Dementia
This is about having dimentia and how it changes a person.52 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow, your author notes are heart breaking. I'm so sorry for what you and your mom went through. It was the same with my grandma. It's a very difficult situation.
Knowing what I know from your notes, I would add more to your poem.
An example...
"Dementia robbed my sweet mother from me."
You can make changes until the contest begins. But even if you don't change it for the contest, you can do it after it's over too. I just would like to read more of your amazing story in the poem.
It's an exceptional entry for the Seven Words or Less Poem writing prompt contest. Good luck!
Gypsy
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Wow, your author notes are heart breaking. I'm so sorry for what you and your mom went through. It was the same with my grandma. It's a very difficult situation.
Knowing what I know from your notes, I would add more to your poem.
An example...
"Dementia robbed my sweet mother from me."
You can make changes until the contest begins. But even if you don't change it for the contest, you can do it after it's over too. I just would like to read more of your amazing story in the poem.
It's an exceptional entry for the Seven Words or Less Poem writing prompt contest. Good luck!
Gypsy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from royowen
There's something absolutely debilitating and horrid about dementia, it robs them of their soul and is a mocker, I'm so glad you never resented her at any time. Good luck, blessings Roy
Typo: as this is a seven word contest, you might be disqualified for having only four words.
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There's something absolutely debilitating and horrid about dementia, it robs them of their soul and is a mocker, I'm so glad you never resented her at any time. Good luck, blessings Roy
Typo: as this is a seven word contest, you might be disqualified for having only four words.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Dementia is sad. It is a disease which can make a person not be themself. In tribute of your mom, your poem says every word about this horrible disease. They can slow the disease down but is there a cure? God Bless You.
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Dementia is sad. It is a disease which can make a person not be themself. In tribute of your mom, your poem says every word about this horrible disease. They can slow the disease down but is there a cure? God Bless You.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from Cathy M
I like this poem a lot, the picture chosen is also well thought out. We must never forget about those whose world revolves in small places because of a disease of the mind and those of the body.
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I like this poem a lot, the picture chosen is also well thought out. We must never forget about those whose world revolves in small places because of a disease of the mind and those of the body.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
Firstly, I am sorry for your loss of you mom. This is a powerful entry in the "Seven Words or Less" poetry contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. However, your message is weakened when the word dementia is misspelled everywhere except in your title. It's misspelled in the description above the title, in the poem and all through your AN.
The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
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Firstly, I am sorry for your loss of you mom. This is a powerful entry in the "Seven Words or Less" poetry contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. However, your message is weakened when the word dementia is misspelled everywhere except in your title. It's misspelled in the description above the title, in the poem and all through your AN.
The visual fits well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from Loren .
Indeed, the long good-bye that tests the bonds of our love and strength of our character. It is said that we are only truly known when we act out when we think no one is looking. Your taking care of your mom while it appeared to her that you were not there, speaks volumes of your love an commitment to her. Thank you for this post! Loren
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Indeed, the long good-bye that tests the bonds of our love and strength of our character. It is said that we are only truly known when we act out when we think no one is looking. Your taking care of your mom while it appeared to her that you were not there, speaks volumes of your love an commitment to her. Thank you for this post! Loren
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from Kaiku
Very good and compelling. I am sure this will garner a lot of attention and praise. I hate like hell the thought of being struck with this ailment. Thanks for sharing.
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Very good and compelling. I am sure this will garner a lot of attention and praise. I hate like hell the thought of being struck with this ailment. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How very sad this is and you were able to rise above it all and still care for your Mother and love her even though all traces of her had disappeared. I feel for you and I am so sorry for your loss. I wish they could find a cure for this awful disease. Your few words speak volumes, love Dolly x
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How very sad this is and you were able to rise above it all and still care for your Mother and love her even though all traces of her had disappeared. I feel for you and I am so sorry for your loss. I wish they could find a cure for this awful disease. Your few words speak volumes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from Nicki Nance
You chose the perfect photo for this, and squeezed a lot of story into very few words. I was distracted by the spelling of dementia. When I saw it as the title, I thought it made reference to the dimming of perceptions. The misspelling in your description made it just look like mispelling.
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You chose the perfect photo for this, and squeezed a lot of story into very few words. I was distracted by the spelling of dementia. When I saw it as the title, I thought it made reference to the dimming of perceptions. The misspelling in your description made it just look like mispelling.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A succinct poem that covers an unfortunate problem. The succinctness echoes well the starkness of the condition. The presentation enhances the poem.
Suggestion:
The proper spelling is dementia according to internet searches.
Thanks for sharing.
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A succinct poem that covers an unfortunate problem. The succinctness echoes well the starkness of the condition. The presentation enhances the poem.
Suggestion:
The proper spelling is dementia according to internet searches.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
