A Narrow Trail
Forays into Forms ~ Quatern25 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This quatern, A Narrow Trail, has the proper formatting and suggests the older citizen traversing the cold and snow with the same determination that brought him to this elder state.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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This quatern, A Narrow Trail, has the proper formatting and suggests the older citizen traversing the cold and snow with the same determination that brought him to this elder state.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Hello Bill. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
That picture looks so familiar, but then I've been out in the woods a lot in my life. Most of the time, roads and trails in the woods lead to a lake.
I like the line you chose to be repeated,
"he ambled on a narrow trail"
This man was deep in thought as he journeyed along. All kinds of things go through your mind when you're alone. (Actually, this would have been a good entry for the "Alone" contest, but I forget if that was for poetry or prose.) He was a bit worried about a storm coming, but not worried enough to hurry. We don't know his destination, whether he was headed home or going out to a cabin on the lake.
Thanks for teaching the Quatern. I need to try some of these poetic forms, but I'm always so busy with reviews. I'll never catch up!
Nicely penned! Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Hi Melissa,
That picture looks so familiar, but then I've been out in the woods a lot in my life. Most of the time, roads and trails in the woods lead to a lake.
I like the line you chose to be repeated,
"he ambled on a narrow trail"
This man was deep in thought as he journeyed along. All kinds of things go through your mind when you're alone. (Actually, this would have been a good entry for the "Alone" contest, but I forget if that was for poetry or prose.) He was a bit worried about a storm coming, but not worried enough to hurry. We don't know his destination, whether he was headed home or going out to a cabin on the lake.
Thanks for teaching the Quatern. I need to try some of these poetic forms, but I'm always so busy with reviews. I'll never catch up!
Nicely penned! Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2023
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Hello KB. Thank you. I really appreciate your thoughts on my rambling and ambling Quatern :). I love to try new forms and think its fun to manipulate words to a purpose. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a beautiful, metphoric poem. I love your rhyme scheme and the imagery is so vivid. Together with the art work, it's a splendid post. I have read it several times and it gives me chills. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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This is a beautiful, metphoric poem. I love your rhyme scheme and the imagery is so vivid. Together with the art work, it's a splendid post. I have read it several times and it gives me chills. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Hello Mary. Thanks so much. I did use metaphors quite a bit in that poem. Life seems to be a challenge sometimes. I am glad you liked it.
Melissa
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You are welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Melissa, I never heard of a Quatern before. I like it a lot. I like the sound of repeating lines too, you used them well. Your rhymes are not forced and the sound is wonderful.
Well done. My friend.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Melissa, I never heard of a Quatern before. I like it a lot. I like the sound of repeating lines too, you used them well. Your rhymes are not forced and the sound is wonderful.
Well done. My friend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Hi Gypsy. Thanks so much. I like to try new forms and I haven't written a Quatern in over two years, so it was time to take it out for a spin. LOL. I am glad you enjoyed it!
Melissa
Comment from l.raven
Hi Melissa, how are you doing my sweet friend...
I got a chill just walking with this man...
knowing there was a storm on the way...
causing him to be a bit nerves...he got
strength through prayer...and continued
on his journey with ease...
I love your poem sweet girl...this is not
an easy form...but you did it perfect...
and your picture speaks for itself...
very well written you...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Hi Melissa, how are you doing my sweet friend...
I got a chill just walking with this man...
knowing there was a storm on the way...
causing him to be a bit nerves...he got
strength through prayer...and continued
on his journey with ease...
I love your poem sweet girl...this is not
an easy form...but you did it perfect...
and your picture speaks for itself...
very well written you...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Hello sweet Linda... thank you for your wonderful words and encouraging spirit. Quatern poetry is a challenge, but fun too!! Hugs!!
Melissa
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your always so welcome sweet girl...
love you...xxoo
Comment from Jasmine Girl
It's nice to see you trying new forms. I can't believe you write poems with no meter requirement. You love meters. This poem is written with iambic meter.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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It's nice to see you trying new forms. I can't believe you write poems with no meter requirement. You love meters. This poem is written with iambic meter.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Lisa. :)
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your quatern poem! And I liked how you added more about this man's journey as the refrain kept reminding us about the narrow trail which became evident as a metaphor for life.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Loved your quatern poem! And I liked how you added more about this man's journey as the refrain kept reminding us about the narrow trail which became evident as a metaphor for life.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you for your lovely words, Helen. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Great work with your rhyme and flow. Your repeating line traveled beautifully through all the stanzas. It seems that this man didn't realize what he was getting into when he was out. He just wanted to amble on his way, lost in thought. Then a storm comes up which gathers in strength. His prayers gave him the fortitude to carry on. A very positive thought in your quatern. Love picture to accompany, especially with the footprints in the snow. judi
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Great work with your rhyme and flow. Your repeating line traveled beautifully through all the stanzas. It seems that this man didn't realize what he was getting into when he was out. He just wanted to amble on his way, lost in thought. Then a storm comes up which gathers in strength. His prayers gave him the fortitude to carry on. A very positive thought in your quatern. Love picture to accompany, especially with the footprints in the snow. judi
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hi Judi. Thanks, my friend. I am glad you liked this Quatern... I have not written one in quite a while and thought I would take one out for a spin LOL.
Melissa
Comment from kahpot
A wonderful quatern, your descending line is excellent in every stanza, as are the rhyming words, navigating our way through life can be tricky, an excellent read****kahpot
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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A wonderful quatern, your descending line is excellent in every stanza, as are the rhyming words, navigating our way through life can be tricky, an excellent read****kahpot
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thanks so much, Kim. I so appreciate your take on this Quatern. I haven't written one in quite some time. :)
Melissa
Comment from royowen
My admiration dear Melissa, you are truly a good wordsmith with the ability to manoeuvre beautifully between forms, and with this to stay on form and on theme, I love to review your work, so true to structure and glowingly brilliant, well done, blessing Roy
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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My admiration dear Melissa, you are truly a good wordsmith with the ability to manoeuvre beautifully between forms, and with this to stay on form and on theme, I love to review your work, so true to structure and glowingly brilliant, well done, blessing Roy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, Roy! I remember you wrote a Quatern not too long ago and I've always thought I would follow your lead... you craft pretty ones that flow beautifully. :)
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Bless you