What Will Be?
Wishes for a happy life made under a trail of stars4 total reviews
Comment from Anne Johnston
Sounds like it might be an interesting entry, but may I suggest you edit and change your background colour and your font? It is impossible to read this way. I have upped my rating, now that I can read it. The background was just black before, with no letters showing.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Sounds like it might be an interesting entry, but may I suggest you edit and change your background colour and your font? It is impossible to read this way. I have upped my rating, now that I can read it. The background was just black before, with no letters showing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Font is supposed to be white. What did you see? I have changed the background and font.
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Thanks for fixing, it was all black before. I have changed my rating.
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Thank you. Don't know why that happened.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I came back to review your entry now that the words are on view.
You drew a very romantic scene, two lovers stargazing as they ponder their life together.
I thought your closing line was very creative.... also referring to the stars as "crushed ice" is a first for me. It's cool.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Ciao !
I came back to review your entry now that the words are on view.
You drew a very romantic scene, two lovers stargazing as they ponder their life together.
I thought your closing line was very creative.... also referring to the stars as "crushed ice" is a first for me. It's cool.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thanks I will change. The text was suppose to be white. I have changed the background to grey. The font is black.
Comment from jessizero
Your text and background are the same color, meaning that it's very difficult to read. I had to copy and paste to be able to see it.
I really liked the poem you wrote, though. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Your text and background are the same color, meaning that it's very difficult to read. I had to copy and paste to be able to see it.
I really liked the poem you wrote, though. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thanks I will change. The text was suppose to be white. I have changed the background and font.
Comment from Mintybee
This poem meets the requirement of using exactly 25 words. "A path of starry crushed ice" is a beautiful image for stars. I found that ending the second line with "a" a bit uncomfortable. It feels like your line break is in the middle of a thought. If you wrote it "Our eyes travelled with hope and love/A path of starry crushed ice..." I think it would work better. It's a beautiful poem.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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This poem meets the requirement of using exactly 25 words. "A path of starry crushed ice" is a beautiful image for stars. I found that ending the second line with "a" a bit uncomfortable. It feels like your line break is in the middle of a thought. If you wrote it "Our eyes travelled with hope and love/A path of starry crushed ice..." I think it would work better. It's a beautiful poem.
Mintybee
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Thanks for the read and suggestion. I will give it a try.