Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

Prevent homelessness and hopelessness and Get help for those who fell their lie is over. One must believe in o self in order to help others have hope. Call suicide help line.
Sunday Feb.19-2023.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023

Thanks but too late for a Hotline number but I'll take a Hot Bath and a Hot babes Number!
Doctor Ricky

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

So many people in the US are only one paycheck away from homelessness. It's sad, especially with all we have to offer or before our present government, had to offer. Thank you for sharing.

Finally it becomes whyperfectly Clear. (comma after 'Finally and 'why perfectly')

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023

Thanks Barbara for believing in me and in this beautiful piece.
To show the world the other side of reality.
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Brandon Clark

Excellent

Thanks for using this platform for good. Sometimes I like to remind folks that homelessness is not just for adults who don't want to work, but that there are also children out there that can't do much in the way of improving their situation.

Caught one typo...otherwise excellent! It is the last line of "stanza" 5:
whyperfectly
why perfectly

Thanks again for sharing this important post!! Hope you are well,
Brandon

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023

Thanks Brandon for reviewing this. My strength's not in my grammar. It's more in my objective content.
Doctor Ricky

reply by Brandon Clark on 18-Feb-2023

Right where it should be! I struggle with mild to moderate OCD...lol.

reply by Brandon Clark on 18-Feb-2023

Right where it should be! I struggle with mild to moderate OCD...lol.

reply by Brandon Clark on 18-Feb-2023

Right where it should be! I struggle with mild to moderate OCD...lol.

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

I appreciate the nod to the great EAP. The Raven has had such an impact on so many of us.

One small suggestion Ricky,

"...Reaching out but you forgotten." You are? You're? I am not sure.

Another beautiful piece of writing.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023

Thanks JT. My power is in my word not my grammar.
I have quite a few writers here that help me with that.
Doctor Ricky

reply by JT traveller on 18-Feb-2023

Have a great day Ricky. Jacqueline 😊

Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Ricky this is an amazing poem and it obviously comes from your heart And you're deep belief in a higher power. in my opinion of course there's a God this life would not make sense without one. We are spiritual beings having a human experience. We are supposed to make mistakes we are supposed to stumble and fall and experience what it is to get backup again All these events and things are designed to teach us and hone our souls. Your phone has impact and speaks directly to the fundamental issue we are We all wonder about deep in ourselves. The 2nd to last stanza and the final line I believe it should say it's instead of it. Other than that your Palm is perfection in itself and love your word choices and how it flows is amazing Thank you for your submission I hope you have a wonderful evening!

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023

Damn!
That pesty "It" word messed me up again!
Oh well Yes, if I just believe it won't happen again?
Oops I did it again!
Britney Spears.
And, Thanks for coming aboard with this one!
Doctor Ricky 1025
"Still Preaching to the Choir here at Fanstory"

reply by Lea Tonin1 on 18-Feb-2023

Have an awesome evening big fella!