Free Fall
What's something you have to accept?4 total reviews
Comment from Mark Kuglin
Nice job...You hit the syllable target count, created a tight rhythm and made it rhyme.
I'm sure it took some thinking and editing to split the count the way you did...To me, it was worth the effort to get the lines roughly one size.
Good luck
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Nice job...You hit the syllable target count, created a tight rhythm and made it rhyme.
I'm sure it took some thinking and editing to split the count the way you did...To me, it was worth the effort to get the lines roughly one size.
Good luck
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
Comment from RFL
This is a very powerful poem. The image reflects the words well!
I am wondering, however, if the "faller" is "hurtling into unawareness" or awareness. I ask because the last line indicates "understanding", which to me follows awareness. Would appreciate your thoughts on this.
Thank you,
RFL
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This is a very powerful poem. The image reflects the words well!
I am wondering, however, if the "faller" is "hurtling into unawareness" or awareness. I ask because the last line indicates "understanding", which to me follows awareness. Would appreciate your thoughts on this.
Thank you,
RFL
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
Comment from jessizero
I counted your syllables several times, and you got it right. :)
Your poem was really disturbing, but I mean that in a good way. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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I counted your syllables several times, and you got it right. :)
Your poem was really disturbing, but I mean that in a good way. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
Comment from Julie G1
Well done. This poem concisely answered the prompt, and conveyed the intention of the poet effectively. The choice of language and imagery was apt. The use of the graphic also worked well. Keep on writing!
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Well done. This poem concisely answered the prompt, and conveyed the intention of the poet effectively. The choice of language and imagery was apt. The use of the graphic also worked well. Keep on writing!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
