What Makes Us Family
Everyone is a part of something bigger.29 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This really rings true! You are in a sense 'stuck' with your family and on occasions you might wish you could change them! The rhyming scheme and rhythm are natural and unforced here which adds to the overall positive note suggesting 'blood is thicker than water'!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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This really rings true! You are in a sense 'stuck' with your family and on occasions you might wish you could change them! The rhyming scheme and rhythm are natural and unforced here which adds to the overall positive note suggesting 'blood is thicker than water'!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much, Sarah. I really appreciate your comments and the six stars.
Beth
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All best wishes!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem about family read well, Beth. I enjoyed reading it
I liked the way you described one from an infant to an older
age and how s/he learns at every step of the way. You did a
great job describing the many differences in all families and
how vital it is to learn the best qualities from those who are there
to teach. I agree about the last few lines--all learn from early
on and those values mold us into the people we become.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Your poem about family read well, Beth. I enjoyed reading it
I liked the way you described one from an infant to an older
age and how s/he learns at every step of the way. You did a
great job describing the many differences in all families and
how vital it is to learn the best qualities from those who are there
to teach. I agree about the last few lines--all learn from early
on and those values mold us into the people we become.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Jan. I really appreciate the review. I believe your family is something you need to try keep close. Family ties are important.
Beth
Comment from Maggie Clover
Very well written and your words are so true! Being the youngest of a big family, there are a lot of your words that I can actually relate to. I love my family so much but we are all so different. So I think that God purposely placed me here and I am doing exactly as I should be, by trying to keep our clan close. Even if it is extremely tiring sometimes. Ok, most of the time! Thank you for writing this, as it made me think more clearly about my role as the youngest in this large family of mine!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Very well written and your words are so true! Being the youngest of a big family, there are a lot of your words that I can actually relate to. I love my family so much but we are all so different. So I think that God purposely placed me here and I am doing exactly as I should be, by trying to keep our clan close. Even if it is extremely tiring sometimes. Ok, most of the time! Thank you for writing this, as it made me think more clearly about my role as the youngest in this large family of mine!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the nice review. I see that you have recently joined fanstory. You will find a family here that is different from your biological family, but is very loving and caring of its members. It takes a while to get to know us, but if your stick with us I'm sure you will be glad you did.
Comment from mermaids
Your smooth poetic form and use of words captures the importance of family. I like how you mention it is in God's plan where we end up. I also like the line "perfect not's an option." So true, family is never perfect. Excellent theme for a poem.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Your smooth poetic form and use of words captures the importance of family. I like how you mention it is in God's plan where we end up. I also like the line "perfect not's an option." So true, family is never perfect. Excellent theme for a poem.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the nice review. I enjoyed reading your comments.
Beth
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was lovely, Beth. Family are important, and the way we act can bring pride or disappointment to the name we carry. That is not right. Honour, love, honesty, all these things belonging to a family means, we must work hard to keep it together. Family is everything. Well done, my friend, your poem told such a lot about what a family is. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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That was lovely, Beth. Family are important, and the way we act can bring pride or disappointment to the name we carry. That is not right. Honour, love, honesty, all these things belonging to a family means, we must work hard to keep it together. Family is everything. Well done, my friend, your poem told such a lot about what a family is. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you Sandra. I appreciate the review and you thoughts. I glad you liked the poem.
Beth
Comment from bob cullen
Love the sentiments you express here. As poetry I found it exceptional. It had rhyme, balance and it presented its message exceptionally well. A sensational poem that describes family beautifully. It truly deserved six
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Love the sentiments you express here. As poetry I found it exceptional. It had rhyme, balance and it presented its message exceptionally well. A sensational poem that describes family beautifully. It truly deserved six
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Bob. i really appreciate your nice review. I enjoyed reading you comments and I've so pleased that you gave me six stars.
Beth
Comment from Ricky1024
"What Makes Us Family" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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"What Makes Us Family" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the nice review and for sharing your thoughts.
Beth
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, What Makes Us Family?, is a complicated question and your poem points at a few of those things. We all have flaws. Better to admit them and apologize than simply pick them out in others.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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This poem, What Makes Us Family?, is a complicated question and your poem points at a few of those things. We all have flaws. Better to admit them and apologize than simply pick them out in others.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2023
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Thanks Bill, I appreciate the review. This one was in a contest earlier but not many saw it and I was hoping for a few more reviews.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks about state, stand, status of what makes a family and how to continue a family in moral and true term of living in the realm of relations; I like the poem has a good flow of thoughts and rhymes; Never lose gifted moments; read, write, review, post more, ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (DR) FEBRUARY 2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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This poem speaks about state, stand, status of what makes a family and how to continue a family in moral and true term of living in the realm of relations; I like the poem has a good flow of thoughts and rhymes; Never lose gifted moments; read, write, review, post more, ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (DR) FEBRUARY 2023
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Thank you DR. I'm so glad you liked it. I always appreciate your review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme . Our family had a lot to do with the person we became,so it falls upon our shoulders to bring honor to their name. Nice art work to compliment your words. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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This is a beautifully written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme . Our family had a lot to do with the person we became,so it falls upon our shoulders to bring honor to their name. Nice art work to compliment your words. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Joanne. It glad you liked my poem. I really appreciate your comments. I'm thrilled with the six stars.
Beth