Winter wanes
7 words or less poem18 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
I really enjoyed the first two lines. They read well, "...pale February sunlight",
However the last line using the term flits seemed out of kilter with the wording of the first two lines. Perhaps another word instead of flits or even a different last 3 words, I find freedom, I lack loneliness...etc. It just seemed to lack impact for me.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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I really enjoyed the first two lines. They read well, "...pale February sunlight",
However the last line using the term flits seemed out of kilter with the wording of the first two lines. Perhaps another word instead of flits or even a different last 3 words, I find freedom, I lack loneliness...etc. It just seemed to lack impact for me.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2023
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Great review , thoughtfully constructed. zanya
Comment from June Sargent
I did see a fly in my house today - wish it was a butterfly instead! It must be very confused, as the temps were hovering around 50 degrees the past couple of weeks and tonight we are at 7 degrees below zero! I wish winter was waning... I love your optimism.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I did see a fly in my house today - wish it was a butterfly instead! It must be very confused, as the temps were hovering around 50 degrees the past couple of weeks and tonight we are at 7 degrees below zero! I wish winter was waning... I love your optimism.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Love this review Zanya
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Right now, as I read this, the temperature here in Upstate NY is -5 degrees (with the wind chill, it's -15) So this picture of the beautiful butterfly somewhere in "a pale February light" was most hearteneing! Thank you for brightening my day, and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Right now, as I read this, the temperature here in Upstate NY is -5 degrees (with the wind chill, it's -15) So this picture of the beautiful butterfly somewhere in "a pale February light" was most hearteneing! Thank you for brightening my day, and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Delighted to hear that this little butterfly made an impact zanya
Comment from patricia dillon
A very beautiful image of a colourful butterfly in seemingly inhospitable conditions. This certainly has impact. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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A very beautiful image of a colourful butterfly in seemingly inhospitable conditions. This certainly has impact. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Superb review zanya
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You're welcome
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent choice of image, and a nice few words where you leave the reader to join the dots. Well done. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Excellent choice of image, and a nice few words where you leave the reader to join the dots. Well done. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Well said..join the dots! Good to hear from you zanya
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the Seven Words or Less Poem writing prompt contest.
Good word count and flow. Great words choices.
Excellent satori that sounds so melodious....butterfly flits...
I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Wonderful entry for the Seven Words or Less Poem writing prompt contest.
Good word count and flow. Great words choices.
Excellent satori that sounds so melodious....butterfly flits...
I love the imagery and presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Superb reveiw zanya
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Butterflies are marvelous to look at. Their wings look so fragile. Butterflies are attracted to light, If a butterfly flits after you, it may be a sign that your inner light is shining. A white butterfly may also be following you because you are unaware of an important change in your life. Like your poem.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Butterflies are marvelous to look at. Their wings look so fragile. Butterflies are attracted to light, If a butterfly flits after you, it may be a sign that your inner light is shining. A white butterfly may also be following you because you are unaware of an important change in your life. Like your poem.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from Cathy M
I love the simplicity of this and yet it speaks volumes about the last days of winter and the beginning of new life. Your picture is perfect for this poem.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I love the simplicity of this and yet it speaks volumes about the last days of winter and the beginning of new life. Your picture is perfect for this poem.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Superb review zanya
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry in the "Seven Words or Less" poetry contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. I also like your alliteration title with the "w".
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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This is a good entry in the "Seven Words or Less" poetry contest. The text is a good size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. I also like your alliteration title with the "w".
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Great review zanya
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I see lots of butterflies in February and this is because I sometimes live in a different climate, but I have rarely seen a butterfly in February in England. This butterfly looks like it has found a home indoors, a magical write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I see lots of butterflies in February and this is because I sometimes live in a different climate, but I have rarely seen a butterfly in February in England. This butterfly looks like it has found a home indoors, a magical write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Great review zanya