Comment from tempeste

Excellent

Ciao!, I think over 50s can all connect to your words.

The older I get the more unfamiliar my face appears when I look in the mirror.

It's quite depressing at times. I remember asking my mother when I was in my 20s how did it feel to get old ?... she just said "time flew".

Well she was right and it sucks.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2023

I am with you on that my friend. Thank you for the entertaining and apt review. I am unable to see what I'm writing here, so forgive any misspelling etc.. wait till you get in your 60s. Wear and tear on a face can suddenly show itself in amazing ways, but as a man it is of little concern.. It is the heightened ability to see one's inner self more clearly that can truly become painful.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

It's hard to accept ourselves just the way we are.

Excellent entry for the 2-4-4-12 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines.

I Would recommend it.

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2023

Thank you Gypsy, for your good review.
I really like your quote. Though there are surely times we shouldn't accept the way we are doing or have done things, not accepting who we are is like looking and not seeing at all. No place to start and no one to help. Good evening. Thanks .

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

The words are simple but it does show what we should be or want to be affects how we perceive ourselves. It's always hard to see ourselves objectively. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023

Thank you for your review. All this give and take with all you devoted writers is really something. I have not had this experience before. It is pleasant. Thank you.

reply by the author on 08-Feb-2023

Thank you for your review. All this give and take with all you devoted writers is really something. I have not had this experience before. It is pleasant. Thank you.

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

Very cleverly done. You managed to stick to the poetry rules and make it rhyme at the same time. Far more interesting than just gathered thoughts put into a 2-4-4-12 format.

Great work.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023

Thank you for your kind words, and helpful suggestions. I think I initially fell asleep writing those words. I do appreciate you finding something worth noting in the work.and giving, so much as possible, some critical feedback. I appreciate your review. Thank you.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This poem, In the Mirror, with a 2-4-4-12 formatting, touches on the mid-life complaint that perhaps we aren't where we had hoped to be by then....................................

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023

Thank you, but I have lost 40 pounds. It has been awhile... and I got some new ones back ... but anyhow Bill, I resemble that remark.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is an excellent 2-4-4-12 poem for the contest
with an interesting psychological theme.
The good thing is you have the opportunity to change,
though it may not be easy.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023

Nice twist there. Much abridged...I mean obliged. Thank you very much.

Comment from Karyn2

Excellent

This poem leaves some mystery to it! Well constructed following the contest prompts. I wonder who the poet wanted to be when looking in the mirror? Someone else entirely or a different version of themselves? I often, probably most days if I'm honest, glance in the mirror and wish something was different but probably not wanting to see a whole new person! I enjoyed that this poem is a bit vague here and leaves us contemplating who or what they wished to see.
Clever idea.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023

Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I do appreciate it. In fact you gave the most thoughtful and detailed review so far.

Comment from Cherish Adams

Excellent

I really like your contest entry. My first thought when I read it was - ooohh I like this one. Most of us have had a similar experience (if we're being honest). Good job. Love these that hit home. Good luck.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023

Thank you very much for your comments. I am encouraged and so appreciate it.

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

Your required syllable count is perfect. Your title for this poem is also perfect as it sets the poem up to let the reader know what it is about. Your poem is thought-provoking and speaks to many. How often do we look in the mirror and are dissatisfied with our accomplishments, recognizing room for improvement? Your message is clear with well chosen words. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023

Thank you for a well written review. I hate writing negative things, but that just came out.

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Bravo, Mystery Writer!
Relatable and introspective.
I believe we have all looked in that seflsame mirror and seen the same image.
Now... for a bit of humor: With my decrepit eyesight, the same scenario has also happened to me once ... or twice... or maybe more... :)

Thank you for sharing!
Best wishes!
diane

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 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023

Thank you for your charming review. I have found that getting a better angle and changing the lighting can really turn things around.