The Farewell
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Comment from lyenochka
These are touching scenes. Many kids who did not see "eye to eye" with a parent never get that resolved before the parent dies so it's good that Mike could have that heart to heart with his mom. I guess Dan was a younger son and the father learned to be a better dad by then.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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These are touching scenes. Many kids who did not see "eye to eye" with a parent never get that resolved before the parent dies so it's good that Mike could have that heart to heart with his mom. I guess Dan was a younger son and the father learned to be a better dad by then.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Dad was consistent throughout. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. Appreciate it.
Comment from jmdg1954
Kailua,
I personally thought this was the best of the scripts you've written. To me, it just seemed the more real as compared to the others.
Maybe it was the dialogue or interaction; or you're getting better with each successive post.
I wish I had a six star left to award...
Cheers, my friend.
John
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Kailua,
I personally thought this was the best of the scripts you've written. To me, it just seemed the more real as compared to the others.
Maybe it was the dialogue or interaction; or you're getting better with each successive post.
I wish I had a six star left to award...
Cheers, my friend.
John
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thanks John. You know, I wrote all the scenes in 2 sittings. I do like this one as they have a good exchange. I have two remaining. The last one being the shortest but probably the hardest hitting. Thanks again for sticking with me on these posts. I enjoy the feedback. Cheers.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a fragment and therefore somewhat hard to judge on its own but it follows the correct format and it is not difficult to visualise what is going on..
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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This is a fragment and therefore somewhat hard to judge on its own but it follows the correct format and it is not difficult to visualise what is going on..
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Yep, it is. So I invite you to read the first 6 scenarios. They are all short like this one and pretty engaging as well. I have two more to post with the finale coming March 17. I appreciate your review and the time you took to read the work. Thank you.
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a wonderful script, K. It was so well-written and believable. Although once the authoritarian, it was obvious that Dad loved his family and was devoted to them, and even his doubting son knows that.
It ran the gamut of emotions. It was sweet and sad and humorous and sobering all at the same time, and that's not an easy thing to do in a short work like this.
I hope there will be more to this as you explore the farewells of some of the other kids. Very well-written, my friend.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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This was a wonderful script, K. It was so well-written and believable. Although once the authoritarian, it was obvious that Dad loved his family and was devoted to them, and even his doubting son knows that.
It ran the gamut of emotions. It was sweet and sad and humorous and sobering all at the same time, and that's not an easy thing to do in a short work like this.
I hope there will be more to this as you explore the farewells of some of the other kids. Very well-written, my friend.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thanks very much Jim. Two scenes remain. The last comes on St Pats day. It will be a bit different. Your comments are truly appreciated.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Kaiku,
A well-written script. The subject is a sad one, though. I like humor, even in the toughest times. Actually, we are going through a bit of a rough spot right now. Our youngest son, Luke (39), had to have emergency surgery on Sunday night (Monday morning @4 am) to have his appendix removed. He's been having issues for the past year. His doctor prescribed Tecta, and told him to come back if symptoms continued. But he didn't. All last weekend, he had extreme pain, and my daughter finally pushed him to go to the emergency department at the Regional Hospital. The surgeon said his appendix was "rotten", and a real mess there in his abdomen. He had to stay in hospital 3-5 days. Well, this is Day #6 and he's still there, suffering with nausea and vomiting. They'll likely give him a CT scan today, and see if anything else is going on. He's quite discouraged. We'll be heading over to look after their toddler, Isla, so Leslie can go back to the hospital and be with him. She stayed all last night since 8pm. Lots of fun. Life's issues.
Your script is easy to read. I like the caps for the dialogue, and the scene setting and background in smaller print. It's a good idea, and I wouldn't be surprised if scripts are written that way for the actors.
Death is not easy to deal with, but it comes to us all. We handle it in different ways. My wife and I have already stated... (she's 68, and I'm 72)... no funeral, no visiting at the parlour. Just immediate family and the pastor of our church for a short prayer at the graveside. That's all we want. No fuss for us! No music. No service.
A suggestion... when the funeral for their Dad is over, (and I'd skip that in the play), finish the story with the aftermath... a meal together in a restaurant, reflections of happy times, focusing on the kids (grandchildren), and a bit of humor. With such a sad topic, the play needs to end on a happy note.
I've missed a lot of this play, looking after a cold and then Luke's illness. My reviewing is quite low lately.
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Hi Kaiku,
A well-written script. The subject is a sad one, though. I like humor, even in the toughest times. Actually, we are going through a bit of a rough spot right now. Our youngest son, Luke (39), had to have emergency surgery on Sunday night (Monday morning @4 am) to have his appendix removed. He's been having issues for the past year. His doctor prescribed Tecta, and told him to come back if symptoms continued. But he didn't. All last weekend, he had extreme pain, and my daughter finally pushed him to go to the emergency department at the Regional Hospital. The surgeon said his appendix was "rotten", and a real mess there in his abdomen. He had to stay in hospital 3-5 days. Well, this is Day #6 and he's still there, suffering with nausea and vomiting. They'll likely give him a CT scan today, and see if anything else is going on. He's quite discouraged. We'll be heading over to look after their toddler, Isla, so Leslie can go back to the hospital and be with him. She stayed all last night since 8pm. Lots of fun. Life's issues.
Your script is easy to read. I like the caps for the dialogue, and the scene setting and background in smaller print. It's a good idea, and I wouldn't be surprised if scripts are written that way for the actors.
Death is not easy to deal with, but it comes to us all. We handle it in different ways. My wife and I have already stated... (she's 68, and I'm 72)... no funeral, no visiting at the parlour. Just immediate family and the pastor of our church for a short prayer at the graveside. That's all we want. No fuss for us! No music. No service.
A suggestion... when the funeral for their Dad is over, (and I'd skip that in the play), finish the story with the aftermath... a meal together in a restaurant, reflections of happy times, focusing on the kids (grandchildren), and a bit of humor. With such a sad topic, the play needs to end on a happy note.
I've missed a lot of this play, looking after a cold and then Luke's illness. My reviewing is quite low lately.
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Prayers in your direction. Life?s struggles ?damn.
Really enjoyed your comments. Thank you.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Death is always hard no matter how prepared one is.
We are born knowing we will bury our parents but that doesn't make it any easier.
Too often there is conflicts when one dies, I'm glad this isn't one.
You make this transition smooth and loving. Your characters are mature and not self-focused.
Thanks for the well written script.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Death is always hard no matter how prepared one is.
We are born knowing we will bury our parents but that doesn't make it any easier.
Too often there is conflicts when one dies, I'm glad this isn't one.
You make this transition smooth and loving. Your characters are mature and not self-focused.
Thanks for the well written script.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2023
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Thanks Rebecca. Appreciate the time you took to read and respond.
