A Jealous Boy
He wanted me.3 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
Being the object of desire of someone you don't care for , is uncomfortable and can only spell trouble.
The teens, is a crazy age, adolescents start to feeling attracted to the opposite sex. .. growth and sex hormones cause mood swings etc.
Good thing you called 911 he could have finished hurting someone.
PS: The kid in the pic doesn't look like he is in his teens thought.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Ciao!
Being the object of desire of someone you don't care for , is uncomfortable and can only spell trouble.
The teens, is a crazy age, adolescents start to feeling attracted to the opposite sex. .. growth and sex hormones cause mood swings etc.
Good thing you called 911 he could have finished hurting someone.
PS: The kid in the pic doesn't look like he is in his teens thought.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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The kid in the pic is not in his teens.
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You are not giving me a vote?
Comment from jessizero
This was a great entry for the jealousy prompt. I just had one note:
You jumped tenses on "We miss each other when we're apart." It should be "missed" instead of "miss" and "we were apart" not "we're apart"
Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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This was a great entry for the jealousy prompt. I just had one note:
You jumped tenses on "We miss each other when we're apart." It should be "missed" instead of "miss" and "we were apart" not "we're apart"
Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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I wrote the poem right. Thanks!
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I changed it all to present tense, thanks!
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I'm glad I could help. You wrote a great poem.
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I always do.
Comment from JT traveller
Who doesn't love a beautiful sunset?
Powerful, descriptive words. What an unexpected twist to a poem based on the word jealousy.
Well composed, good structure and a great storyline.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Who doesn't love a beautiful sunset?
Powerful, descriptive words. What an unexpected twist to a poem based on the word jealousy.
Well composed, good structure and a great storyline.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thanks, I am trying to upload a photo to go with it.
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Just make sure you make a copy of your poem first as you may lose it. There is an entire collection of art on this site from which to choose.
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I won't lose the poem.
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Good for you! 👍😊
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Why would I lose the poem? Did you read my music story?
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I have lost poems that I copied and pasted previously after I forgot to include a picture. After I added an illustration I had to start all over again. Maybe it's just my phone or laptop?
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Will you read my music story and family poem?
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As this is a blind entry contest I do not know who you are not your handle.
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I am pookietoo.
