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Comment from Aussie
Very different style; reads like morse code. But, from birth to death we are here to learn lessons. Reading it, you have cut the dross and left only the words that matter. 'Pain rise dust anon?' A wee bit hard in some places but readable in spirit. K xx
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Very different style; reads like morse code. But, from birth to death we are here to learn lessons. Reading it, you have cut the dross and left only the words that matter. 'Pain rise dust anon?' A wee bit hard in some places but readable in spirit. K xx
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your feedback. I appreciate that this is a very different cake for me and I thought I would try it as an experiment so your opinion is important. Thank you so much for reading that appreciate it I hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from Ricky1024
Even though it was short with fantastic adjective content, I will say I enjoyed this beginning to ending.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this Lea and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Even though it was short with fantastic adjective content, I will say I enjoyed this beginning to ending.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks for sharing this Lea and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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I'm really glad you like this! thank you so very much and for your kind comments and for your time, I am grateful thank you again have an awesome day!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lea,
This is seems like a free writing exercise. It lists all the thing we humans do in one day. Wow we do a lot. We are truly brave to go through this each day just to gain the wisdom you mention. This poem is a look at life.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Hi Lea,
This is seems like a free writing exercise. It lists all the thing we humans do in one day. Wow we do a lot. We are truly brave to go through this each day just to gain the wisdom you mention. This poem is a look at life.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much John as ever I appreciate your comments and your attention. It means very much a lot and for your review and time always appreciate it. You have great insight so I'm always interested in what you have to say. I hope your day is awesome!
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You are most kindly welcome, Lea.
Joan
Comment from GWHARGIS
Your style of poetry is simply amazing. I like the way you hit your point with words, almost rapid fire style. Then you brace the question. The visuals leading the way. Thank you so much for posting your poem. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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Your style of poetry is simply amazing. I like the way you hit your point with words, almost rapid fire style. Then you brace the question. The visuals leading the way. Thank you so much for posting your poem. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2023
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I'm so glad you like this I wanted to try something different to see what would happen. I seem to be doing good. I appreciate your comments and I thank you very much for taking the time to offer your opinion and your kind review. Thank you so much have a great day!
Comment from Thesis
Well, that was a power packed poem. It certainly depicts many of the challenges people face every day. I liked how picked some of the words you used. It made me pause and re-read it several times. The last line brought it all home.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Well, that was a power packed poem. It certainly depicts many of the challenges people face every day. I liked how picked some of the words you used. It made me pause and re-read it several times. The last line brought it all home.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you I'm so glad you liked it. Appreciate you taking the time to look at my poem and I'll be your comments far revealed very much appreciate thank you so much and have a great day!
Comment from w.j.debi
An imaginative and creative write. You truly pack a punch and leave the reader to consider the meaning of each line as you describe life and all it various phases.
There's some nice alliteration in that second stanza.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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An imaginative and creative write. You truly pack a punch and leave the reader to consider the meaning of each line as you describe life and all it various phases.
There's some nice alliteration in that second stanza.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind for you and thank you for your time. Looking at and providing your comments. It's very much appreciated hope you have a great day!
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
Lea,
You have the voice and clarity of The Poet. Your inner energy and spirit is intoxicating. What great and thought-provoking notes you've written:
"...It takes the bravest souls to live a life on this planet. Gods most negative planet in his vast universe designed to teach us lessons as quick as possible to perfect our souls.....and daring the darkness along the way...." THANK YOU!
Richard
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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Lea,
You have the voice and clarity of The Poet. Your inner energy and spirit is intoxicating. What great and thought-provoking notes you've written:
"...It takes the bravest souls to live a life on this planet. Gods most negative planet in his vast universe designed to teach us lessons as quick as possible to perfect our souls.....and daring the darkness along the way...." THANK YOU!
Richard
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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I'm so glad you like it thank you for the 6 stars. I'm totally amazed thank you so much off you're having a great day!
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Lea,
Thumbs up!!!
Richard
Comment from karenina
It's original. Avant Garde. A list of words without punctuation that gives a sort of machine-type feel...
Since it's a No Rules Poetry Contest I applaud your s-t-r-e-t-c-h-i-n-g
traditional forms...
Still? Somehow I got the meaning! We're born and begin on a "track" and seem to be pushed ahead almost without will or purpose... each day to begin again.
(I'm wondering if you've considered writing some prose pieces. Your author's notes are very cohesive and intriguing!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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It's original. Avant Garde. A list of words without punctuation that gives a sort of machine-type feel...
Since it's a No Rules Poetry Contest I applaud your s-t-r-e-t-c-h-i-n-g
traditional forms...
Still? Somehow I got the meaning! We're born and begin on a "track" and seem to be pushed ahead almost without will or purpose... each day to begin again.
(I'm wondering if you've considered writing some prose pieces. Your author's notes are very cohesive and intriguing!)
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Talk too much about it but imagine you know it's a good thing to consider you're full of ideas and while spring of information I appreciate you very much thank you!
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You are very welcome, Lea!
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Nice effort, with a unique cadence. I'm not familiar with this style, if it is categorized. Yet, I saw the no rules prompt. Good luck if this is for a contest. Also, the picture is great, but I can't quite follow as well as I'd like. The author comments do help. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Nice effort, with a unique cadence. I'm not familiar with this style, if it is categorized. Yet, I saw the no rules prompt. Good luck if this is for a contest. Also, the picture is great, but I can't quite follow as well as I'd like. The author comments do help. Good luck.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much for reading my poem and for your critique I very much appreciate it any constructive criticism criticism or anything you think I should change I'm happy to look at thank you so much have a great night!
Comment from Miranda Langston
This is a really interesting freelance poem... I love the way you capture the journey of life in only three stanzas. That takes talent, my friend. I sincerely hope you win the contest ^.^
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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This is a really interesting freelance poem... I love the way you capture the journey of life in only three stanzas. That takes talent, my friend. I sincerely hope you win the contest ^.^
Comment Written 23-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2023
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Thank you Miranda that's a really great compliment and has made my evening and thank you for taking the time to read it I hope you have a wonderful evening!