Comment from Mark Kuglin

Excellent

Nice work...It tells a story in a very limited space.

In it's current length though, I would have liked to see something that was as predictable and straightforward.

I think this would be a great lead for a longer piece.

The following stanzas could be a bucket list.

I still want to see or do X

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

Thank you very much, and a good idea

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

This really sounds like a writer's point of view. Not many use the pen with the ink these days. Years ago, that is what a person would have to use, then new technology brought us the pen.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from Wyon Stansfeld

Good

Well that is not likely to be a very substantial story, then, given that ink dries fast and so, surely there will be a lot that isnt left unsaid. Unless of course your story is so pithily wise that it encompasses all. It got me thinking maybe there is some deep paradox I am missing though I remain a bit mystified -- so only a 4

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 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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Comment from Philip Clarke

Excellent

This is elegant and perfect and perfectly fits the writing prompt. And I really like it. I will surely quote it once I know who wrote it. (Apparently I still owe this thing words)

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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Thank you very much

Comment from jaded831

Excellent

Your poem reflects my own feelings and I would think the feelings of everyone at this sight. You stated it in such a way, that I had to chuckle, because it is simple and I agree. Just wish I had thought of it. Lol

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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Comment from karenina

Excellent

Smiling here. As every writer who reads this slowly nods their head and murmurs "Yes, me too...."

A very smart theme for the audience!

I've got nothing but affirmative things to say!

Good luck!

Karenina

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

Thank you very much

reply by karenina on 09-Feb-2023

Smiles are good for writers, and other living things...

:)

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I really enjoyed this brief poem which summed up a writer's life. That is an ambition we all have and perhaps what motivates us to write. Hope this does well in the contest!

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

Thank you very much

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your fifteen syllable poem- good word count - excellent picture presentation- clever poem inspiring thought on the part of the reader- instead of trying to be so simplistic even young children can understand - stifling creativity - my opinion-good job. AP

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2023

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Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

These fifteen syllables are impactful and illustrate how most of us writers feel. It's amazing to me just how much can be said with so few words, when the right ones are chosen. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2023

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Thank you very much

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This is a 15 syllable contest entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a blessed day.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023

Thank you very much