Busy Bob's Side Jobs
He lived off his tips, but poem tells why he didn't have to58 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Sorry, I don't have any sixes left, but this is a winner, and if it doesn't win, I will be mega surprised. I love this ABC poem, it tells a story of one man's selfless care for those who have nothing. I wish there were many, many more people like this around. Very well done and good luck!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Sorry, I don't have any sixes left, but this is a winner, and if it doesn't win, I will be mega surprised. I love this ABC poem, it tells a story of one man's selfless care for those who have nothing. I wish there were many, many more people like this around. Very well done and good luck!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Sandra! Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story stay in meter and make sense. But you just made it all worth it. I don't think some understood that it was a contest entry. You are awesome my sweet friend! Thanks again for your very kind comments!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. I enjoyed reading and think Busy Bob would be a wonderful person. I would say you not only met this prompt but surpassed it.
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us. I enjoyed reading and think Busy Bob would be a wonderful person. I would say you not only met this prompt but surpassed it.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Barb, Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun, but a challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story stay in meter and make sense. But you just made it all worth it, as I don't think some understood that it was even a contest entry. You are awesome Barb!
Thanks again for your very kind comments!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging interesting, descriptive and creative.
The author's words, for me, showed what kindness and caring is all about.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes with these words.
Have a great weekend!....Maria
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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The author's words are engaging interesting, descriptive and creative.
The author's words, for me, showed what kindness and caring is all about.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes with these words.
Have a great weekend!....Maria
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Maria, Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story stay in meter and make sense. I don't think some understood that it was a contest entry. Thanks again for your very kind comments!
Comment from patcelaw
I heard a story just a couple days ago about Michael Jordan the famous basketball player who donated $10 million to the Make-A-Wish foundation. This is admirable thing for him to have done. If more of the wealthy stars of this land will donate to charity like that one, there would be no lack, and the things that those charities can do for others Patricia
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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I heard a story just a couple days ago about Michael Jordan the famous basketball player who donated $10 million to the Make-A-Wish foundation. This is admirable thing for him to have done. If more of the wealthy stars of this land will donate to charity like that one, there would be no lack, and the things that those charities can do for others Patricia
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Pat. Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story make sense. Thanks again for your very kind comments!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, Busy Bob didn't live off his tips and money found on the beach he gave his money and tips to children who were in need.
So, the line above the title is a little bit misleading yet the outcome is much better, to say the least. Thank you for sharing this loving tale about the people who give of themselves and try hard to cover the children with their winnings.
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Well, Busy Bob didn't live off his tips and money found on the beach he gave his money and tips to children who were in need.
So, the line above the title is a little bit misleading yet the outcome is much better, to say the least. Thank you for sharing this loving tale about the people who give of themselves and try hard to cover the children with their winnings.
Jesse
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Jesse, Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story make sense. It shouldn't have been confusing at all tho, as he gave his millions (he was a millionaire) to needy children and lived off of the tips and money he found while picking up trash. Thanks again my dear friend, for your very kind comments!
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Well, it was confusing, at least to me. A millionaire who gives freely of his money to children in need was not forthcoming in the ABC poem.
Might I suggest another line above the title?
Have a nice weekend.
Jesse
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You certainly can Jesse. I hate that with messaging, we can't show whether our emotions were kind or negative. And I got news for you my friend. Mine are always positive with you.
This was a very challenging prompt, because I did lots more than what was required, as I am sure you saw by the extra abc format at the end of lines, plus monorhymes. Then to keep it in meter too was an extra task, so I think I will try to reword the words above the title, in the description, to try to make it easier to understand. Your good friend, .........!
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I give my suggestion with kindness and only want to help make your poem clearer to others, if not me.
Please, I do not want to offend.
Thank you for understanding where I am coming from.
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Oh no, I did it again. What I was saying that my response to your suggestions was of kindness, as you didn't do or say anything wrong. You are a gem, Jesse. Don't ever think otherwise. Love ya!!!!
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Great! I am glad we understand each other.
Love ya, too!
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I made a couple little changes, so hope it helps.
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I checked it out. The changes help a lot!
Comment from Brandon Clark
Nice use of the prompt! Hopefully based on a true story, but if not, maybe it could inspire somebody to do similar...it's needed all around the world all the time! Great way to use this platform and share your feelings on the subject!
Great Job!!
Brandon
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Nice use of the prompt! Hopefully based on a true story, but if not, maybe it could inspire somebody to do similar...it's needed all around the world all the time! Great way to use this platform and share your feelings on the subject!
Great Job!!
Brandon
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Brandon, Actually only based on a true story, but tried to keep my facts as close as I can without ruining the structure. Thanks so much for the kind words for my A . B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story make sense. Thanks again for your very kind words!
Comment from Nicki Nance
Excellent. I like how you presented this with a photo that told its own story, an interesting, echoing twist on the ABC format, and a design within the lines done with boldface. Quite clever.
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Excellent. I like how you presented this with a photo that told its own story, an interesting, echoing twist on the ABC format, and a design within the lines done with boldface. Quite clever.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Nicki, Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story make sense. Thanks again, my sweet friend!
Comment from Terry Broxson
How creative is this poem? I would have to say very creative. I have never seen this done before. I think you have a great entry for this contest, good luck. Outstanding message, style, and presentation. Terry.
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How creative is this poem? I would have to say very creative. I have never seen this done before. I think you have a great entry for this contest, good luck. Outstanding message, style, and presentation. Terry.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thanks so very much Terry. I think you were among very few that even realized it was an abc poem. So I truly appreciate that you got the letter at the end of line as well . Thanks again, my kind friend.
Comment from jmdg1954
Not only did you write your poem in doubled ABC's, you told a great story.
Bob was happy providing what he could for this less fortunate.I guess some would call him a saint.
Nicely done and best of luck in the contest.
Cheers to providing for those in need.
John
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Not only did you write your poem in doubled ABC's, you told a great story.
Bob was happy providing what he could for this less fortunate.I guess some would call him a saint.
Nicely done and best of luck in the contest.
Cheers to providing for those in need.
John
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Lol, John, thanks so very much for paying attention! I think you were among very few that even realized it was an abc poem. So I truly appreciate that you got the first and last words. Thanks again, my sweet friend.
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You?re welcome!
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a heartwarming story. If there were more people like this, the world would be a better place.
You've definitely have managed to convey a feeling in this poem. I love Bob.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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This is a heartwarming story. If there were more people like this, the world would be a better place.
You've definitely have managed to convey a feeling in this poem. I love Bob.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Hi there Heather! Thanks so much for the kind words for my A . B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, and still make the story make sense. Thanks again for your kind comments!
