One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Sarah Tummey
I can picture a funeral as I read this, with the muffled bells. "Flowers full of grief" is my favourite line, bringing to mind all those heartfelt cards tied to bouquets. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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I can picture a funeral as I read this, with the muffled bells. "Flowers full of grief" is my favourite line, bringing to mind all those heartfelt cards tied to bouquets. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Japanese poetry is very visual so I'm happy it brought you memories.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
A very beautifully written haiku. Presentation outstanding as always. Sadly I don't have a six to give you though deserving. This hits home for me I just lost my oldest brother unexpectedly. ð???
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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A very beautifully written haiku. Presentation outstanding as always. Sadly I don't have a six to give you though deserving. This hits home for me I just lost my oldest brother unexpectedly. ð???
Comment Written 15-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Joanne, im sorry for your loss.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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Thank you so much
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A very moving haiku about funeral bells tolling to mark the passage of death at a funeral. You capture the moment of a funeral with these brief sound images
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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A very moving haiku about funeral bells tolling to mark the passage of death at a funeral. You capture the moment of a funeral with these brief sound images
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was powerful, Gypsy, your modern haiku really stands out.
I never knew that the funeral tolling of a bell is "a technique of sounding a single bell very slowly, with a significant gap between strikes", to mark the death of a person.
Remarkable imagery and visuals and a stunning presentation.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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This was powerful, Gypsy, your modern haiku really stands out.
I never knew that the funeral tolling of a bell is "a technique of sounding a single bell very slowly, with a significant gap between strikes", to mark the death of a person.
Remarkable imagery and visuals and a stunning presentation.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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You are right, the bells toll more than once. I got confuse with this phrase. Can you take a look and see if it's better? English is my second language and although I write well over all, sometimes I make mistakes.
Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
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Gypsy, sorry, could you tell me where you made the change? It seems the same as last time, but maybe I just don't recall.
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It's okay, I had Helen check it for me, she says it's fine. Thank you.
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Yes, it was fine for me from the start.
Comment from ESOSTINE
The flow of the poem was very much smooth and unforced. The black background colour rhymes with the theme of death. Great piece. Thanks for sharing your inspiration, dear GYPSY.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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The flow of the poem was very much smooth and unforced. The black background colour rhymes with the theme of death. Great piece. Thanks for sharing your inspiration, dear GYPSY.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy
Comment from Raul1
The sentences flow with clarity. It is interesting and impressive to read. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Thank you for sharing! Good job!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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The sentences flow with clarity. It is interesting and impressive to read. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! No mistakes found in your poetry. Thank you for sharing! Good job!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Great poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for your notes. I didn't know about the ringing of the bell until you explained it. Very well written. Nicely done. The artwork was beautiful and went well with your poem. Thank you for showing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Great poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for your notes. I didn't know about the ringing of the bell until you explained it. Very well written. Nicely done. The artwork was beautiful and went well with your poem. Thank you for showing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
I like the color scheme somewhat match the flowers and a sunset. Which could be metaphoric for the end of life. I like the personification of the flowers and the alliteration.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Hi MariVal,
I like the color scheme somewhat match the flowers and a sunset. Which could be metaphoric for the end of life. I like the personification of the flowers and the alliteration.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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I color the font one line by one in the shades I want. It takes time but I enjoy doing it. Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs
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You are very welcome, MariVal.
Joan
Comment from karenina
Gosh ~ I remember in elementary school getting a whap across my knuckles if I wandered from a seasonal reference while writing the "traditional" 5-7-5 haiku. I'd like to hop into my "way back machine" and have a little chat with a certain group of Nuns!
How clever to choose "canterberry bells" as your flower in the image!
Love this, Gupsy!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Gosh ~ I remember in elementary school getting a whap across my knuckles if I wandered from a seasonal reference while writing the "traditional" 5-7-5 haiku. I'd like to hop into my "way back machine" and have a little chat with a certain group of Nuns!
How clever to choose "canterberry bells" as your flower in the image!
Love this, Gupsy!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy hugs, little sister. I hope you're well.
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Thanks!
Comment from aryr
What a grateful and thankful haiku, Gypsy. The death toll bells are prominent at a time they rings. Only flowers of the death provided grief. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!!!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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What a grateful and thankful haiku, Gypsy. The death toll bells are prominent at a time they rings. Only flowers of the death provided grief. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!!!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
