more problems like that because there's so many of them. What's 1 once never again. Thank you for the wonderful writing as well i'm very happy to receive it an honor too!
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With your permission, I'd like to copy this and share it with some of my women... I know it wold mean a lot to them!
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Absolutely of course be honored if you did!
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Thanks! I will be SURE to credit you as author!
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
Lea,
This deserves a SIX; hence, here!
There's something that leaves me breathless about this poem, and I'm not certain what it is. Word choice mixed with word choice. I can feel the hot steaming ice cracking under my feet. Starting with "Sublime" and arriving at "Divine" is powerful wrapping for a "jealous bed"...
You have a gift. Thank you!
Richard
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Lea,
This deserves a SIX; hence, here!
There's something that leaves me breathless about this poem, and I'm not certain what it is. Word choice mixed with word choice. I can feel the hot steaming ice cracking under my feet. Starting with "Sublime" and arriving at "Divine" is powerful wrapping for a "jealous bed"...
You have a gift. Thank you!
Richard
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much Richard I'm shocked I'm completely shocked. I'm glad you like it I'm so glad you like it yeah that's the way I appreciate you looking at this home and taking you that awesome. Rating very good thank you awesome hope you have a great night!
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Thumbs up!!!
Comment from Gloria ....
I really like what you have done with your presentation here. The misty imagery illustrating the lasting effects of psychological manipulation.
The poem works with striking images that surface from the mist.
Excellent work and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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I really like what you have done with your presentation here. The misty imagery illustrating the lasting effects of psychological manipulation.
The poem works with striking images that surface from the mist.
Excellent work and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you Gloria for your kind words and for you a review. I'm very appreciative and for taking the time to read it over. I'm equally appreciative. Thank you so much again and I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is very creative and impressive to read. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Nice job! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It is very creative and impressive to read. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poem. Nice job! Thank you for sharing! Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem and for your review and for your kind words. I very much appreciate them and I hope that you're having a great evening!
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You're welcome, my friend! I am having a great day and thank you for telling me!
Comment from cflorian8
This phone will be reliable for a lot of people. I myself have recently just learned how to appreciate myself and not allow others to take advantage of me. The picture on time combined to make a very chilling picture. Most victims of abuse don't realize they're being abused until it's too late. You show great strength by expressing yourself in this poem.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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This phone will be reliable for a lot of people. I myself have recently just learned how to appreciate myself and not allow others to take advantage of me. The picture on time combined to make a very chilling picture. Most victims of abuse don't realize they're being abused until it's too late. You show great strength by expressing yourself in this poem.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review! I appreciate your words and your insight. I thank you also for taking the time to read this too! Hope you have a great night!
Comment from joyderision
The raw imagery and sharp syllables that you use really help to paint the picture. The emotions in this are vivid and palpable. Excellent usage of color tied to feelings-
"Twisted snarl red."
Forcing the image into the readers head of something cruel. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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The raw imagery and sharp syllables that you use really help to paint the picture. The emotions in this are vivid and palpable. Excellent usage of color tied to feelings-
"Twisted snarl red."
Forcing the image into the readers head of something cruel. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2023
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I'm so glad you like to thank you! For taking the time and offering your thoughts I thank you for that as well as much appreciated!
Hope you're having a great night!
Comment from Ric Myworld
As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But even an untrained ear can read and enjoy the rhyme, meter, and verses they can't write. To be touched my another's sensitivities.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But even an untrained ear can read and enjoy the rhyme, meter, and verses they can't write. To be touched my another's sensitivities.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2023
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Thank you very much for your kind review. I very much appreciate it and for your time as well glad you enjoyed it. I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Sometimes I have to look up some of the meanings to conclude the review. Gas lightning is an interesting word. Abuse is not a good thing. Gas lighting happens when an abuser tries to control a victim by twisting their sense of reality; and is when a partner doing something abusive and then tries to deny it happened or perhaps can convince their victims that they're mentally unfit or too sensitive.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Sometimes I have to look up some of the meanings to conclude the review. Gas lightning is an interesting word. Abuse is not a good thing. Gas lighting happens when an abuser tries to control a victim by twisting their sense of reality; and is when a partner doing something abusive and then tries to deny it happened or perhaps can convince their victims that they're mentally unfit or too sensitive.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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You're absolutely right! got the nail on the head, very good insight too I must say. Yes and that's the definition I had in mind when I wrote it. I thank you so much for taking the time to have a read and offer your thoughts as well as your kind rating! Very much appreciated hope you have a great night!
Comment from kahpot
Partner abuse whether physical or mental just is not on, one must decide to be strong and leave love behind, a wonderful Cinquain, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Partner abuse whether physical or mental just is not on, one must decide to be strong and leave love behind, a wonderful Cinquain, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 02-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2023
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Oh wow thank you for the high praise I appreciate your comments very much! Hope you're having a great night!!
Comment from ESOSTINE
The poem flowed quite well and clearly presents the image of the abused who though hates the abuse she suffers still has some emotional (love) connection with the abuser. Quite a tough situation. Well done, dear LEA and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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The poem flowed quite well and clearly presents the image of the abused who though hates the abuse she suffers still has some emotional (love) connection with the abuser. Quite a tough situation. Well done, dear LEA and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much! I'm very glad that you like it thank you for your lovely review and taking the time to read it I very much appreciate it I hope that you have a great day!