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The Farewell

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Last conversations with dad

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Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
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Well written and in perfect order.
I know nothing about writing scripts, but I can see you took great pain in putting each scene with just the right setting and changing of the lights, etc...
well done.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Thank you. Very nice.
Comment from Spitfire
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This is written as a screenplay. The dramatic farewell scene would bring tears to the audience. Sounds as if Kevin had issues he needed to resolve. What is a 'smash cut'?

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    I am told a smash cut is something that takes place immediately. One scene to the next. Love your review. Thank you
Comment from lyenochka
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You managed to add that final sense of drama whether Kevin would be able to say goodbye to his father or not. Seems like he got to see him in the final moment. A moving tribute to your father and your loving family which kept together at a critical time.

Tim was the eigth of nine (eighth)

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    I can?t seem to get through a writing without a bit of dysfunction. My bad. Thanks for the heads up. I will correct. Thanks for the review as well.
Comment from Jim Wile
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This was a heart-wrenching conclusion to this wonderful script, K. You made us feel very sorry for Kevin who had such trouble seeing and talking to his father at the end for fear of breaking down. So sad. Nice job of writing. Very realistic. Jim

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Thanks Jim. Always appreciate you thoughts.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
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This is a sad ending to a final farewell of a father on his death bed with family paying respects all around him. Poor Kevin - so close and yet so far from being able to express himself one last time. If ever there was a time to give in to emotions - that was it.

Just a small question - were Daniel and Linnea twins?

Daniel- 47, Timothy- 42, Linnea- 47.

Thank you for sharing this well written and interesting script. It is easy to follow with the different fonts.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Linnea was Dan?s wife. Appreciate the review and nice comments. Thank you.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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I'm sure it's nicely done. You made the point you intended. But for me, it would have been a better read if you'd simply put it into prose: narrative and dialogue. You could have fleshed out the feelings and emotions better.
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2023
    Good point. Thank you for the nice review. I will continue to learn on utilizing the best format. Cheers
Comment from BermyBye50
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Kaiku,

This is a brilliantly written script celebrating a father`s life. It is an exceptional tribute to life well lived and family's Final Farewell.

All the best,

Eugene

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    Quite a compliment. Thank you.
Comment from jmdg1954
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Kaiku,
Your final scene created some moisture in my eyes.
I was like Kevin, not being able to see the frail figure of my father lying in the nursing home. What a jerk I was!

Question- is that Dean Smith in the photo?

Thank you for these posts and the story.
Cheers, my friend!
John

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    No Dean Smith. Just my dad in the background on the right. Appreciate the reading of my story and your time to review. Cheers
Comment from Nicki Nance
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A touching scene that captures the experience of many people. Kevin's struggle was poignant. the impending loss. The caps threw me off several times.

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 Comment Written 17-Mar-2023

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2023
    👍😎
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    👍😎