Gutted
Jealousy destroys8 total reviews
Comment from Charlie Shine
This is a very good piece of work.
Really enjoyed it.
I can't articulate how, but something about it really spoke out, definitely triggered something.
Keep it up.
Charlie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023
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This is a very good piece of work.
Really enjoyed it.
I can't articulate how, but something about it really spoke out, definitely triggered something.
Keep it up.
Charlie
Comment Written 19-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2023
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I was fishing a little. 😎 Thanks for the nice review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your poem is a good example of how jealousy can control the mind if you let it. I think we need to seek God when this happens. Remember, He say's, I am a jealous God, who wants us to follow Him only.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Your poem is a good example of how jealousy can control the mind if you let it. I think we need to seek God when this happens. Remember, He say's, I am a jealous God, who wants us to follow Him only.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Thank you. You are so correct as well.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice poem entry for the One Word: Jealousy writing prompt contest.
The rhymes and meter didn't seem forced but not consistent.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Nice poem entry for the One Word: Jealousy writing prompt contest.
The rhymes and meter didn't seem forced but not consistent.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 11-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Thank you. Rhyming is always problematic for me. Not my strong suit.
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
I adore this one. Your words hold such truth and significance. I was impressed by the symbolism of the fish and what it represents- an outstanding submission for this contest!
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023
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I adore this one. Your words hold such truth and significance. I was impressed by the symbolism of the fish and what it represents- an outstanding submission for this contest!
Comment Written 11-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2023
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Thank you. Not everyone understood this one. Appreciate the stars.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Wordplay is one of my favorite examples of literary techniques. Also your metaphors will draw the reader in. This could be about relationships where one is surprised what the results of their search is. And maybe one of the couple is too jealous or possessive. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Wordplay is one of my favorite examples of literary techniques. Also your metaphors will draw the reader in. This could be about relationships where one is surprised what the results of their search is. And maybe one of the couple is too jealous or possessive. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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You are spot on. Thanks for the nice review
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***Snicker***
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I didn't get the feeling of jealousy from your story here as this seemed like a mild mannered write with a mutual understanding theme to it, but maybe others will see something different, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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I didn't get the feeling of jealousy from your story here as this seemed like a mild mannered write with a mutual understanding theme to it, but maybe others will see something different, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the review. The angst of jealousy can cause anger and poor actions. This isn?t about fishing, it?s about ripping the heart out of a loved one due to anger caused by jealousy.
Comment from country ranch writer
Big ones caught bring out the jealousy in folks cause every one wants the big one to win the fishing contest.
To later clean and fry those babies for supper with grits and hush puppies and coleslaw and beans, mighty good vittles for sure!
Friday,-feb.-10+2023.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Big ones caught bring out the jealousy in folks cause every one wants the big one to win the fishing contest.
To later clean and fry those babies for supper with grits and hush puppies and coleslaw and beans, mighty good vittles for sure!
Friday,-feb.-10+2023.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Thanks for the review. The story is really about a torn love and not so much about the fish. But I really appreciate the stars. Thanks again.
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Keillor take the Fisk I don?t like heart ache,
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Keillor take the Fisk I don?t like heart ache,
Comment from Terry Broxson
I think you have a wonderful poem. It is very creative. It flows and reads exceptionally well. I like to read poems out loud, and this one sounds great.
I have read it a few times, and it is hard for me to grasp the jealousy. I see what you are trying to do. I think the jealousy angle should be a little stronger, but I don't know what to suggest, as I am afraid any suggestions on my part would mess up the poem.
It's just one old guy's opinion. Good luck in the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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I think you have a wonderful poem. It is very creative. It flows and reads exceptionally well. I like to read poems out loud, and this one sounds great.
I have read it a few times, and it is hard for me to grasp the jealousy. I see what you are trying to do. I think the jealousy angle should be a little stronger, but I don't know what to suggest, as I am afraid any suggestions on my part would mess up the poem.
It's just one old guy's opinion. Good luck in the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023
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Good point Terry. It`s a flash of jealously of his friend`s catch and then the total disregard of what he has in pursuit of something better. His jealousy ruined a life. Thank you for your kind review.
