Some Call It Luck
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "Some Call It Luck - Chapter 63"A unique friendship affects the course of 2 lives.
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting luncheon with Dana learning she would like herself better if she tried to be more like Abby. But Dana hasn't forgotten how nasty she was to Abby either, but Abby accepts it as a joke. Well written and found no errors.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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This is an interesting luncheon with Dana learning she would like herself better if she tried to be more like Abby. But Dana hasn't forgotten how nasty she was to Abby either, but Abby accepts it as a joke. Well written and found no errors.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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They make each other laugh. Maybe they will become friends after all.
Comment from royowen
I think this is a great episode, and proves that their is a desire in people to be free of conscience and live the best way thru know how, it's fun being a writer and writing about the ideals that pervade our souls, that's the way I've always wanted to be, but failed miserably, I relate to the character of Dana, there's always hope, while the body still breathes, well done, nay friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I think this is a great episode, and proves that their is a desire in people to be free of conscience and live the best way thru know how, it's fun being a writer and writing about the ideals that pervade our souls, that's the way I've always wanted to be, but failed miserably, I relate to the character of Dana, there's always hope, while the body still breathes, well done, nay friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Roy. Some have thought this chapter too unlikely. I will probably add some more backstory for Dana to make her perhaps a little more of a sympathetic character (though she'll still be quite nasty) to make it more believable. Tomorrow is the end. I hope it successfully wraps things up and reinforces some of the themes.
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Yes, I always hated bullies, I stuck up for the ?bullied? but found them nerdy and tedious company, so perhaps there could be a psychological reason, a sort of front to be though ?normal? my wife and elder daughter are intrinsically ?good? - Abby characters.
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That's great to hear. I sort of modeled her after my wife and daughter who share many of her personality traits.
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Snap.
Comment from jmdg1954
So much more of Dana surfaced in this chapter. Still curious if it's believable. It can go either way.
Wow, just one more chapter? Is there an upcoming sequel to this story?
I'll miss reading this.
Cheers to a good novel!
John
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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So much more of Dana surfaced in this chapter. Still curious if it's believable. It can go either way.
Wow, just one more chapter? Is there an upcoming sequel to this story?
I'll miss reading this.
Cheers to a good novel!
John
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Several people have wondered about the believability. I'm planning to add some more backstory for Dana and make her a little more sympathetic (but she'll still be horrible) to make it more believable.
I'll be writing one more draft of this (the current version is actually the third draft) before committing myself to the effort of seeking a literary agent in hopes of getting it professionally published. Not holding out too much hope there because going the tradition publishing route is tough. May end up self-publishing it on Amazon someday.
Maybe next month I will share another story that features the same characters. I'll explain this in my author's note tomorrow.
Thanks for being such a loyal reader and reviewer of the story, John. You've been a great fan!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It was so easy to get into with the synopsis at the top and reading the info on your characters list. I'll have to do that with mine, it's been ages since I posted my last chapter.
I'll make sure I read your final chapter. I'm glad Dana saw the error of her ways. Of course Abby was gracious enough to accept her apology, and that on it's own made Dana feel bad. Perhaps they will be friends one day. I'd be very happy if you could persuade Abby to send me one of those suits!! I haven't played for a while, and I'm sure I'd need it now. Lol. Well done again, Jim, it was a pleasure to read such good writing. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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It was so easy to get into with the synopsis at the top and reading the info on your characters list. I'll have to do that with mine, it's been ages since I posted my last chapter.
I'll make sure I read your final chapter. I'm glad Dana saw the error of her ways. Of course Abby was gracious enough to accept her apology, and that on it's own made Dana feel bad. Perhaps they will be friends one day. I'd be very happy if you could persuade Abby to send me one of those suits!! I haven't played for a while, and I'm sure I'd need it now. Lol. Well done again, Jim, it was a pleasure to read such good writing. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much, Sandra. You're very kind!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm glad Dana is willing to turn her life around. I wish it was that easy. I really enjoyed reading this, but I'm not sure how realistic it is. I sure wish it to be true. Thank you for sharing. I've pointed out a 'that' issue. I only used one paragraph. You might want to check for more.
When she called tonight and dropped that bomb on me, I was speechless. I couldn't deny that I'd pinched that suit. She knew! I felt so miserable then that I just got it, put it in a bag, and hung it on the doorknob. I had hoped that she would just take it and leave, and fortunately, that's what she did. How can I ever face her again? (Six 'that' in this one paragraph. ---- TRY: When she called tonight and dropped that bomb on me, I was speechless. I couldn't deny that I'd pinched the suit. She knew! I felt so miserable I just shoved it in a bag and hung it on the doorknob. I had hoped she would just take it and leave, and fortunately, that's what she did. How can I ever face her again? {now only 3}
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I'm glad Dana is willing to turn her life around. I wish it was that easy. I really enjoyed reading this, but I'm not sure how realistic it is. I sure wish it to be true. Thank you for sharing. I've pointed out a 'that' issue. I only used one paragraph. You might want to check for more.
When she called tonight and dropped that bomb on me, I was speechless. I couldn't deny that I'd pinched that suit. She knew! I felt so miserable then that I just got it, put it in a bag, and hung it on the doorknob. I had hoped that she would just take it and leave, and fortunately, that's what she did. How can I ever face her again? (Six 'that' in this one paragraph. ---- TRY: When she called tonight and dropped that bomb on me, I was speechless. I couldn't deny that I'd pinched the suit. She knew! I felt so miserable I just shoved it in a bag and hung it on the doorknob. I had hoped she would just take it and leave, and fortunately, that's what she did. How can I ever face her again? {now only 3}
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I was already planning to add a little more backstory for Dana which will show her in a little better light, though she will still be a pretty flawed character. Hopefully it will make that scene more believable.
Thanks for your rewritten paragraph. Much better!
Comment from Kaiku
Much came out in this chapter about Dana. Were these elements offered in previous chapters, I don`t recall. The story is certainly wrapping up. Look forward to the ending.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Much came out in this chapter about Dana. Were these elements offered in previous chapters, I don`t recall. The story is certainly wrapping up. Look forward to the ending.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Yeah, Dana's backstory was in chapter 54.
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well, I just revealed that I haven`t read all the chapters. Good story.
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Hey, no worries. Only a couple have followed it from the beginning. When I first started posting it back in November, I was new to FS and didn't know about promotion yet, so many of the early chapters weren't worth anything to review, so not many followers. Once I learned about promotion and started promoting them, I picked up followers.
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Good for you.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Closer to the finish line Now let's see how your finish to the end line is................................................................................................................................................................
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Closer to the finish line Now let's see how your finish to the end line is................................................................................................................................................................
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Hopefully it will be as enjoyable as watching the Super Bowl (unless the game is a dud!)
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It all depends on Mahomes ankle.
