A Poetic Pause
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Eyes to See, Ears to Hear..."First Poems
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Comment from karenina
I'm beginning to see that this is your style...these declarative sentences are short, yet linked together in concept if not in punctuation. I like your original take of phrasing:
"Awaken to what is true and bury what is not without funeral."
That is one powerful line. I paused and read it again several times.
(Once again I would encourage you to increase the size of the font here ~ if only because I'd like each of your words to "pop" off the page!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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I'm beginning to see that this is your style...these declarative sentences are short, yet linked together in concept if not in punctuation. I like your original take of phrasing:
"Awaken to what is true and bury what is not without funeral."
That is one powerful line. I paused and read it again several times.
(Once again I would encourage you to increase the size of the font here ~ if only because I'd like each of your words to "pop" off the page!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2023
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Yes absolutely it took me a couple of tries to figure out how to do that. But I am busy doing that for the first few poems as we speak and I thank you very much for your comments you're very helpful!
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Oh, not to worry. I think every one of us began with small font...and once we figured out the joys of "Advanced Editor" we went back and touched things up!
Comment from Mia Twysted
I feel a coming out. There is something amazing on the verge of being discovered. However, I am lost at what that is. I guess that is meant for the reader to insert their own inspiration though.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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I feel a coming out. There is something amazing on the verge of being discovered. However, I am lost at what that is. I guess that is meant for the reader to insert their own inspiration though.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you Mia I appreciate your insight to my writing. You are right there is a coming out the blinders have come down love has been satisfied And reality is faced. You're very intuitive thank you Mia have a great day.
Comment from JT traveller
A wonderfully composed and executed poem. Such vivid imagery.
This line,
"Shout out the anguish in the space that passes no sound."
Speaks volumes even though it references silence. The juxtaposition gives your poem power.
A great read. Thank you.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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A wonderfully composed and executed poem. Such vivid imagery.
This line,
"Shout out the anguish in the space that passes no sound."
Speaks volumes even though it references silence. The juxtaposition gives your poem power.
A great read. Thank you.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Hi....I'm so glad you enjoyed. I love clashing words together! Let them fan e around each other....thank you for your kind words and hope you have. Great day!
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