Comment from karenina

Excellent

This is a great chuckle! I've been there... I had the idea, thought I had the count right, and (oops) I was one short or two over. Sometimes I'd be able to work it out and most times I figured it was the muse telling me it wasn't a contest I should enter. Your decision to post it has me nodding.

Karenina

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2024

Thanks so much, Karenina. I'd kind of forgotten about this oldie. Glad it brought you a chuckle.

reply by karenina on 25-Nov-2024

I like to wander knee deep and pull up an oldie....

:)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This made me smile Jim and those poems that are restricted to a certain amount of syllables are a pain as we cannot flex our poetry muscles enough, but you wrote this one anyway and I enjoyed it, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023

Thanks so much, Dolly. Thought I'd try a serious poem for a change (wink, wink).

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

I really laughed while reading the end of the poem in the author's notes. I have trouble writing syllable-count poems. LOL.
Thanks for sharing this humorous piece, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023

Thanks, Jessi. Glad you enjoyed the poem.

Comment from Sarah Tummey

Excellent

I liked this. It would have been a funny one for the 34-syllable contest. Perhaps they would have let you enter it if you had put "I think I'm going to ..." and left the ending for people to imagine.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023

I'm sure they would have in that case. Even with the way I presented it, there's a good chance they would have, but I never got to find out because I couldn't enter it for a different reason (30-day no win rule).

Thanks for the good review, Sarah.

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

You are a funny one. I really like your sense of humour and clever way of being witty. Perhaps maybe your title should be - Cheat. It does seem a shame that you could not enter it because of one syllable as this poem is good.
Maybe in the third line you could have used the word - can't - instead of - cannot - then you would be at the 34 syllable mark but your poem would be different and not as effective so ignore I said that. Thanks for the smile.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023

Thanks, Diana. The reason I couldn't enter was because of the no-win in 30 days rule, which I didn't realize was a requirement until after I wrote the poem.

I designed the poem purposely to have exactly 34 syllables (without that last word, CHEAT) so that it would meet the 34-syllable requirement, but to be one syllable short of being a complete poem. The plan was to cheat and add that last word in the author's notes to make it a complete poem that made sense.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Damn. Too bad you missed the contest, Jim, I liked how you "cheated" with your entry. Pretty clever. You'll get'em next time.

Cheers to a great weekend.
John

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2023

Thanks, John. You have a good one too.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork and presentation, Jim.
-Sorry you didn't make the contest.
-You have good imagery and rhyme.
-You have a clever idea for the contest.
-A good thing they don't count what's
in the author notes, or did they?
-Good luck!

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

I think you may have missed the point, Pam. The whole idea was to end where I did on the 34th syllable but have the poem be incomplete, missing the last word, CHEAT, which I put down in the author notes. See, I cheated to get it in without violating the contest rules.

reply by Pam (respa) on 09-Feb-2023

My brain was in a fog when I kept counting syllables and getting too many. I went back and wrote a better review😊😊 A clever idea!

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

I really hate counting syllables. Counting words makes so much more sense, but then there is haiku, and I really like it. Best of luck finding a one syllable word that fits.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

Did you see it down below in the author's notes? Yeah, I cheated.

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Exceptional

Why couldn't you enter it? Deadline passed? If you had entered, this would get my vote. Very funny and creative. Keep the poems coming, but maybe wait until Sunday when I have more sixes to give:-)

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

I wrote it after I realized it was a no-win for 30 days contest and I wouldn't have qualified. Not sure it would have qualified anyway because I cheated, but I like to push the limits as with the poem "Bad Guy." Thanks for the 6 stars, Pam.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Oh, I love it, though, Jim. Your imagination is working overtime! It does make me wonder if it would have been disqualified if you had entered it since the additional syllable was used anyway. But it was sooooo funny! Thanks for the morning's whimsy! If I had a six, you know you'd have gotten it!

Jay

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

Yeah, it may have anyway, but I'm a firm believer in pushing the boundaries, as I did with "Bad Guy."

Thanks for the good review, Jay.