Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Kersplat!"Musing of an old man
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
Your title drew me in, and then the picture added suspense, until the end which I felt was coming when he ran on the road.
P.S. I, too, used twenty five words above. !!!!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Your title drew me in, and then the picture added suspense, until the end which I felt was coming when he ran on the road.
P.S. I, too, used twenty five words above. !!!!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Smiles!
Comment from rjuselius
Haha.. this is an amusing piece of poetry dear jlr! A humorous poem with a sarcastic twist.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck in the contest!
Blessings with hugs,
Rebekka
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Haha.. this is an amusing piece of poetry dear jlr! A humorous poem with a sarcastic twist.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck in the contest!
Blessings with hugs,
Rebekka
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Rebecca, thanks I am glad it evoked a smile.
Comment from Kaiku
saw this in the contest. Funny. Not sure the frog implodes as much as it would explode, but none-the-less, not much left after the hit and run. So much for leap-frogging the accident.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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saw this in the contest. Funny. Not sure the frog implodes as much as it would explode, but none-the-less, not much left after the hit and run. So much for leap-frogging the accident.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Thanks Kaiku, I suppose one could have said splat, Flat
Comment from leather
The photo is excellent and shows a healthy-looking toad. The word count is met, and the rhyming is there; however, I feel bad for this toad's demise. I know this is just a poem, but it shows how much weight our word choices can have on readers.
Thanks for writing.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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The photo is excellent and shows a healthy-looking toad. The word count is met, and the rhyming is there; however, I feel bad for this toad's demise. I know this is just a poem, but it shows how much weight our word choices can have on readers.
Thanks for writing.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Leather, perhaps in another realm The Truck did explode, so the toad did not implode. 🙃🙃
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I can't help thinking about the joke: why do chicken cross the road? You are presenting one "why do toads cross the road?" But this is a sad story. In order to get the rhyming right, you had to sacrifice a toad.
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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I can't help thinking about the joke: why do chicken cross the road? You are presenting one "why do toads cross the road?" But this is a sad story. In order to get the rhyming right, you had to sacrifice a toad.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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yes, perhaps my friend, perhaps in another realm The Truck did explode, so the toad did not implode. 🙃🙃
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Poor little toad, JLR. You did a great job
describing its end. I liked the rhymes and
smooth flow. The picture was appropriate, too.
I wish they would stay off the roads., Jan
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Poor little toad, JLR. You did a great job
describing its end. I liked the rhymes and
smooth flow. The picture was appropriate, too.
I wish they would stay off the roads., Jan
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Hi Jan, yes perhaps in another realm The Truck did explode, so the toad did not implode. 🙃🙃
Comment from Brandon Clark
That was unfortunate! At least it was quick...I suppose. Great and creative way to use the prompt. I would say I enjoyed it but that might be a little dill-holey from the toads perspective at least!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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That was unfortunate! At least it was quick...I suppose. Great and creative way to use the prompt. I would say I enjoyed it but that might be a little dill-holey from the toads perspective at least!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Brandon, yes! perhaps in another realm The Truck did explode, so the toad did not implode. 🙃🙃
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LOL!!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Oh, no, poor little toad,
Wonderful entry for the 25 Words writing prompt contest.
Good word count. I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2023
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Oh, no, poor little toad,
Wonderful entry for the 25 Words writing prompt contest.
Good word count. I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
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Yes Poor, Poor Kermit, perhaps in another realm The Truck did explode, so the toad did not implode. 🙃🙃
Comment from GWHARGIS
And despite the horror of your poem, I laughed. It was so formal and yet the title was fun. I liked the innocence of it , but there was a seriousness to it. Great poem. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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And despite the horror of your poem, I laughed. It was so formal and yet the title was fun. I liked the innocence of it , but there was a seriousness to it. Great poem. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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🙏🙏🙏
Comment from patricia dillon
A tragic tale of a toad. In some places, I have heard of a bridge been built across a road especially for toads - at least, I think it was toads. This might be a good idea.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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A tragic tale of a toad. In some places, I have heard of a bridge been built across a road especially for toads - at least, I think it was toads. This might be a good idea.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2023
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🙏🙏🙏
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Thank you
