The Farewell
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Farewell - Final"Last conversations with dad
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Kaiku,
I would have been outside as well. I wouldn't be able to take the stress of the moment. I'd also be a coward.
I think part of the reason for my abstinence would be that I went through the last moments of life of my mother-in-law a couple of years before my father's passing. It was fresh in my mind, a very emotional time for the whole family.
Kimbob
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Hi Kaiku,
I would have been outside as well. I wouldn't be able to take the stress of the moment. I'd also be a coward.
I think part of the reason for my abstinence would be that I went through the last moments of life of my mother-in-law a couple of years before my father's passing. It was fresh in my mind, a very emotional time for the whole family.
Kimbob
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Thank you sir. All the best.
Comment from eliz100
I believe you did a great job capturing the last moments of a man's life. He was loved by his family and an upstanding member of the community. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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I believe you did a great job capturing the last moments of a man's life. He was loved by his family and an upstanding member of the community. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023
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Nice. Thanks.
Comment from Ulla
I have missed most of this script and for that I'm sorry. I can understand why Kevin was reluctant to go in to his father's deathbed. He was afraid he wouldn't be able to cope. He might live to regret that he missed his moment with his dad. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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I have missed most of this script and for that I'm sorry. I can understand why Kevin was reluctant to go in to his father's deathbed. He was afraid he wouldn't be able to cope. He might live to regret that he missed his moment with his dad. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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pretty accurate on the regret. It has lingered for 18 years. Thanks for your nice review.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
I would have hid like you outside .. I don't like being emotional in front of people not even if family or close friends.
Nor do I like seeing others break down in tears like fountains.
That said, bless Peggy that she came and dragged you inside just in time.
I enjoyed this script about your father s last three days of life and how each sibling dealt with his imminent death.
It was a very emotional journey and your words often tugged at my heart strings. Thank you for sharing.
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Ciao!
I would have hid like you outside .. I don't like being emotional in front of people not even if family or close friends.
Nor do I like seeing others break down in tears like fountains.
That said, bless Peggy that she came and dragged you inside just in time.
I enjoyed this script about your father s last three days of life and how each sibling dealt with his imminent death.
It was a very emotional journey and your words often tugged at my heart strings. Thank you for sharing.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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your words are always comforting and makes me pleased that I have written what I have. Thanks Tempeste.
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Ciao!
Very glad to see your book ?The Farewell? is participating in the : book for the month competition? that alone is a win per se. 😐
Your entry has two votes now! 🍀
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Thanks. I went and read some off-line critiques of FanStory and found them very disappointing but in some cases, I believe true. I have become a bit disenchanted with the site. I had salmon this evening. Very good. Over Jasmine rice. Ciao my friend.
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Don?t tell me you were not aware there were ?issues ?here on fanstory ..
if anything the critiques you read just confirmed what you already knew.
I have met some interesting people here and I think I can live with the ? shortcomings ?
I complain to the committee, let off some steam, then move on.
There are other poetry websites but I?m sure they are not with flaws either .none are 100% correct.
I like salmon but only on baked bread. Not toasted ( that s dry) ?. baked.
I bake sliced bread in a non stick pan in a very small amount of butter on a very low fire.
Once golden I spread some ricotta and then place a fresh slice of salmon on top. Fresh tomatoes in vinegar and oil 🍅 as a side dish😋
Ciao!
PS: jasmine rice is like basmati rice , long grain, right?
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Yep. Making lasagna today. My favorite.
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Classic( bolognese) or with vegetables?
You make enough for a couple of days, I imagine.
I just finished binge-watching Hannibal the series.
When he served human parts to Jack and Will and other guests, it made my stomach cringe.
Great ending though.
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Classic lasagna Turned out really good.
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was very intense. I missed a lot of chapters, and thank you for providing some background to help understand what is going on. Kevin feels very remorseful and keeps blaming himself for something. Everyone is in grief, realing that the father's life is coming to an end. Losing a family member is always hard and can feel this from your story.
Thank you for sharing - this was interesting.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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This was very intense. I missed a lot of chapters, and thank you for providing some background to help understand what is going on. Kevin feels very remorseful and keeps blaming himself for something. Everyone is in grief, realing that the father's life is coming to an end. Losing a family member is always hard and can feel this from your story.
Thank you for sharing - this was interesting.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023
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Appreciate the insightful review. Thank you.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Such a sad, but an often repeated story. It hurts to lose those we love, but it is inevitable. Your story is nicely written and easy to follow and understand. Nice work.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Such a sad, but an often repeated story. It hurts to lose those we love, but it is inevitable. Your story is nicely written and easy to follow and understand. Nice work.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Appreciate the read from you. Thank you.
Comment from royowen
An excellent post my friend, the ending of life, although tragic, in this case has left a great legacy of love, honesty and and an example to follow, not all legacies are that good, this is a beautifully written script my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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An excellent post my friend, the ending of life, although tragic, in this case has left a great legacy of love, honesty and and an example to follow, not all legacies are that good, this is a beautifully written script my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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awesome. Thanks so much for the kind words.
Comment from w.j.debi
I don't know about scripts writing, but this was easy to read and understand. I could visual the scenes in my head as if watching it play out on the stage. Heart-wrenching too as the family gathers and as Kevin struggles how best to show the reject and love he wants to give to honor his father.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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I don't know about scripts writing, but this was easy to read and understand. I could visual the scenes in my head as if watching it play out on the stage. Heart-wrenching too as the family gathers and as Kevin struggles how best to show the reject and love he wants to give to honor his father.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Really appreciate your time in reading and providing comments. Thank you.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Kevin is like many members of families who are losing a beloved father. I couldn't cry when my dad lay dying on the hospital bed, but my throat closed up, I was too choked to speak. But I cried for weeks after. Your script was so real, it brought tears to my eyes. It was so well written. Very well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Kevin is like many members of families who are losing a beloved father. I couldn't cry when my dad lay dying on the hospital bed, but my throat closed up, I was too choked to speak. But I cried for weeks after. Your script was so real, it brought tears to my eyes. It was so well written. Very well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Your words are very kind. It was a tough write for me. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent script. It doesn't sound like fiction and since you are showing a picture of your father I wonder if it is based on his passing. I can understand Kevin's reluctance to be there because a death scene is an intense moment and most people would rather not show an emotional response in public.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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This is an excellent script. It doesn't sound like fiction and since you are showing a picture of your father I wonder if it is based on his passing. I can understand Kevin's reluctance to be there because a death scene is an intense moment and most people would rather not show an emotional response in public.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
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Thanks for reading and your nice review.
