Turn to Him
A middle of the night inspiration11 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
Really liked the half-rhyme at the end. Using "sieve" That was original. And I do like how you give me spiritual food for fuel to be blessed. Rhymes all felt natural.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Really liked the half-rhyme at the end. Using "sieve" That was original. And I do like how you give me spiritual food for fuel to be blessed. Rhymes all felt natural.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Thanks so much.
Comment from jessizero
Is there a reason the last three lines of the poem are smaller? I do like that last line about running worries through His sieve. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Is there a reason the last three lines of the poem are smaller? I do like that last line about running worries through His sieve. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Typing error! Thanks.
Comment from lyenochka
Great advice in your poem and I liked your ending:
"the perfect peace
that He can give
run your worries
through His sieve"
(did you mean to make the last lines in a smaller font?)
Great metaphor and imagery and spiritual encouragement! Glad you had that notebook by your bed to write this down!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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Great advice in your poem and I liked your ending:
"the perfect peace
that He can give
run your worries
through His sieve"
(did you mean to make the last lines in a smaller font?)
Great metaphor and imagery and spiritual encouragement! Glad you had that notebook by your bed to write this down!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2023
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No, the smaller lines are my error.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us. Yes, it's great reminder of how we should live our lives. You're wisdom is shining through loud and clear with this poem. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us. Yes, it's great reminder of how we should live our lives. You're wisdom is shining through loud and clear with this poem. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nice poem about your faith. I see that you are an algebra, readiness teacher. I never understood algebra until after I was grown, and I began to knit As I would read the knitting patterns, I would find that I was using algebra all the time. Then it began to make sense to me. I also see that you are starting to keep a notebook by your bed at night. I am assuming that it is because at night you wake up with a thought that you want to put into a poem. I carry my phone in my pocket all day when I'm out walking and many times I will stop pull up my phone and use the notepad on my phone to write down a phrase or two that I might see as being something that I can use to write a poem or to write a story I just think this is a good practice for all of us. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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This is a very nice poem about your faith. I see that you are an algebra, readiness teacher. I never understood algebra until after I was grown, and I began to knit As I would read the knitting patterns, I would find that I was using algebra all the time. Then it began to make sense to me. I also see that you are starting to keep a notebook by your bed at night. I am assuming that it is because at night you wake up with a thought that you want to put into a poem. I carry my phone in my pocket all day when I'm out walking and many times I will stop pull up my phone and use the notepad on my phone to write down a phrase or two that I might see as being something that I can use to write a poem or to write a story I just think this is a good practice for all of us. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much!
Comment from royowen
I always have a notebook handy, the trouble is that inspiration tends to abscond with my memory, so good on you dear girl, very sensible, decision, bless you dear girl, an immaculate post, narrative, flow and rhyme, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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I always have a notebook handy, the trouble is that inspiration tends to abscond with my memory, so good on you dear girl, very sensible, decision, bless you dear girl, an immaculate post, narrative, flow and rhyme, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much!
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Welcome
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent and wise poem, with a good message. The font is smaller in the last three lines, which makes it a bit difficult to read. Otherwise, I enjoyed the poem with its clarity, and good rhyme and metre. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Excellent and wise poem, with a good message. The font is smaller in the last three lines, which makes it a bit difficult to read. Otherwise, I enjoyed the poem with its clarity, and good rhyme and metre. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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I will check that out. Thanks so much!
Comment from Sally Law
Welcome back to FanStory, dear Jan! So great to see you and to read this beautiful verse. I love you sacred poem. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Welcome back to FanStory, dear Jan! So great to see you and to read this beautiful verse. I love you sacred poem. Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much!
Comment from GWHARGIS
I think I have about ten notebooks scattered around my house, in my bag, in my car. It feels unnatural not to have some place to jot down phrases or ideas. Your poem was very soothing. I liked the rhythmic scheme. It was great advice to turn to God. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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I think I have about ten notebooks scattered around my house, in my bag, in my car. It feels unnatural not to have some place to jot down phrases or ideas. Your poem was very soothing. I liked the rhythmic scheme. It was great advice to turn to God. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much!
Comment from JT traveller
An uplifting poem which displays your strong faith.
A most excellent choice of illustration to accompany your poem. It sets it off nicely.
Good meter and flow. Your poetry delivers a message that there is always hope, not matter how glum or hard life may grow.
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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An uplifting poem which displays your strong faith.
A most excellent choice of illustration to accompany your poem. It sets it off nicely.
Good meter and flow. Your poetry delivers a message that there is always hope, not matter how glum or hard life may grow.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much!
