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Heart Crafted Poems - 2023

Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Stay young"
Musing of an old man

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Comment from jmdg1954
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To me it's nice to see a group of close friends together, boys and girls mixed. They can share good times, thoughts and -
Dream large, no matter how far-flung!
Nicely written, easily read and understood (for me).
Cheers to the dreams of youth!
John

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Thank you John!
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-You wrote a very good poem for the picture.
-I think you did a good job capturing what was going on
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the image "painting a canvas that is blank."
-You show that life can take a turn, and have
a very good concluding verse with an excellent message.
-You don't need the apostrophes in 'smiles' and 'gets'.
-Well done.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Thank you so much Pam, I should of had you in my early language classes as I was learning English composition converting from Gaelic at the age of six. 🤦‍♂️🤦‍♂️🤦‍♂️
reply by Pam (respa) on 07-Feb-2023
    You are welcome, Jim. I didn't know that. I probably haven't told you, but I was a high school English teacher for 29 years. I don't mind helping out with suggestions.
Comment from rjuselius
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Indeed, never grow up and lose the eyes of a child. Beauty lies in your perspective. And how you treat others.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck in the contest!
Blessings with hugs,
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    A very big thank you, Rebecca.
reply by rjuselius on 07-Feb-2023
    You are welcome my friend <3
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Our youthful friendships are remembered when we age and we look back with fondness and this scene inspired you to write this sentimental poem, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    My sincere thank you.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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Yes. I thought this was some sort of anti-aging post. Good, it's not. It's a poetic praise of the youth and dreams. It's nice that you not only encourage people dream big but also to work with others. Many dreamers are loners. But if one dreams together with others, it will be much more powerful.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Smiles back!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Well done. Did you intend for a period to end line seven. It seems an oddity. .....................................................................................................................

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    You are correct kind sir!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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You have described the club picture elegantly with your rhyming quatrain. I particularly liked the words:
young friends sat by a river's bank
...
painting a canvas that is blank.
they seem to say eveerything about youth ondering on life to come. kay

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Thank you for your comments and for your being an instrument of guiding children to dream large.
Comment from lyenochka
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I like how you look at that picture from the point of view of a passerby remembering that sweet time of youth when anything was possible Great entry to the Picture challenge!

bring smile's to passerby who get's it. (smiles ... gets)

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Thank you! You should have been my English teacher when I came to America learning to rad and write English for the first time.
Comment from l.raven
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HI Jim, those were the days my sweet friend...
and always your as young as you feel...

my father always told us...to love our families
and friends...they would always be there for us...
companionship of others keeps you young...

I love your poem sweet guy...very nicely written...
and your picture...perfect...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Linda, thank you for your kind validation! Your father evolve wisdom in those words.
reply by l.raven on 07-Feb-2023
    your so welcome Jim...love xxoo
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a great job with your interpretation of the picture,
JLR. I enjoyed reading your well-crafted poem for the club.
Your words were perfect for the image. I liked the smooth
flow, good rhymes, and the true message--great advice.
Thanks for participating, Jan

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2023


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
    Dear Jan, I appreciate your thoughtful comments.