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Busy Bob's Side Jobs

He lived off his tips, but poem tells why he didn't have to

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Comment from karenina
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Overachiever you! First AND last word beginning with A, B, C, D, and even E (although you could have picked any letter for that last line!) I wonder how many of today's millionaires would be out there doing this? I can think of at least a few prominent ones who would NOT!

Congrats on the win (belatedly)

Karenina

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2023

Comment from HarryT
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Nice sentiment. Good rhyming. Structure works well. Certainly touches one's emotions. Would have selected a different color for framing, perhaps a light blue, but just my opinion.

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
    Thanks Harry for your very kind comments regarding my poem. I appreciate your valuable feedback as well. thanks again my friend.
reply by HarryT on 25-Feb-2023
    You are most welcome.
Comment from Raul1
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I believe that you already are on your way to win first place. It's impressive. Nice job! Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Very good work! I like it. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
    Thanks Raul, for your kind review for BBSJ.
reply by Raul1 on 25-Feb-2023
    You're welcome, my friend!
Comment from Boogienights
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That's an amazing story, someone being so selfless. Are there people like that left in this world I wonder? I enjoyed this terrific contest entry and the uplifting story. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 25-Feb-2023
    I appreciate your kind review for Bob?s Side Jobs
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Excellent ABC poem with a twist. I've never seen the required lettering used at the end, as well as the beginning. You did an excellent job and it was such a great story as well. Have a great evening. Shirley

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
    Hi there Shirley. Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story make sense. Thanks again for your very kind comments, my dear friend
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Great entry for the ABC writing contest. It's a moving story.

I love the imagery and presentation.

Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
    Hi Gyps! Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the stor make sense. Thanks again for your very kind comments, my dear friend
Comment from w.j.debi
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I've never seen an ABC poem that had both the first and last word of the line end with the same letter. What a clever twist and I'm sure a bit of a challenge to execute.
Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
    Hi there Debi. Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the stor make sense. Thanks again for your very kind comments, my dear friend
Comment from Anne Johnston
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You were very creative on this one using the letters for both the first and last words of each line. You have chosen a great picture and told a very interesting story.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
    Anne, like always you are so sweet. Thank you for the kind comments about this poem. I wish I could remember more about the real man, but I do know that he retired this way and gave his empire away to others, mostly children in need. I do appreciate your lovely review so much!
reply by Anne Johnston on 20-Feb-2023
    You are very welcome
Comment from lancellot
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This is a very interesting entry. A mini story in poetic form. It sounds like Bob was an unsung hero in his community.

Carried people's groceries, for food and little Care

Does this line mean, he carried groceries to get food?

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023
    Hi there Lance. Yes, the article that I read once about a man like this, was that he lived like he had nothing. He accepted food and a little care and slept in the store room of the store where he helped carry the groceries. It has been a while, but at least that is what I remember of the story. I didn't even plan on using his life when I started, but it fell into place the best it could with such limitations of trying to keep up the meter, tell the story and get the abcde letters on the front and end of each line. Thank you so much my friend for your very kind review.
Comment from Aussie
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Normally, the last line doesn't follow the alphabet. But this is a prompt. I liked the way you closed each line with the same letter - haven't seen that used before. This is a feel-good poem about a man cleaning up the land to help others. I enjoyed your contest entry. K xx

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 20-Feb-2023

    Hi there Kay, Thanks so much for the kind words for my A B C D E poem. It was fun adding the challenge of monorhyme, and add the last word too with the consecutive letter, as well as beginning and still make the story make sense. And yeah, I just used the letter E because it felt more balanced. Thanks again for your very kind comments, my dear friend
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