Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very cute and well written children's poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very cute imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you Teri. I had fun writing it and I'm glad you think kids would be entertained by it.
Beth

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Hahahaha. Good advice. I think I'll stay away from Maggie Ophelia Belinda Malone. She's not one to short change. Love the name, and love this delightful poem.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you for a great review on my little poem. I'm glad you like it.
Beth

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job with your contest entry, Beth. The use
of monorhyme within each verse was clever--tied each verse
together. The image was perfect. Your many examples of the
witch and what she does were great. You gave readers and
young children great advice. I believe those kids would enjoy
your fun poem.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you so much for the nice review on my poem. I'm so glad you liked it.
Beth

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Best one I've read so far. The name alone would get children giggling. Add a cross-eyed cat and you'll get laughs too. Another plus is the line about curing colds. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you for the review. I'm glad you like the poem. I hope children would find it entertaining.
Beth

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Good luck. This piece if read by others who habitually only read authors in their circle could have a chance to Win, show or place. ................................................

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you Tom, I never count on a win. Particularly with the Fanstory team, but I try to have fun with writing it. I did with this one.
Beth

reply by Tom Horonzy on 05-Feb-2023

I concur or is that sustain as a judge says. Well done

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

This would be fun for kids on Halloween. Your poem is lots of fun to read aloud with all its sounds, especially the mono-rhymed quatrains. Loved the radar bat! Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you, Helen. I'm glad you liked my poem. The name I gave the witch was a real person, almost. My mom used to tell me about an old black lady who lived near her as a girl named Maggie Ophelia Belinda Jones. She and her brother loved repeating her name and I liked it to as a kid. It sort of has a rhythm to it.
Beth

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

He he he, this made me smile Beth and I loved your fun story about this scary witch with great powers and a cross-eyed cat, I loved the humour and the magic here, I was entertained and kids will love this write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you Dolly, I so glad my poem made you smile and you though kids would find it entaining.
Beth

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

Great poem. How poignant, I just left the island of Siquijor in the Philippines. Full of eerie, ghostly tales, faith healers and witch doctors!

Great prose concocted into an excellent poem that flows well. A fun read.

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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you JT, I really appreciate the review and comments. I'm so glad you like my poem.
Beth

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Beth, this is a wonderful children story in poetry form. I enjoyed the play with words about the Cross eyed cat and Bat which has radar and the witches brew and all of the different things that you use that stirs up a spell for the reader. God bless and have a good day. Patricia.

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 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

Thank you Patricia. I'm glad you liked my children's poem. I had fun writing it.
Beth

Comment from jessizero

Exceptional

This children's poem was so much fun! I loved your rhymes, and the witch was an interesting character. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023

I'm so glad you liked this enough to give it six stars. Thank you for a great review.
Beth